Posted Apr 05 2012 - 11:40 AM
Hahana: The pose makes him look a lot more solid than he actually is. Basically, his torso is too thin and needs bulking up on the sides rather badly. The gaps in the lower arms are somewhat distracting, as are the silver Visorak pseudo-feet used as armor. Mainly, I'm concerned with the distribution of bulk. As I mentioned, the torso is skinny, as are the upper arms to some extent, but the legs and lower arms are too big and bulky for the MOC, so much so that they look, with a small stretch of the imagination, as if they were cannibalized from a different MOC entirely. (Also, get rid of those L-shaped red parts that stick out of the upper arms.)
Hoka: Black, silver, Metru green, lime green, dark gray ... simply put, there are a few too many colors. The part you used as the chest armor comes in a Metru green-lime swirl, and the rest of the black seems easily removable. I'd like to see more armor on the upper arms and less armor on the lower arms. The lower portion of the upper legs are very skinny and make the legs seem even longer than they are. I suggest rebuilding them to make them slightly shorter, as, like Hahana, they seem to be cannibalized from a larger MOC.
Pari: Her torso's armor is all messed up, really. While the parts you used aren't bad, per se, they look really strange in their current configuration. Remove the claw and add something up above the Avtoran torso to cover the rest of the Inika torso. The arms could serve to be streamlined, as the lower arms are too bulky and seem thrown-together. The upper arms are slightly better but seem rather impractical as far as articulation is concerned. (Also, get rid of those trans-lime Bohrok eyes if you're not going to add trans-lime all over the body as accents.) I like her non-shield weapon, however, even though I might not be entirely sure what it does aside from maybe opening big cans.
Tatoru: This is easily the best MOC of the four. If I didn't know better, I would be willing to bet that the Kaita was the original MOC and that the three Toa were built when it was deconstructed. However, as with any combiner, it suffers from a horrendous color scheme. If I were you, I'd scrap the other Toa and work on a better color scheme for this guy - the only structural complain I can think up is that the ankles might be a little on the smallish side.