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Stop writing poetry


Kakaru

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no

NO

NONONO

 

YOU ARE NOT A POEMER WHY ARE YOU POEMING

 

YOU ARE BAD WITH WORDS

 

The blinding gleam of a world revealed

A nation fallen, a people healed

Canisters open, revealing their worth

Tired feet breaking the surf

 

A band of heroes together once more

The ache of the journey, bloody and sore

A ring of stones, powers combined

To sacrifice duty for destiny's time

 

The elders stand in the light of the isle

The mountains and trees stretching for miles

Matoran step out of their pods, unaware

of the danger befallen a city down there

 

Memories gone, a life come anew

Village-huts from the ground; black, green and blue

Circuits forsaken for the peace of the earth

Ignorance, bliss, as evidenced by their mirth

 

Yes, a life comes anew as the old city falls

But a shadow murmurs in underground halls

Peace cannot stand in the force of a gale

The Makuta will rise to destroy and to kill

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Poeming hurts my head. I tried it once and didn't like it. And then there were a few people that liked the result, but then came the critics who actually knew something about poeming.

 

Poemish poems are for poemly poemers. Not me. I'm a proser. I'll go start prosing now.

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Good, although I wish the end of the second and last stanzas rhymed.

 

As for people who should stop writing poetry, the real ones who should are those who take prose sentences and format them as if they were a poem, when there's no rhyme scheme, meter, or anything that actually makes it a real poem. That's not poetry, dangit!

 

~B~

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I feel like I've seen bits of this before...

You haven't.

 

Poeming hurts my head. I tried it once and didn't like it. And then there were a few people that liked the result, but then came the critics who actually knew something about poeming.

 

Poemish poems are for poemly poemers. Not me. I'm a proser. I'll go start prosing now.

Well to be fair, your did more or less inspire me to try poeming, so it's about par for the course for a free-verse poem. :v

 

Good, although I wish the end of the second and last stanzas rhymed.

 

As for people who should stop writing poetry, the real ones who should are those who take prose sentences and format them as if they were a poem, when there's no rhyme scheme, meter, or anything that actually makes it a real poem. That's not poetry, dangit!

 

~B~

Basically this is how I feel about poeming, but then I was raised on poems by poemers that actually knew how to poem and rhymed about it, like Shel Silverstein.

 

also that last bit is kind of a half rhyme I know but it felt like a good place to stop before the entire thing got really muddled and the rhymes degenerated into prose

 

I Can Not Write The

Poetry That You Want Me

To Bla Bla Bla Bla

 

:music:

This, on the other hand,is glorious. Haiku is the only way to freeverse poeming.

 

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