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Posted by Aderia , Jun 02 2012 · 475 views

Flash Fiction Marathon
Theme: CoT- Treasure
Word Count: 483
Story: Cinderella


She spins and she sways
To whatever song plays
Without a care in the world
And I'm sitting her wearing
The weight of the world on my shoulders

I am looking into baby-blue eyes, so big that that I can see my reflection, as I sit in the rocker and sing off key since mother is running late tonight. I smile my own goofy daddy smile into those eyes, and your toothless smile is reflected back at me.

Beautiful, and I will remember it forever.

It's been a long day
And there's still work to do
She's pulling at me
Saying "Dad, I need you,"

I toss you over my shoulder and spin in tight circles, calling you a sack of potatoes. Your adorable giggles that melt my heart are intermingled with chattering words that you've only just learned. Too dizzy now, I set you down, and you amble over to your beautiful mother, your palm-sized feet leaving palm-sized indents in the grass. You are the most precious walkie-talkie I will ever have.

Beautiful, and I will keep it in my heart forever.

"There's a ball at the castle
And I've been invited
And I need to practice my dancing
Oh, please, Daddy, please?"

I stand, cheering at the top of my lungs, to your mother's embarrassment. She claps enthusiastically, but leans over and asks me what could possibly be so intense about pee-wee soccer. I shrug and cheer louder. You stumble over the soccer ball, which comes all the way up to your toddler thighs, and your peals of laughter warble through the air like butterflies.

Beautiful, and I will love it forever.

So I will dance with Cinderella
While she is here in my arms

And time passes as it does, with its own enigmatic manner. Time is callous, unyielding, and merciless, not bothering to stop for anyone or anything. It leeches strength from the very bones of the greatest of us, leaving frail shells spotted with age.

Still, time is generous and compassionate, feeding life into the youngest and brightest of us, strengthening them and giving them wisdom. Helping them to grow up, flowing with just enough benevolence to let you live life to the fullest.

The whole thing is beautiful, and it's the world we live in.

'Cause I know something the prince never knew
Oh, I will dance with Cinderella

The world we live in is so big, I can't fathom it.

But my world is so small, but it's all that I can fathom.

It is you, my beautiful daughter.

I don't want to miss even one song
'Cause all too soon the clock will strike midnight

It is you. Your smile, your laughing eyes, your hugs that you dive into with all your heart, the melody in your name, and the sweet sound of 'daddy' carried by your voice. It's what I live for, and what I treasure above all else.

And she'll be gone...


(Disclaimer: Lyrics belong to Steven Curtis Chapman.)

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So I didn't read this until today when I was making the polls (I was super busy when I first put up some of the earlier polls, like Treasure), and I have to say: I completely loved it. The writing style is great as always (or I guess to be correct, always would be "every time I've read one of your stories" since I haven't read too many but definitely plan to), the song is amazing (I haven't heard it in a couple years, I don't think, so thank you for reminding me of an amazing song that is now on my iPod =P), and the story is absolutely beautiful. Maybe it's because I love stories like this, where the dad is perfect to his son or daughter (also why my vignette "The Tower" is one of my favorite stories I have ever written). And you really pulled it off very, very well.

As I said in the poll, this is seriously one of my favorite stories in the whole contest. Again, probably most of it is due to the fact that I like stories like this (kinda funny, really, since I also like really dark stories =P), but it was done very well. Kudos, Aderia.

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Since the topic for my old 'library' has long ago dropped off the face of the planet into the backpages of this site, here are my current works housed on BZP.

Faux: Reveiw Topic (In Progress)New!!!

Short Stories
The Ga-Matoran Who Couldn't Swim*
Lessons of the Past*
Turn Your Tears to Roses*
Sound the Bugle*
Forget the Mountain*
Walking Her Home
Thankful Hearts
Black Diamonds
Long Live*
The Lonely
All Our Sins Remembered
Reality's Fantasy
Dark VanityNEW!!

COT Short Stories

River, Oh River, Flow Gently For MeNEW!!

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