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#81 Offline Quote (Mr. Traveler)

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Posted Aug 06 2012 - 05:20 PM

The Artist

Can I get this reviewed if that's fine? Kinda short. :B


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Posted Aug 06 2012 - 05:38 PM

The Artist

Can I get this reviewed if that's fine? Kinda short. :B


Of course! I'll assign it to Jedi Master J. Thank you for choosing the SSCC!

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Posted Aug 08 2012 - 01:54 PM

Might as well start a trend then: Surrounded, Alone by Valixia. Assigned to Nuile.


Yes, sir, ma'am, sir! *salutes* Reviewed, as per request and assignment, thank you for choosing the SSCC. :)

I think I'll further this trend. I would like to request reviews, please, for three individual pieces of flash fiction, found in this compilation: The Chimera, The Right Path, and Feel Good. Assigned to--oh, wait, I can't continue that part of the trend. Oh, well, my gratitude, then.

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Posted Aug 08 2012 - 03:20 PM


Might as well start a trend then: Surrounded, Alone by Valixia. Assigned to Nuile.


Yes, sir, ma'am, sir! *salutes* Reviewed, as per request and assignment, thank you for choosing the SSCC. :)

I think I'll further this trend. I would like to request reviews, please, for three individual pieces of flash fiction, found in this compilation: The Chimera, The Right Path, and Feel Good. Assigned to--oh, wait, I can't continue that part of the trend. Oh, well, my gratitude, then.

From the desk of Nuile: Lunatic Wordsmith :smilemirunu:


I passed my appreciation of your wonderful review on to Cederak - he informed me what a welcome part of the SSCC you are. He also said something about your request being assigned to Zaxvo and that he thanks you for choosing the SSCC. I'm not really too big on trying to figure out all the critic jargon, but I'm sure you can decipher Ced's code words for yourself. :)


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Posted Aug 11 2012 - 02:36 PM

So for flash fiction, I do a review of the three pieces? Just checking.

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Posted Aug 11 2012 - 02:38 PM

Yep. A review for the three ones he requested, since, being FF, the reviews shouldn't take as long. =]

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Posted Aug 11 2012 - 04:15 PM

Right. Well, those reviews are done.

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Posted Aug 13 2012 - 10:33 PM

As requested, I have reviewed "The Artist". Thank you for choosing the SSCC.

- JMJ 2012

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#89 Offline Quote (Mr. Traveler)

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Posted Aug 14 2012 - 12:01 AM

Jedi Master J said if I had any complaints with his review, that I should let you guys know immediately.

Okay I'm done. He did a great job and was able to put a good amount of detail into a short story so short. lol Thanks a ton guys!

Edited by Grant-Sud Rises, Aug 14 2012 - 07:49 AM.


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Posted Aug 17 2012 - 04:09 PM

A Tale of Makuta--Riisiing Moon.

My entry for the LSO SSC LOL ABBREVIATIONS. Thanks in advance!

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Posted Aug 17 2012 - 07:47 PM

A Tale of Makuta--Riisiing Moon.

My entry for the LSO SSC LOL ABBREVIATIONS. Thanks in advance!


Assigned to Tyler Durden. Thank you for choosing the SSCC. :)


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Posted Aug 19 2012 - 02:03 PM

The Descent - Lord Darkon

Haven't written a short story in a while, and I would love your very useful advice on this venture.

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#93 Offline Velox

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Posted Aug 19 2012 - 02:35 PM

The Descent- Lord Darkon

Haven't written a short story in a while, and I would love your very useful advice on this venture.


Assigned to Proud Stigma. Thank you for choosing the SSCC! =]

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Posted Aug 19 2012 - 02:38 PM

Visitor by Valixia


Assigned to Velox.


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Posted Aug 20 2012 - 08:04 PM


The Descent- Lord Darkon

Haven't written a short story in a while, and I would love your very useful advice on this venture.


Assigned to Proud Stigma. Thank you for choosing the SSCC! =]

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Review complete.

Thanks again for choosing the SSCC.

Edited by Proud Stigma, Aug 20 2012 - 08:05 PM.

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Posted Aug 24 2012 - 03:46 PM

Uh, if possible, I'd take a request. I'd like some advice of my newest work:

Letter from a prey - The Renegade Emperor

Something different from my usual style, so I'd like to see how it affects Short Stories Critics. Thanks in advance!


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Posted Aug 24 2012 - 04:58 PM

Uh, if possible, I'd take a request. I'd like some advice of my newest work:

Letter from a prey - The Renegade Emperor

Something different from my usual style, so I'd like to see how it affects Short Stories Critics. Thanks in advance!


I'll be handling your request personally. Thank you for choosing the SSCC. :)

EDIT: Done. ^_^

Edited by Valixia, Aug 24 2012 - 09:11 PM.


#98 Offline Quote (Mr. Traveler)

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Posted Aug 24 2012 - 10:49 PM

Alright I'd like to get The Last Guardian reviewed please. And thank you!

#99 Offline Cederak

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Posted Aug 25 2012 - 12:20 AM

Alright I'd like to get The Last Guardian reviewed please. And thank you!


Well...since you said please, I'll go ahead and assign this to Tolkien. Thanks for choosing the SSCC! :)


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Posted Aug 25 2012 - 02:56 AM

Visitor by Valixia


Assigned to Velox.


Reviewed.

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Posted Aug 25 2012 - 05:44 AM


Uh, if possible, I'd take a request. I'd like some advice of my newest work:

Letter from a prey - The Renegade Emperor

Something different from my usual style, so I'd like to see how it affects Short Stories Critics. Thanks in advance!


I'll be handling your request personally. Thank you for choosing the SSCC. :)

EDIT: Done. ^_^

Even if you didn't like it that much as I intended, thank you so much! Your words have been precious and I'll surely keep at it. Thanks again!


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Posted Aug 25 2012 - 01:15 PM

I would humbly request this new story of mine to be reviewed:

The Golden Age - by X-Ray

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Bionicle: Infinities (Old review topic) (New review topic)

 

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What Comes After * The Golden Age * Hero of the Day * The Settlement * The Ballad of Master Chief * West of Po-Koro

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#103 Offline Velox

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Posted Aug 25 2012 - 01:25 PM

I would humbly request this new story of mine to be reviewed:

The Golden Age - by X-Ray

:akaku: X-Ray :akaku:


Assigned to Nuile. Thank you for choosing the SSCC. =]

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Posted Aug 28 2012 - 09:28 PM

What We Create-Yukiko

Yay, formatting. I just loved going through this and replacing all my quotation marks and apostrophes and ellipses and em dashes since the BBcode turned them in to garbled messes. <<

Well anyway, it's a large chunk of text and I really appreciate if someone would tear it apart. ^^

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#105 Offline Velox

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Posted Aug 28 2012 - 10:07 PM

What We Destroy-Yukiko

Yay, formatting. I just loved going through this and replacing all my quotation marks and apostrophes and ellipses and em dashes since the BBcode turned them in to garbled messes. <<

Well anyway, it's a large chunk of text and I really appreciate if someone would tear it apart. ^^


Assigned to...well, you're next in the list, so I'll assign it to the next critic: Jedi Master J. haha. Thank you for choosing the SSCC!


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Posted Aug 29 2012 - 12:03 PM


What We Destroy-Yukiko

Yay, formatting. I just loved going through this and replacing all my quotation marks and apostrophes and ellipses and em dashes since the BBcode turned them in to garbled messes. <<

Well anyway, it's a large chunk of text and I really appreciate if someone would tear it apart. ^^


Assigned to...well, you're next in the list, so I'll assign it to the next critic: Jedi Master J. haha. Thank you for choosing the SSCC!


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He reviewed my last story...but I suppose I'm not allowed to request someone else. ._. Oh well, thanks anyway. ^^

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Posted Aug 29 2012 - 12:27 PM


I would humbly request this new story of mine to be reviewed:

The Golden Age - by X-Ray

:akaku: X-Ray :akaku:


Assigned to Nuile. Thank you for choosing the SSCC. =]

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Reviewed, and please come again, Mr. X-Ray, sir.

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Posted Aug 31 2012 - 01:28 PM

The Last Guardian, by Grant-Sud Rises...reviewed.

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Posted Aug 31 2012 - 06:39 PM

Two things:

First, requesting a review of

Safe and Sound - Zarayna

Also, I expect to be back from my hiatus sometime in October.

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Posted Aug 31 2012 - 09:37 PM

Two things:

First, requesting a review of

Safe and Sound - Zarayna

Also, I expect to be back from my hiatus sometime in October.


Sometime in October? Well, good to hear. I'll have Yukiko take care of this request. Thanks for choosing the SSCC.


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Posted Sep 03 2012 - 05:30 PM

Correction, I'm back.

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#112 Offline Jedi Master J.

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Posted Sep 05 2012 - 12:49 AM

As requested, I have reviewed "What We Create". Thank you for choosing the SSCC.

He reviewed my last story...but I suppose I'm not allowed to request someone else. ._. Oh well, thanks anyway. ^^

Ma'am, I believe you are mistaken. I don't believe I have review any of your works before this point. If my review is not to your liking though, feel free to send me any criticism by PM or here, if you so desired.

- JMJ 2012

Edited by VI. Zexion, Sep 05 2012 - 12:53 AM.

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Posted Sep 07 2012 - 10:04 PM

Reviewed and recommended! ^^

Edited by Yukiko, Sep 07 2012 - 10:06 PM.

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Posted Sep 08 2012 - 02:06 PM

Curiosity-Reznas

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Posted Sep 08 2012 - 02:13 PM

Curiosity-Reznas

Thanks in advance!

-Rez


...You waited five minutes after posting that to bring it to us? Well, okay - call in the specialists early I suppose. Zaxvo will be handling the assignment. Thanks for (making no delay in) choosing the SSCC! :)

-Ced


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Posted Sep 09 2012 - 03:04 PM

A Bench--Riisiing Moon

Here so soon after postage 'cause it's for an English assignment, so I'm hoping to get a review semi-soon. :P

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Posted Sep 09 2012 - 04:03 PM

A Bench--Riisiing Moon

Here so soon after postage 'cause it's for an English assignment, so I'm hoping to get a review semi-soon. :P


Well, I'll assign your review to Tyler Durden. Thank you for choosing the SSCC. =]

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Posted Sep 09 2012 - 08:47 PM


Curiosity-Reznas

Thanks in advance!

-Rez



...You waited five minutes after posting that to bring it to us? Well, okay - call in the specialists early I suppose. Zaxvo will be handling the assignment. Thanks for (making no delay in) choosing the SSCC! :)

-Ced

And I've done that one.


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Posted Sep 14 2012 - 08:36 PM

Attention fellow critics, authors, BZPower members, requesters, etc.:

The Charity Initiative has begun. What does this mean? The SSCC Critics will now be assigned one charity review per week. These are completely free of charge, and are given simply to help out our fellow authors on BZPower, stimulate activity within the writing presence of BZPower, and sharpen the skills of our critics.

If you have any questions, comments, concerns, etc., please feel free to PM me!

Critics, I have also sent you a PM on the matter. Please reply to it to let me know that you understand ASAP (also feel free to ask any questions/etc.). If you did not receive a PM, please PM me ASAP. Zaxvo, I was not able to PM you, so please either PM me or email me at andrew.page99[at]gmail.com so I can send you the information. =]

Thank you, everyone, and I look forward to starting this initiative with my fellow critics to stimulate activity!

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Posted Sep 20 2012 - 03:18 AM

Charity Initiative Assignments! I know it's not technically Wednesday any more, but I haven't gone to bed yet, so I count that as still "today" haha.

Velox: Shadows, by The Shouting God
Nuile: Inside by Jedi Knight Krazy
Yukiko: Within Temptation by Zarayna
Jedi Master J.: Anathain by Ironheart
Zaxvo: Long Way Down by Legolover-361
Tyler Durden: How Could I? by Legolover-361
Proud Stigma: [has already been assigned reviews in order for him to complete his probationary period]

I simply took the oldest 5 short stories posted in COT. Once every COT story has received a review, we will move to the Short Stories forum.

Please remember to state that you are from the SSCC when reviewing. Reviews are due by Wednesday, September 26th.

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