The Review Topic
Torith (TOOR-ith) – Male Toa Exa of Fire, and the leader of the Toa Exa. The defender of Ta-Wahi, Torith can control the element of fire and wields a pair of long swords, as well as boot additions that allow him to channel his elemental powers through his feet. A dutiful Toa and somewhat of an idol in Ta-Wahi, Torith manages to hold the respect of his villagers with relative ease, though occasionally yearns for his past life.
Levrok (lehv-rock) – Male Toa Exa of Air. The guardian of Le-Wahi, Levrok is usually lax and cheerful, though easily slips into a more serious, yet tranquil fury when the need arises. He utilizes a pair of wings and a half-moon spear along with his ability to control air. A scope is built into his mask, allowing him to perform scouting duties from the air, and like Torith, possesses boot additions.
Jaeda (JAY-duh) – Female Makuta, and one of the two primary watchers of Kra-Wahi and Exa-Nui. The older sibling and almost polar opposite of Xaeda, Jaeda seeks to protect the Orbs from Tarius.
Xaeda (ZAY-duh) – Male Makuta; one of the two primary keepers of peace on Exa-Nui and in Kra-Wahi. The physical brawn to Jaeda’s extreme intelligence, Xaeda seeks to protect the Orbs from Tarius.
Dága (DAY-guh; “Dusk”) – Male Dark Hunter; formerly a Toa Exa. Possesses control over the element of fire and the ability to turn transparent. Wears a Kanohi Kualsi, the Mask of Quick Travel, and wields a pair of long swords in combat. A very cautious individual, Dága prefers to keep to himself and shows respect where it is due, though jealousy in the past has caused him to turn to a life with the Dark Hunters as opposed to his original calling. He seems to possess a fairly bad temper when faced with specific things, such as Artanians.
“Huntress” – Female Dark Hunter; formerly a Toa Exa, now transformed into a monstrous individual. Possesses control over ice, and has an odd liking for Kraata, which apparently have special effects on her when ingested. An apparently absentminded individual, Huntress is nevertheless a capable fighter and strategist when she needs to be.
“Pharaoh” – Female Dark Hunter; formerly a Toa Exa who abandoned her duty to the island due to a lack of appreciation for her abilities from the villagers. Possesses elemental sand powers and can speak in an ancient language. Is, apparently, very prideful of both her appearance and her abilities.
“Grim” – Male Dark Hunter; formerly a Toa Exa who left the island with a broken and bitter heart. Can control the element of air and possesses a spider-like lower body, which was gained from experiments by the Dark Hunters. Bears a sly and silver tongue, being able to worm his way out of almost any situation.
“Fraction” – Male Dark Hunter; formerly a Toa Exa, whose short temper led to him being ostracized by the villagers of Exa-Nui in favor of his partner. Controls the element of earth, in direct contrast to the abilities of flight granted to him by the wings that have been implanted onto his back. Speaks with a slow drawl, though is not unintelligent.
“Shifter” – Male Dark Hunter; formerly a Toa Exa, though left the island when his desire for fame, glory, and wealth overtook his sense of duty. Possesses limited control over water, due to the heavy modifications made to him. As a result of these, he has been granted a completely mechanical body that is capable of shape-shifting via component rearrangement. He is suspicious of the Makutas’ intentions, feelings which he has partially shared with Dusk. Further, he refuses to allow others to see him.
Kadris (KAH-driss) – Male, six-armed servant of Makuta Jaeda and Xaeda. Has a very mechanical personality, and serves the Makuta without question. Wears a Kanohi of an unknown power.
Shendus (SHEN-duss) – Male, six-armed servant of the Makuta. Basically the same as Kadris, though has a warrior’s personality and isn’t afraid to give his opinion on the actions of others. Wields a crossbow and a pair of curved swords, as well as an unknown Kanohi.
"The Voice" – Male being, unknown species. Seems to be a military leader for the Makuta, or someone who assigns missions for the Dark Hunters in their name.
Tarius (tuh-RYE-us) – Male Toa of Magnetism. Seeks the Orbs of Exaina for some unknown purpose. Reportedly, his group has caused numerous problems in the past. Tarius appears to be a fairly quiet individual, with a tendency to pause often when he speaks. Despite bearing an overall pleasant personality, there always seems to be something... off... about him. Wields a rapier and wears a Kanohi Elda, Mask of Detection.
“The Gentleman” – Male Ondarian. A bounty hunter and a member of the Guild of Tyis on Kai-Nam, the Gentleman is working for Tarius as a member of the Seekers due to his belief in helping others when they request it, regardless of pay or the nature of the job itself, viewing it as his duty--similar to that of a Toa. A respectable fellow, he always keeps true to his word, particularly in duels. Wields a rapier and wears an unknown mask.
"The Mime" – A mysterious, male Artanian who has been keeping tabs on Torith for an unknown amount of time. With a face shrouded in darkness, it is unknown what Kanohi he wears, though he possesses a strange pair of gloves and the ability to create what seem to be invisible sheets of solidified air.
Laorus (LAO-russ; "The Paladin") – Female Siorun; seems to be a hollow suit of armor given life. Visiting Exa-Nui from her home island of Kayun, as a way to experience “actual life,” Laorus is a fairly icy individual on the outside, though, as Levrok has discovered, warms up fairly quickly if the effort is made to get to know her. Wields a halberd, on which a mass of glowing, blue lines are etched.
--Doro (DOOR-oh) – Male, boar-like Rahi. The faithful steed of Laorus, Doro, too, is essentially a hollow shell, with dozens of blue lines on his body and massive tusks jutting from his mouth. His loyalty to Laorus is unmatched.
Therapon (THERE-uh-pawn) – Male Skakdi of Light. A priest and traveling preacher, spreading the word of the 'Holy One,' Therapon came to Le-Exa with news of its approaching destruction, though his antics have not earned him much positive favor. Wields the elemental power of Light, which he can channel through his scepter, and possesses the uncanny ability to entrance dozens, possibly hundreds of beings at once, causing them to focus on him, as well as an unknown vision power.
- This epic is a rewritten and updated version of Parugi’s original Broken Unity epic. As a result, it possesses several new characters, plots and information that were not present in the original; this is to keep it consistent with Parugi’s more recent works, such as Night Ride and Day Run: The Garden.
- Part of the same continuity as Kal the Guardian’s Robot and Rahkshi and Slicer1234’s Thaken, Gladiator and The Order, as well as Parugi’s RPGs Night Ride and Day Run: The Garden and their tie-in short stories, One and The Report. Through the inclusion of several original characters belonging to Parugi, it is also unofficially related to Kumata’s RPG and epic Tournament of Shadows/Absolute Chronicle, and The Power that Is’s RPG Island of Pain.
Oh boy. First off, I’d like to offer my apologies and thanks to anyone who was following the original Broken Unity with the expectation that I was going to finish it. You certainly drove me forward in writing the story, but as things turned out, I ended up painting myself into a corner that I couldn’t figure out a way to get out of. For that, I am sorry, but this rewrite should hopefully soften the anger or annoyance a little bit – I can promise that it won’t disappoint.
I’d also like to thank a number of people, both on and off of BZPower, for inspiring me to write both incarnations of Broken Unity. Specifically, my biggest thanks go to Slicer1234, Kal the Guardian, Kumata Nuva, The Power that Is, Eyru, Takuta-Nui and my friend Rekktor; without your guys’ influence in various RPGs, epics and just plain conversation, I probably wouldn’t have written nearly as much of BU as I had, and I certainly wouldn’t have considered a remake otherwise.
Edited by X. Luxord, Aug 25 2012 - 04:29 PM.