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One Queen to Another


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(As I said before, I plan to start Chapter 2 of Divine Strength with a wave exchange between the Queens of Light and Sea. Since it's fairly short, I figured I'd just post it here directly. Hopefully this gives some insight into both characters and their relationship with each other.)

 

Sea:

 

I’m sorry to hear about what happened to your agreement with Nature—don’t fret, your soldiers didn’t offer the information, I dug it out of them. We agreed on a 20% increase in imports starting next month. When they return, they can answer any other questions you may have. As for the reports, I’ve read enough to know that I was right: the one behind these events is someone I have an interest in dealing with personally, and I am planning to depart tomorrow to hunt down the snake and take him into custody. However, since these recent incidents have had more of an effect on Ceandi than Bivor, I will understand if you would rather handle it. Please let me know.

 

Light

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Light:

 

First, I want to thank you for taking on such a large increase in trade. But if it ends up hurting Bivor, promise me that you will let me know, alright? I don’t want your queendom to suffer for lending us aid. As for the incidents…if two Queens are poking around in the same area, will that not be even more suspicious than my continued activities there? It would be no stretch to imagine War taking this as an excuse to start harassing us. How important is this matter? You’re not one to hold grudges, but you seem oddly invested in finding this man.

 

 

Sea

 

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Sea:

 

I promise to keep you updated on Bivor’s economy. Do not worry, I am sure all will go well. In regards to this sorcerer, his name is Riniyon. He is the one who launched a feeble attack against Bivor during my previous lifetime but managed to escape from my dungeon. What I haven’t told you is that he has been popping up every now and then for several decades now, causing trouble for me for reasons unknown. He has been a thorn in my side for much too long. I want to stop his foolishness and, perhaps, find out why it is that he hates we Queens so badly. I believe I can find his lair quickly, as I am somewhat familiar with his habits after all this time, and, truthfully…I think it will be most satisfying to confront the coward directly. So I will ask you plainly, Sea: please allow me this.

 

 

Light

 

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Light:

 

Haha, I know that tone. I can’t talk you out of this, can I? Very well, I’ll keep my distance. But Light, you do tend to get a little reckless when you’re this focused—I know you said Riniyon is actually quite weak, but if he has escaped and evaded your capture this long, he may be more cunning than he lets on. Or he could just be lucky. Either way, I would advise you to be ready for anything. It never hurts to be cautious, right?

 

 

Sea

 

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Sea:

 

I suppose I can get rather carried away…and you do have a point. I’ll try to be careful. For now, I think I will retire; should anything momentous happen in my investigation, I will keep you informed. Until then.

 

 

Light

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I'm not sure how this is shaping up. The prologue gives away how this thing ends, which really takes the suspense out of this whole thing.

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What do you mean? The prologue happened many years before this. Unless you mean the example of Light's powers makes the reader feel like the same thing is going to happen again? I can see that--I tried to lessen it a bit by saying that Riniyon has escaped multiple times in the past, but maybe it's inevitable. Still, what I'm planning might come as a surprise...

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What do you mean? The prologue happened many years before this. Unless you mean the example of Light's powers makes the reader feel like the same thing is going to happen again? I can see that--I tried to lessen it a bit by saying that Riniyon has escaped multiple times in the past, but maybe it's inevitable. Still, what I'm planning might come as a surprise...

I see. You didn't exactly make it clear that the prologue was several years prior, or I didn't get it, or something.

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Sorry about that--I meant to by having Light say that Riniyon's attack was in her previous lifetime, but maybe I should make it clearer. He definitely looks a lot older at this point in time, so hopefully seeing him interact with Light again will clear up any confusion.

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