Posted Oct 26 2011 - 10:54 AM
@ Hahli Historian: I cannot thank you enough for this review!
I'm glad you think my story is a bit different than others of a similar genre. ^^
And I like to think of this as a mystery story. It's not exactly a murder (though a similar feel to one may just work to my advantage). I want the readers to piece together what happened as well as who exactly Tetak and Laza are. I realize they seem very two-dimensional at this point, but that's sort of how I want it right now. I'm planning on having them go through tons of character development (I'm just hoping I don't get too personal with them. It's one thing to relate with a character, but another thing when a character is pouring his/her heart and soul out and you just want them to stop).
Also, I'd like for the readers to paint their own images of Laza and Tetak. Maybe they'll be a bit surprised when they learn a little more about them? After all, when you first meet a new person, you don't automatically know everything about them. You make assumptions based on the way they act, and only when you really sit down and talk to them do you really begin to figure out who they are. Similar idea with my characters. ^^
Though, also consider the situations they're put in. Laza was groggy and tired after a long day of work, and Tetak had just woken up in the beginning. From that, they're now in a very vast and strange world. Tetak is afraid of anything and everything right now and Laza is deeply annoyed and angry at the world around her, to an extent. And don't worry, I do have plans for these characters and I do hope to delve deeper into their identities (though I am having a bit of trouble finding the right situations-for Tetak mainly. But, all in due time.
Also, I would love to hear about any theories you would have with foreshadowing. And yes, there are bits that are highly easy to read, yet there are others I've thrown in there that will become much more clear later in the story. Send me a PM and we can discuss it if you'd like. ;D
Also, I don't think of Jet as a Glatorian, exactly. Of course, going into greater detail is a spoiler. I'm thinking we're going to be seeing a little more of Jet and where he's coming from. And great analysis of him, by the way. That's how I picture him in those few chapters. ^^
Nia is going to be interesting. Her curiosity really does fit her, but we're going to see that once they all get back to her village (which will be in the upcoming chapters).
As for the narration style; I thought jumping from character to character would be interesting. The cryptic nature of things along with the anarchy of elements in the story does make things a little difficult to follow. However, there is indeed a great reason for this and I'm glad you think it's necessary. I honestly couldn't see this story being told any other way. Everything, and I do mean everything, will be revealed by the end of this story. I'm trying to keep enough order into the story to prevent my readers from getting totally lost (which may not be easy... There are going to be parts of the story that you just have to roll with. Little inconsistencies like Tetak's cloak that appeared out of nowhere, etc).
Thank you again for your review.