Last night, on a late-night whim (that also led to a somewhat hare-brained scheme related to starting the Crow Agricultural Revolution), I wrote a bit of a short horror story. I say it's a horror story but honestly I may have gone to subtle with it and ended up with a multi-paragraph description of evolution. Anyway, point is, I wrote a short story.
Here it is.
I'd appreciate any comments or criticism people can give me on it. I think I've actually got a good idea here, but some outside perspectives could help me make an all-around better story.