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[Raiden: Toa of Storms]

Hey readers, this is my second attempt at comic making. I hope you guys (and girls) like it!
credit to all contributors of the six shade chimoru kit.

1. It has that new house smell!
2.McDonalds!
3. BACON
4. Cheeseburger catapult
5. BLOOD
6. Nah.
7.Yup.
8.Trollympics? credit to Malignus for spriting that wonderful villain using the chimoru R kit for me.
9. sad birthday, dude.
10. Flumph.


PGS
1. Soran
2. TNG
3. Malignus
4. Sybre
5. Dr. Giggles

Fillers:
Olympics!

GS
1.
2.
3.
4.
5.




GS or PGS application:
Name to be used
Gender:
sprite kit: (put a link)
personality:
notes:


Banner:

[url=http://custombionicle.wikia.com/wiki/User:RaidenToaofThunder?image=Raiden-27s_Banner-png][img]http://images4.wikia.nocookie.net/__cb20120629021353/custombionicle/images/4/4c/Raiden%27s_Banner.png[/img][/url]

Note: I will start to make comics on a 2 day to 1 week basis, due to a busy schedule.

Edited by Raiden: Toa of Storms, Aug 28 2012 - 09:35 AM.

[Soran]

I liked the first comic. It wasn't necessarily funny, but it did lead to a possible funny story arc. Since there is only one comic, theres not much to judge on. The comic seems to have shrunken and made it slightly blurry (probably because its hosted on wikia) and you can't distinguish much details from it. There aren't any other characters shown besides your main character, so I'll await further comics for that. I'm suspecting that this is made in MS Paint, so graphics might be lower quality then using gimp for instance. Also, normally I would appreciate that you don't use my daily strip template or backgrounds (Because those are only for use of fan comics for my comic series) but because of the blurriness I'll allow it since it doesn't really look like my backgrounds. Just the same wall color which a lot of comics have.

I hope to expect more soon,
~Soran

[Wind Elemental]

Nice job on your first comic. The text is a bit hard to see and maybe there could be an introduction to your character. The comic does look like it could lead into a funny story, which is good. Great job on this!

[Raiden: Toa of Storms]

@Soran, I did use the template, but it's customized to look like not-yours. (that would be copying)
@FF Ice Master, thanks for the feedback, I might get GIMP, and it is going to be a funny story. i just need one or two guest stars...

[Axilus Prime]

So, it is an arc. Good, it would be a shame to see that fail. A good but simple start. Good luck in future, I'll be following this!

Oh, and you now have two PGSes.

[Raiden: Toa of Storms]

New comic!
comic 2

[Soran]

Haha, that was entertaining. It reminded me of what those people do in video games once they receive an item of some sort. If I may give a tip, I think you should try to change the wall color different colors when going to different places, and sometimes the floor as well. Otherwise it will end up looking like you're in the same room the whole time.

~Soran

[Axilus Prime]

Awesomeness. Reminds me of a prank call I made once...though this is more awesome.

More so, it reminds me of the show Level Up, which I find hilarious. Nice work.

Keep it coming, Raiden! I'd hate to see your potential go to waste!

[Ultimate Sybre]

Six-Shade Chimoru! You rock! Anyway, you do need a job. But McDonald's?! At least you have drive-thru duty. And Soran works there?! I gotta go to my nearest McD's someday and meet him!

Keep it up!

[Raiden: Toa of Storms]

New comic!

[Malignus]

heh... showed him. That'll teach ya ta try 'n' steal my bacon!

[Raiden: Toa of Storms]

Into the closet he goes!

[Axilus Prime]

I believe a large heavy object has been dropped on my head. What exactly happened in Panel 5?

P.S. TNG usually gets his pie and bacon by legit methods, not stealing.

[Ultimate Sybre]

New comic!

I should have done that long ago!

[Wind Elemental]

In comic 3, some of the text is a bit hard to see. It took me a while to notice that there's a "no" in panel 4. Also, what happened in panel 5?

[Raiden: Toa of Storms]

solving the confusion:
what happened in panel five was the glitch in my programming enabling me to go into a super-saiyan type mode.
ALSO: the link that is in the post leads to a mistake version of the comic. to read the actual thing, read from topic post.

Edited by Raiden: Toa of Storms, Jul 02 2012 - 08:34 PM.

[Raiden: Toa of Storms]

New comic!

[Malignus]

Ha!
Are you, by any chance, Arga in disguise. I'm enjoying these comics so far. However I'm actually significantly smarter and somewhat wiser than that. Other than that, KUTGW.

[Raiden: Toa of Storms]

Yes, Malignus, I understand you are smarter than that, but the power of cheeseburgers hold the cheese rules out all implications.

[Malignus]

Point taken, but I prefer my burgers with cheese, although I occasionally go without. Very well, I'll ring with it.

[Ultimate Sybre]

New comic!

Again, should have done that long ago.

And nice joke. However, there are people who will do that.

[Axilus Prime]

Still trying to figure out what cheeseburger hold the cheese is. XD

That was rather hilarious, and though it is wunshaed and simple, the catapult is well-detailed and looks ready to spring at any moment.

Uh-oh. Last panel is scary. Malignus weighs 2000 tons or so.

[Raiden: Toa of Storms]

@TNG
I learned from Malignus himself that he weighs like, 5000 pounds.
and thanks to all for the feedback!

[Malignus]

I weigh 5,721 lbs and my original form stands 14 bio(63 ft) tall

Edited by Malignus, Jul 04 2012 - 09:42 AM.

[Raiden: Toa of Storms]

New comic!

[Axilus Prime]

Wow, you fit everyone into the comic!

First time I've seen Sybre in Soul Devourer Shinipire mode as a PGS...uh-oh.

[Malignus]

Malignus wouldn't be frightened by that.

[Ultimate Sybre]

New comic!

Blood is one of my most favorite beverages! It's even better on a soul! To die for!

And, Mal, you're next!

[Raiden: Toa of Storms]

New comic!

[Ultimate Sybre]

New comic!

Yeah, don't check. It's for your own good.

[Wind Elemental]

Raiden said "nah" to checking what's going on outside. He's safe... for now.

[Malignus]

Yeah. everythings fine

Yeah. everythings fine

[Axilus Prime]

Well that was humiliating for me, but probably awesome for Malignus! XD

Cue Raiden opening the basement to get an old photo album and finding a few skeletons.

[Tenuk]

In blood I can't understand anything that is going on so maybe you shouldn't totally black it out but just darken it and draw lines from character to text.

[Ultimate Sybre]

In blood I can't understand anything that is going on so maybe you shouldn't totally black it out but just darken it and draw lines from character to text.

Basically, people in the dark are being attacked by me, a vampire.

Yes, it was a little strange.

[Raiden: Toa of Storms]

strange? that's like calling bionicle a lump of plastic!
THIS IS MADNESS!

aaaaanyways, new comic!

Edited by Raiden: Toa of Storms, Jul 27 2012 - 08:21 PM.

[Malignus]

A THUMBNAIL!
the comic is here

[Axilus Prime]

LOL. Fail. Thanks Malignus, and good to see you back, Raiden!

TNG is weak? Where did that come from? He's the strongest out of the people being attacked! (He's part robot, and a Prime at that.)

Oh well, the glowstick thing was funny and he wasn't shown defeated.

Just try to keep people in character, that's my advice to you. Good work overall, 8/10.

[Ultimate Sybre]

That was funny, although I could barely tell the difference between the red-eyed dudes.

And yes. The soul is mine.

[Raiden: Toa of Storms]

@TNG, you were weak because you were sleeping. awake, you are a force to be reckoned with. sorry for the confusion. the lights in the closet will come on soon, so no more dark.

Edited by Raiden: Toa of Storms, Jul 31 2012 - 11:51 AM.