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Why does this lack comments? Hmm.

 

Onto the poem, it's quite good. You did a splendid job with it. The lines about ash and a nightmare is interesting.

 

Anyway, there are people that care about you, and your problems. If they didn't, they wouldn't be friends now would they?

 

I don't see your poems as whiny, but in fact, another form of art by you to further express yourself. With words, and not the pencil. If you understand what I mean, of course.

It stroke me that the last four lines describes perfectly not how I feel, but how I think most of the time. I think I´d collapse if I wasn´t able to distract my mind from such things. But perhaps it would be better to, like you did, put it to words instead?

Anyway - you may say 'whiny', I say that it can only be whiny when there´s no actual reason behind it. And if nothing else, a lot of thoughts are into this, which even on their own would make a good enough reason.

 

As for the last verse - although ( I think) I understand much of it, I´m constantly drawn towards that part, because I do identify with that. And though I really think you worry just a slight bit too much (then again, everyone one else than oneself always seems to worry too much, right?), I find it comforting to know that such thoughts doesn´t make me stand out from the crowd in any particularly bad way. Not to say that it is unsignificant, but to say that when it´s agreed upon, it doesn´t seem as bad a thing. Not to me, at least.

 

~MOSM~