Helryx And The Shadowed One
New short story! Please go read and hopefully review it.
It's really a scene more than a full short story, a reimagination of the time Helryx appears on the deck of the Shadowed One's ship and stops him from destroying Xia. I really didn't remember how the original scene played out, and only looked it up as I was writing so I could get what happened correct. But I kept my initial image of it, wherein Helryx had enlisted the Dark Hunters anonymously and, since I had forgotten about them, the Toa Hagah were nowhere in sight. And just expanded from there, with a little help from Janus and Smeag.
Some critique on it would be quite lovely, especially on the Shadowed One. I've never written him before (whereas I never, ever tire of writing Helryx because of how awesome she is) and I want to know how realistically he turned out.
I also thought, upon re-reading the original scene, that Helryx would go to much more interesting lengths to make a point than just throwing people overboard, so I kept my original idea instead of the real one. Heh.
~ ToM
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