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#161 Velox

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Posted Oct 12 2012 - 11:12 PM

And I have reviewed Sherlock Holmes and the Missing Christmas Presents by Kumata.

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#162 Chro

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Posted Oct 14 2012 - 04:00 PM

Hello all.
I'm not exactly sure how the request process works, so bear with me if I'm wrong here.
Anyways, could I please get some critique on Snowfall?
Thanks.

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#163 Velox

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Posted Oct 14 2012 - 04:48 PM

Hello all.
I'm not exactly sure how the request process works, so bear with me if I'm wrong here.
Anyways, could I please get some critique on Snowfall?
Thanks.

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#164 Zaxvo

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Posted Oct 15 2012 - 08:24 PM

Just reviewed Return. Fantastic piece of writing, I highly recommend to to everyone, regardless of what you like to write, this is how emotions should be described.

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#165 The Novelist Called Nuile

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Posted Oct 16 2012 - 06:53 PM

I'd like to request a review for Rugged Explorers, by Nuile: Lunatic Wordsmith. My thanks in advance.

Sincerely, Nuile: Lunatic Wordsmith

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#166 Velox

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Posted Oct 16 2012 - 11:27 PM

I'd like to request a review for Rugged Explorers, by Nuile: Lunatic Wordsmith. My thanks in advance.

Sincerely, Nuile: Lunatic Wordsmith

Of course! Assigned to Zaxvo.

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#167 Toa Smoke Monster

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Posted Oct 16 2012 - 11:36 PM

I would like to request a review for my short story Prisoner of the Red Star by yours truly, Toa Smoke Monster. Thanks in advance.

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#168 Velox

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Posted Oct 16 2012 - 11:45 PM

I would like to request a review for my short story Prisoner of the Red Star by yours truly, Toa Smoke Monster. Thanks in advance.

Assigned to Zarayna. =]

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#169 Cederak

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Posted Oct 17 2012 - 12:03 AM

May I have a critique of my short story, Chronicle?

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#170 Velox

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Posted Oct 17 2012 - 12:06 AM

May I have a critique of my short story, Chronicle?

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Looks like it's review-requesting day. But of course! Assigned to Proud Stigma. =]

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#171 Yukiko

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Posted Oct 17 2012 - 11:00 PM

And The Forest is reviewed.

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#172 Velox

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Posted Oct 18 2012 - 02:18 AM

And I have reviewed "Unsung" by Nuile.

Assignments for this week:

~~Velox: Rules of Engagement, by Aderia~~
~~Nuile: Warm, by Grant Sud~~
Yukiko: Flash Fiction Marathon Entries by Space: Ocean of Awe (you only need to review 3)
Zaxvo: The Bodyguard, by Takuma Nuva
~~Proud Stigma: An Assassin's Reflections, by Zarayna~~

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I know that some of these have already had an SSCC review, but there is always more to say, even if it is just praise. Those with assigned requests may have two weeks for their charity reviews -- let me know if you need the two weeks, otherwise you will be assigned a new one next week. As usual, reviews are due by next Wednesday, October 24th.

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#173 Samhain

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Posted Oct 18 2012 - 02:24 PM

I have completed the following...

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Chronicle By Cederak.

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#174 LewaLew

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Posted Oct 20 2012 - 02:28 PM

It's not your traditional short story (It's actually a free verse poem) but I would appreciate if one of you guys could review "Ahkmou", by yours truly, LewaLew.

#175 Velox

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Posted Oct 20 2012 - 03:08 PM

It's not your traditional short story (It's actually a free verse poem) but I would appreciate if one of you guys could review "Ahkmou", by yours truly, LewaLew.

Looks like it's my turn to review -- assigned to myself.

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#176 Zaxvo

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Posted Oct 22 2012 - 09:42 PM

And I've reviewed my assigned story.

I may need an extra week for the charity review.

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#177 Yukiko

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Posted Oct 22 2012 - 11:13 PM

Snowfall has been reviewed.

I will definitely need the extra week. Also, I would like to request a two week break after this assignment. This has been an incredibly stressful time for me and I need to rest.

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#178 Grantaire

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Posted Oct 25 2012 - 03:14 PM

Reviewed Prisoner of the Red Star. Sorry for the lateness, I had some severe reviewer's block on that story.

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#179 Samhain

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Posted Oct 25 2012 - 08:13 PM

An Assassin's Reflections by Zarayna, Completed.

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#180 The Novelist Called Nuile

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Posted Oct 25 2012 - 08:48 PM

I apologize for being so late on this one. But Grant-Sud's Warm, reviewed.

Sincerely, Nuile: Lunatic Wordsmith

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#181 Velox

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Posted Oct 27 2012 - 03:38 AM

And I have reviewed "Rules of Engagement", by Aderia, and "Ahkmou", by LewaLew.

I'd also like to announce our latest critic: Jerzy. Tolkien and I both think that he'll be a good addition to our team, so let's give him a warm welcome! Good to work with you again, Jerzy.

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#182 Cederak

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Posted Oct 27 2012 - 07:49 PM

Hoping I could get a review for this. Thanks.

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#183 Velox

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Posted Oct 27 2012 - 08:02 PM

Hoping I could get a review for this. Thanks.

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With pleasure! Assigned to our newest critic, Jerzy.

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#184 Jerzy

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Guess what I got done: http://www.bzpower.c...83

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#185 Cederak

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Posted Oct 28 2012 - 03:13 PM

Thank you much for your timely response to my request, and congrats on joining the SSCC, Jerzy.

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#186 Jerzy

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Posted Oct 28 2012 - 04:52 PM

It's no problem at all.

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#187 Grantaire

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Posted Oct 28 2012 - 05:34 PM

Requesting a review of:

Shredded Radiance by Zarayna.

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#188 Velox

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Posted Oct 28 2012 - 08:07 PM

Requesting a review of:

Shredded Radiance by Zarayna.

I'll be assigning this to our latest critic, Jerzy, as well.

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#189 Jerzy

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Finished my review of Mr. Zaranya's story: http://www.bzpower.c...79

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#190 Zaxvo

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Posted Oct 30 2012 - 08:26 PM

Well, The Bodyguard has been reviewed.

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#191 Jerzy

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Posted Oct 31 2012 - 02:35 AM

Due to Holiday festivities tomorrow, I wish to inform everyone here that I will not be able to review as quickly as I would be able to normally. Just a heads up.

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#192 Yukiko

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Posted Oct 31 2012 - 11:02 PM

I have reviewed my assignment.

With that, I would like to request a month break. I have too many things on my mind right now, and I really need the time off.

Have a Happy Halloween, if it's not over already, lulz.

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#193 Velox

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Posted Nov 01 2012 - 02:40 AM

Velox: FFC Compilation, by Despair
Nuile: Meanwhere, Elsewhile by Multiverse
Zaxvo: Love Conquers All, by Nuile
Proud Stigma: Moment of Fragile Courage, by Grant-Sud
Jerzy: Non-Bionicle Flash Fiction Entries by Danska: Shadow Master

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Due by next Wednesday, November 7th. As usual, for flash fiction compilations, you only need to review three of them (but can, of course, review more if you wish).

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