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That would be glorious and deserving of an A. Who cares about the rest of the paper.

No, you need more sophisticated language: "The historical progress of diplomacy in this comparable instance rapidly escalated into the eminent outbreak of war."

 

 

No, you need more sophisticated language: "The historical progress of diplomacy in this comparable instance rapidly escalated into the eminent outbreak of war."

 

 

No no no, this the IB program.  You must ask, "To what extent was the historical progress of diplomacy in this comparable instance rapidly escalated into eminent outbreak of war?"

That's not a thesis statement. A thesis statement in this context is a statement of firm and absolute historical fact that you then prove using evidence. 

 

(In literature class, it gets fuzzier, but best to have a statement of fact, or at least a very good theory, otherwise you're sunk.)