LSO 2012 Team Three Review Topic
Posted Jul 26 2012 - 12:53 PM
Once the epic topic reopens, feel free to switch up your writing order, collaborate, or even drop out of writing if you wish. Have fun!
GG: i tjhnk i delete dpart og america
CP: you guys have too many states anyways
CP: wait wait wait
Posted Jul 26 2012 - 09:29 PM
I will shun you forever, in fact, if that happens.
But yeah, this story was really, really good. Unlike the last two it was not about post 2010 plot, a setup I personally hate. It was also very well written, and had an excellent plot. And Jabraz. XD
I am looking forward greatly to seeing the rest of this.
There's a grief that can't be spoken, there's a pain goes on and on...
Empty chairs at empty tables, where my friends will meet no more...
Posted Jul 28 2012 - 07:29 PM
It was really an amazing opportunity to write with you guys, and I feel the story came out very well. Kudos to GSR for finding a way to bring everything together like that; I don't think I could have done it!
I'm open to continue writing after the contest if you guys are, and we still need to decide on a title. Regardless, it was an honour to collaborate with the three of you, so thank you for the privilege!
Posted Jul 29 2012 - 01:47 AM
I did worry about overstepping my boundaries a bit with my second chapter, but I felt like the story needed to nail down a villain (and besides, Janus set me up for exposition so nicely) - hopefully everyone was okay with Makuta Spiriah and His Amazing Biomechanically Engineered Skakdi and Friends. And thanks also for keeping the "this story" bits going throughout, it made wrapping that 'last' chapter in a framing device a lot easier and more natural, which was good, because I had no idea how to wrap it up as a good temporary ending point without a little narrative trickery.
Edited by GSR, Jul 29 2012 - 01:49 AM.
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Posted Jul 29 2012 - 03:59 PM
GSR, I think you did a great job with your second chapter, while it definitely wasn't the way I had planned it, it ended up blending seamlessly into the overall narrative and gave us a bit more momentum to keep the story moving. Thanks for that.
Legolover, You have a unique grasp on the english language, and while some of the words you use can be awkward, overall you have a very potent vocabulary. You started us on a fairly strong note, and kept that going--plus you were the only one who referenced that darn mouse.
Fullmetal Eyrcharmist, You were able to get inside the heads of the characters in a way that I don't feel the rest of us did. While we orchestrated plot developments (or muddled around trying not to do too much, in my case) you really brought a new perspective and depth to each of the characters, which made us more intrigued by what was going on in their lives.
Overall, while we weren't quite as productive as the other teams, I feel we have a fairly solid story here, and I'm proud to have been a part of this time.
However, as I mentioned before, canon and me are like acid and skin (we don't go together) so I'm unfortunately going to bow out. I may peek in now and then to take a look at where you've sent this story to--if you choose to continue it.
Edited by Janus, Jul 30 2012 - 10:46 AM.
Posted Jul 30 2012 - 06:58 AM
I'm definitely willing to continue this story after judging ends (preferably with planning this time, heh).
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