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#241 Offline Velox

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Posted Jan 10 2013 - 05:13 PM

Next round of Charity Reviews -- I apologize for the delay:

 

Velox: The Farmer and His Landlord (I'm taking the two weeks for my last charity review, but I'll still be doing this one as well)

Nuile: Krampus, by Lord of Adders Black

Yukiko: Wooden Avengence, by LewiMOC

Zaxvo: Christmas Time on Hope VI, by xccj

 

Reviews due January 16th, but if you guys need an extra day that's fine too. 

 

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#242 Offline Tolkien

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Posted Jan 15 2013 - 04:29 PM

Reviewed The Garden, by Cederak.

 

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#243 Offline Zaxvo

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Posted Jan 17 2013 - 12:16 AM

Just reviewed Christmas Time on Hope IV. I guess I'm 15 late; my apologies.

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Posted Jan 17 2013 - 04:12 AM

@ Zaxvo ~ Don't worry about it -- it wasn't midnight for me yet. =P 

 

Anyway, I have reviewed "Too Early," "The Little Toy Boy Who Opened the Door," and "The Farmer and His Landlord." 

 

Next charity cycle:

 

Velox: Flash Fiction Contest Compilation, by Despair

Nuile: Dancer, by Peach00

Yukiko: Ever Up, by Tolkien 

Zaxvo: Honor, Bravery, Innocence, by Giant of Lannister

 

Due January 23rd. =]

 

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#245 Offline The Novelist Called Nuile

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Posted Jan 17 2013 - 11:55 AM

Krampus, reviewed.

 

Late report, but at least the review itself was on time.

 

Sincerely, Nuile: Lunatic Wordsmith :smilemirunu:
 



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Posted Jan 17 2013 - 08:45 PM

Wooden Avengence has been reviewed.


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#247 Offline Zaxvo

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Posted Jan 23 2013 - 09:04 PM

...and I've reviewed Honor, Bravey, Innocence. Not bad.

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Posted Jan 23 2013 - 09:12 PM

Dancer, reviewed. When it comes to description, it's one of the most beautiful pieces I've ever read.

 

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Posted Jan 23 2013 - 10:28 PM

Ever Up is reviewed.


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Posted Jan 24 2013 - 02:37 AM

And I have reviewed Flash Fiction Contest Compilation. Here's the next set: 

 

Velox: Rain, by Nuile

Nuile: Souvenirs, by Velox

Yukiko: The Final Chronicle, by Naina

Zaxvo: Duel, by The Otter

 

Due January 30th. =]

 

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Posted Jan 27 2013 - 02:28 PM

Souvenirs has taken its place among the stories reviewed by the SSCC--twice.

 

Sincerely, Nuile: Lunatic Wordsmith :smilemirunu:



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Posted Jan 28 2013 - 11:23 PM

...And I've reviewed Duel.

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Posted Jan 31 2013 - 12:11 AM

The Final Chronicle is reviewed.


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#254 Offline Velox

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Posted Jan 31 2013 - 01:35 AM

And "Rain" is reviewed.

Next week's:
 
Velox: Surrounded, Alone, by Cederak
Nuile: Long Day, by Tolkien
Yukiko: The Ranger, by Takuma Nuva
Zaxvo: Eternity, by Legolover-361
 
Due: February 6th

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#255 Offline Takuaka: Toa of Time

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Posted Feb 05 2013 - 08:17 PM

I know it's long, but there's no word limit here, is there?

 

The Golden Mask if you please. :)


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Everyone seems to be saying that Star Wars Episode VII is going to be lousy. If you're part of the 8% (or whatever percentage it is) who still cling to the hope that it will be awesome (which mostly hinges on the question of getting Hamill, Fisher, and Ford back) then may the force be with you.

 

Happy Star Wars Day. (as of May 4th)

 

 

 

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comedy - Mask of Light: What You Didn't See

short stories - Dancing With Shadows - Lonesome Spirits - The Golden Mask - Bionicle Hero

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Posted Feb 05 2013 - 08:20 PM

I know it's long, but there's no word limit here, is there?
 
The Golden Mask if you please. :)
 
Nope, no word limit. =] Assigned to Nuile. Thank you for choosing the SSCC!

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Posted Feb 06 2013 - 11:19 PM

Eternity has been reviewed.

#258 Offline Velox

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Posted Feb 07 2013 - 02:50 AM

And I have reviewed "Surrounded, Alone" by Cederak.
 
Also, wow, so I've started coming to the point where some stories in OTC have already been given charity reviews. I figured I'd continue on, assigning more recent stories, now, that have not yet received a charity review. So, here's the next set:
 
Velox: Beyond the Constellations, by Viserys Targaryen
Nuile: To Soar, by Grant Sud
Yukiko: That Extra Mile, by Nuile
Zaxvo: The Captain and His Beast, by Riisiing Moon
 
Due Feb. 13th as usual. Thanks guys. =]

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#259 Offline Yukiko

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Posted Feb 07 2013 - 11:44 PM

The Ranger is reviewed.


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#260 Offline The Novelist Called Nuile

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Posted Feb 08 2013 - 09:21 PM

Early review, late report. Better than an early report and a late review. =P

 

 

EDIT: And The Golden Mask, reviewed.

Sincerely, Nuile: Lunatic Wordsmith :smilemirunu:


Edited by Nuile Writerson, Feb 11 2013 - 08:10 PM.


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Posted Feb 12 2013 - 05:08 AM

I can still request reviews can't I?

 

Dreams of Darkness - Dual Matrix


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#262 Offline Velox

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Posted Feb 12 2013 - 07:57 PM

I can still request reviews can't I?
 
Dreams of Darkness - Dual Matrix

Yep! Assigned to Yukiko. Thank you for choosing the SSCC. =]

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#263 Offline Flaredrick: Forgotten One

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Posted Feb 13 2013 - 06:51 PM

Can you review this please.

 

Shattered Past - Flaredrick


My Epic: A Hero Rises Coming Soon: Bionicle: Republic Commando My Short Stories: Shattered PastDoomsdayLifeThe MurderA Glimmer of Hope

Please review these good, yet wonderful stories. They need the love.

 

Epic RPG's that your should play=>Halo: ForerunnersTo Save The WorldCastles In The AirLego UniverseNinjago RPGX-Men: Darkest Days, Transformers: Eternal ConflictMass Effect: DivisionFallout: Austin City Limits

 

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#264 Offline Velox

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Posted Feb 16 2013 - 10:57 PM

Can you review this please.
 
Shattered Past - Flaredrick
Assigned to Zaxvo. Thank you for choosing the SSCC! Sorry for the delay on this, but you should have your review within a week from today. =]

Also, critics: Because of the forums going offline, last week's charity reviews will just be due by this Wednesday--we're skipping this weeks to make things easier on everyone. Any assigned reviews, please complete them by Wednesday as well. We'll get back to our normal schedule then. =]

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Posted Feb 18 2013 - 11:24 AM

Reviewed The Captain and his Beast.

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Posted Feb 19 2013 - 08:27 PM

Dreams of Darkness has been reviewed.


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Posted Feb 20 2013 - 11:46 PM

Shattered Past, reviewed.

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Posted Feb 21 2013 - 12:46 AM

I'm really sorry guys, but I'm gonna have to get my review in tomorrow. 
 
Anyway, here's this week's assignments:
 
Velox: The Wrong Path
Nuile: We Wanted Those Infidels Dead
Zaxvo: Julia's Diner
 
Due February 27th.
 
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Posted Feb 21 2013 - 08:25 PM

To Soar has been reviewed.

 

Sincerely, Nuile: Lunatic Wordsmith :smilemirunu:



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Posted Feb 22 2013 - 12:56 AM

That Extra Mile has been reviewed.

 

I would like to request a break for the next week.  I have a lot to do for school now, but I'll be back soon. :)


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Posted Feb 22 2013 - 02:21 AM

And I have reviewed "Beyond the Constellations."

@ Yukiko ~ No problem, thanks for letting me know. =]

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Posted Feb 25 2013 - 10:21 PM

We Wanted Those Infidels Dead, reviewed.

 

Sincerely, Lunatic: Wordsmith Nuile :smilemirunu:



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Posted Feb 27 2013 - 12:41 AM

Julia's Diner has been reviewed.

#274 Offline Flaredrick: Forgotten One

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Posted Feb 27 2013 - 11:01 PM

Hello back again for another request. This time for The Murder


My Epic: A Hero Rises Coming Soon: Bionicle: Republic Commando My Short Stories: Shattered PastDoomsdayLifeThe MurderA Glimmer of Hope

Please review these good, yet wonderful stories. They need the love.

 

Epic RPG's that your should play=>Halo: ForerunnersTo Save The WorldCastles In The AirLego UniverseNinjago RPGX-Men: Darkest Days, Transformers: Eternal ConflictMass Effect: DivisionFallout: Austin City Limits

 

"We all suffer from our own self actions. The only problem is, how do you control it?" - Flaredrick, Shadows Within

 

:haunu: A Fire Shall Rise In The Coliseum. PM me to battle Tahu or Lhikan in Technic Coliseum.  :haunu:

 

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Posted Feb 28 2013 - 12:59 AM

Hello back again for another request. This time for The Murder
 
Assigned to...myself. And I'm actually going to take two weeks for -this- week's charity review, but I'll do next week's too. So, new assignments:
 
Velox: Autumn by Peach
Nuile: A Jaunt in the Woods, by Danska
Yukiko: Truth, by Cederak
Zaxvo: Vigilante, by Zarayna.

Due March 6th.

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Posted Mar 06 2013 - 11:59 PM

Vigilante has been reviewed.

EDIT: Just in time!

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Posted Mar 07 2013 - 02:38 AM

Aaand I have reviewed "The Wrong Path", "The Murder", and "Autumn." Whew. XD

 

This week's:

 

Velox: Someone's Waiting for You, by Aderia

Nuile: O Dark Legion, by Chro

Yukiko: The Luckiest Grandfather in the World, by Kraggh

Zaxvo: Eldritch Abomination, by Velox

 

Due: March 13th.

 

 

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Posted Mar 07 2013 - 01:34 PM

I entered an Application as a Judge, can I still ask for a review?

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#279 Offline Velox

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Posted Mar 07 2013 - 03:05 PM

I entered an Application as a Judge, can I still ask for a review?

 

Yep! 

 

 

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Posted Mar 07 2013 - 03:10 PM

Let us Remember -- Dual Matrix

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