Posted Nov 26 2013 - 04:19 PM
I don't normally look in the epics section, but I'm glad I did. The Nu-Matoran are really creative and I like your story so far. I like how you made it so both sides were either good or evil depending solely on interpretation. Your writing also is really good and you were able to set the scene very well.
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Posted Nov 26 2013 - 04:49 PM
I have to say I was positively surprised. The Nu-Matoran as a concept fit in relatively well, I can pretty feasibly imagine Metru Nui having nuclear reactors. Turaga Dume's actions, however, can only be excused if he's Teridax in disguise, which I'm going to assume he is.
The "bottomless chasm" is a mildy interesting idea, at the very least I'm interested to learn more
My only real problem so far is that final moment where Whenua shows up and drops the Nu-Matoran into a ditch. It seems far too careless of him, I could've gotten behind Onewa or Matau doing something like this, but Whenua? Sorry, son, no dice.
In the end, however, it was interesting enough that I feel it warranted my attention.
Posted Dec 03 2013 - 07:23 PM
Thanks for the reviews, we are taking a short break from posting to write more chapters, and will return soon.
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