Edited by Zarayna: The Quiet Light, Aug 09 2012 - 08:58 PM.
Posted Feb 08 2012 - 09:25 AM
Posted Feb 08 2012 - 11:09 AM
Posted Feb 08 2012 - 11:18 AM
I'm glad I surprised you then. ^.^
Usually when you read one of these stories it's about some Toa running from a Makuta, or a Matoran from some Rahi, and then at the end they die in fear and what not. It's been done soo many times before and the enjoyment of it varies.
Hmm, don't think I edited that one. Now i need to typo hunt.
However, I really got to say while this has been done before, I liked the twist on it being a BZP Member against the Staff. I found it interesting and unique. I noticed no real grammar problems except for... where was it... huh. lol I can't find it so you may have edited it before I wrote this. Anyway it was the word "not" with an extra letter I'm pretty sure. Just a typo.
I didn't have that problem, I think I was laughing too hard while writing for it.
Finally while I did enjoy the story, I will say for me, personally it was kinda awkward reading this since most of the time Staff Members do a pretty good job of keeping the peace, (at least in my time on BZP and BS01). So reading from one of the trouble maker members was kinda cool and different.
Thanks for the review, I'm glad you enjoyed it.
But regardless a nice short story with a new take. And hey it took me less than two mins to read, that's how smooth your writing is. Thanks again Zar for a real good story. c=