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Throw in a laconic phrase ala Han Solo.

Tomorrow (or I guess...tomorrow is today...you get me) I could PM you some tips. I'm not really a genius at it myself, though.

Um...

 

Epic fight scene.

 

While FLYING.

 

On broomsticks!

 

Yep, nothing like professing your love to someone while blasting Death Eaters from the sky.

 

-Nukaya

I'll say it once, I'll say it twice:

 

"You go ahead, Velox," Jural said, bearing a mischievous smile. "I think that I deserve to spend a little more time with Kyera... we have a lot to catch up on." He leaned into his girlfriend, and gave her peck on the cheek. Kyera giggled happily, then turned her head to return his kiss.

 

 

-K

I'll say it once, I'll say it twice:

 

"You go ahead, Velox," Jural said, bearing a mischievous smile. "I think that I deserve to spend a little more time with Kyera... we have a lot to catch up on." He leaned into his girlfriend, and gave her peck on the cheek. Kyera giggled happily, then turned her head to return his kiss.

 

 

-K

 

For those of you who don't already know, the above is a good example of why I need help. ><

THIS is how you write a good love scene:

 

"I love you."

 

"Me too."

 

" "

 

" "

 

EPIC LULZ. XD

Love doesn't exist in Bionicle (well, up until yesterday, when it was confirmed it actually does...), as it's meant for kids, who obviously don't like that kind of stuff.

 

 

-K

well, up until yesterday, when it was confirmed it actually does...

 

Did I miss that?

 

Eh, it's hard unless you can get one of your lovers to have a good laid-back personality to clash with a more passionate/sappy personality for the other. That way, you can sorta balance the sappiness...

Eh . . . I guess you could PM me and I could tell you how I pull it off. I'm rather well-known amongst my readers for the cute scenes.

Eh . . . I guess you could PM me and I could tell you how I pull it off. I'm rather well-known amongst my readers for the cute scenes.

 

IMO, it seems that girls are better at that type of thing. *shrugs*

 

All I know is that I lol'd when I read all of your posts, Nuju.

 

I just realized that I've never written, attempted to write, thought of attempting to write, or imagined myself thinking of attempting to write a love scene.

 

I've always found that the best way to express love in writing doesn't always involve straight-out talking about love. I can't really explain it, it's just a force that links people together, it's kinda unexplainable. Use other people for inspiration, if you can

I haven't written many love scenes in my fanfiction, since a number of Bionicle fans don't really like romance involved, but I think there are different types of love you might try to capture. I did pull off an "awkward crush" thing in my story "Inferno: Wexl's Chronicle", I think that's the easiest to write about.

Characters who are both openly and knowingly in love, though, now that's pretty difficult. Like I said before, constant "omg i <3 u" isn't necessary but the occasional gushy one-liners [or whatever ya'd call them] are okay as long as they're not cheesy. Try listening to inspiring music before or during your writing (I find inspiration for love-stuff from The Beatles, Green Day, and MCR pretty often, I know you're a fan of the former =P).

And that's about all I have to offer. Just write from your heart, not from your brain. If you know what I mean

~cap'n

Just don't do it. All good writing doesn't need romance. See Ender's Game. A lot of novelists try and stuff in some sort of romantic subplot that really has no time to develop during the main plot and ends up rushed and predictable, stuffed into the last twenty pages. If you really want to do it, sure, but I'd try the story without and then if it really seems completely empty then go ahead.

Well, I've only just begun to experiment with adding a romantic angle to my bionicle stories, so I'm probably not the best source for advice on how to write love scenes without sappiness. But, there are a couple things that would definitely help - namely making the characters awkward in the scene and adding a bit of humor.

To me, the big reason why most bad love scenes are sappy is because they simply aren't natural. The characters exchange dialogue that is so contrived that it seems like they know they're in a movie, as real romance never plays out like in Hollywood. Instead, the characters should act like they would in real life - if they're new to the love game, then they should be nervous and show their axiety through their dialogue and their actions. In the same way, a character who has had failed relationships in the past shouldn't open up to a new lover unless that is true to their character, and their past relationships should influence the dialogue that they exchange between the other characters. No nervous lover is ever going to talk like in the movies, and no heart-broken lover should react to a new lover like their previous relationships never happened. It should be one of a writer's prime concerns to create scenes that deal with love in a way that is true to the character - as staying true to the personalities of your creations should be the prime concern no matter what you're writing.

Secondly, humor also will help to eliminate some of the sappiness, and this also ties in perfectly with the aformentioned awkwardness that new lovers should experience. Odd but sincere reactions to love and other parts of life can often just as funny as purely comedic moments, and done right, they won't hurt the overall message or tone of the story at all. Things like having the characters trip as they walk together in the night or, in the case of Bionicle, having their masks clank together loudly as they try to kiss may seem rather silly, but in reality I'd say they add the needed realism to love scenes. Maybe not everyone feels this way, but you've got to admit that adding awkward moments like this would definitely be preferable to having the love play out like a cheesy Hollywood romance, with absolutely no mistakes and every scene playing out like it was washed of any imperfections.

Anyway, that's all I realy have to say about this, and again, I probably wouldn't advise on using my advice over the advice of some of the more experienced writers here. All I know is that I share your want to not write love scenes that are incredibly sappy, and my advice probably isn't that original. I guess the best piece of advice is just to delve into the personalities of your characters and write the scenes from their prospectives, rather than filling them with dialogue and actions that don't line up with everything that you've previously established about them. Like I said, the biggest problem with bad romance is that it isn't natural and feels too polished over - and without realistic flaws and failure, no scene in a story can really be anything but cheesy.

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