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[Darth Alex Humva]

IC [Lucas/Las Vegas]

 

Lucas raised an eyebrow, then sighed and looked at Jess with a look of a man (or in this case, woman) who had given up.

 

"Well, I guess we should be off." He checked his pockets. "Buy you a drink to make up for the snark?"

[A billion cats]

IC: Jeffery Pryde - Las Vegas -

 

'Jess' blinked in surprise as Gabriel ran out of the room with what sounded like a battle cry, only it was about food. 

 

"Well, I guess we should be off." Lucas checked his pockets. "Buy you a drink to make up for the snark?"

 

'Jess' grinned. "Sounds good to me, I'm sorta lacking in funds at the moment." And with that 'Jess' went after Gabriel with haste, she found herself actually a little faster as a girl for some reason. 

Edited by Snelly, Jan 26 2013 - 09:20 PM.

[Darth Alex Humva]

IC [Lucas/Las Vegas]

 

Lucas, on the other hand, only made with a brisk walk, because he didn't feel like sprinting in his somewhat ill fitting clothing. He did manage to catch them at the elevator though, getting in there as it descended to a lower level for food.

[The Fourteenth Doctor]

IC: Robin didn't run after them immediately. She suddenly became very aware of the daggers sticking out for her sleeves. Her arms got shorter when she changed into a girl, so the tips weren't concealed. Her form flickered and she had strapped the daggers to her thighs under her jeans, cutting her shirt into a t-shirt. One more flickering and she was standing in the elevator next to the others.

[Rawrmouse]

IC: Liberty

Noel grinned and led Howard our of the room. "I wonder if they made a break through while you were...occupied."

[Takanuvainika]

IC: Silver Serpent "Well I have powers." Susan said out loud but in her head she asked the Biohesive.'What should I show him.' 'Just make a small snake and then turn it into a statue of a person.' Susan held out her hand and there was a small silver snake in it, then the snake turned into a goo and reformed into a small statue in her hand.

Edited by Takanuvainika, Jan 26 2013 - 11:01 PM.

[Constructman: Black Knight]

OOC There was a profile here but now it's gone.

Edited by Constructman, Jan 26 2013 - 10:26 PM.

[Darth Alex Humva]

IC [Lucas/Las Vegas]

 

"Soooo..." Elevator music played peacefully as they went down. "Why am I still with you guys again?"

[Mega Man: The Blue Bomber]

OOC: I see what you did there

[A billion cats]

OOC: You can't have a character named Makuta, Constructman, I think we've gone over the not taking stuff from Bionicle before right? Yeah not happening. 

I just saw everything else in the profile...okay yeah you can forget that ever getting approved, even if you change it. NO. 

 

IC: Jeffery Pryde - Las Vegas -

 

"Because we're all the BEST of friends!" 'Jess' said as mockingly enthusiastic as she could, then her face went straight. "How should we know? All I know is you're buying me a drink, which I'm grateful for." 

Edited by Snelly, Jan 26 2013 - 10:52 PM.

[Dallas Winston]

OOC: ...no.

 

-Tyler

[Ilyusha Blokfase]

OOC:

 

...

 

'Makuta'

 

that's

 

that's disgraceful

[Constructman: Black Knight]

OOC But it's the Maori word for magic.

Fine, I'll change it.

[Ilyusha Blokfase]

OOC: Might also want to cut out "Exorcise the demon spirit," "Hades," and "Satan" in there as well. Because I know that if you don't, you're going to be in some hot water. Similar to what I told you when you brought out the Lord's Prayer in here.

Edited by The Otter, Jan 26 2013 - 10:14 PM.

[Constructman: Black Knight]

OOC Changed

[Content with Life]

IC: Gabriel - Las Vegas

 

"So, burgers or wraps?"

[A billion cats]

OOC But it's the Maori word for magic.

Fine, I'll change it.

OOC: Yeah that was before I read everything else wrong with it. I could tell you what else is wrong with it, but since it happens to be everything I won't bother. 

[The Snark Knight]

OOC: Constructman, no. I sincerely hope that is a joke character, but in my heart, I know it isn't.

There are too many issues for me to even consider giving this my seal of approval. First off, the matter of his codename. Those above me have more or less covered it, but "Makuta"? I am aware that it is in fact a word in Maori, but what it means on this site is "big old master of shadows". No.

 

Moving on, he is OP beyond belief. The abilities you listed alone are far too many, and too powerful. Teleportation is a power in and of itself, plus several others that were listed. Further, the Reaper ability is far too powerful for use in this game. It is, in essence, mind control. Which is beyond overpowered. Also, though you state not being able to feel pain in skeleton form is a weakness, it actually has distinct advantages, thus making it yet anther power. Further, the nature of these powers is not allowable. You cite dark entities such as Hades, one I am not familiar with, and, well, Satan. That's a major no-no. Religion beyond minute references is not allowed on BZPower. That's not just an XMDD rule, that's a site rule.

 

Further, his backstory does not work. Mostly the large number of religious references that exist within, and it seems to be almost entirely based around.

I cannot even consider approving this, and I am frankly appalled that I even have to point these things out.

[Mega Man: The Blue Bomber]

OOC:

Last thing we need is a flame war about religions.

[Varren Rehn]

IC:

 

"Um, You are well-come," Chris said, "It took a long time to find the right one."

 

"Nothing's changed," Will said.

[A billion cats]

IC: Jeffery Pryde - Las Vegas -

 

"So, burgers or wraps?" Gabriel asked. 

 

"Whatever is quicker, I don't really care I just want to eat!" 'Jess' said impatiently, her stomach growled. 

 

IC: Howard - Helicarrier -

 

"If only I'd be so lucky...I doubt they got very far though if I was getting stumped."

Edited by Snelly, Jan 26 2013 - 11:09 PM.

[Rawrmouse]

IC: Liberty

Noel nodded. "It was wishful thinking. But...I know that you can solve this." She gave him a kiss on the cheek and grinned.

[The Fourteenth Doctor]

IC: Nick was walking down a hall in the Hellfire mansion, trying to ignore the partially ripped sleeves on his shirt. As long as he didn't transform his clothes stayed okay.

[.:Advent Aeternale:.]

IC: Siegfried nodded at Anton's advice. "Such is our lot in life, as far as this team goes. It would seem nobody is particularly concerned with whatever has happened to the helicarrier, so I guess it's not truly an issue."

[Rawrmouse]

IC: Lynae

Lynae arched an eyebrow as a man with a ripped sleeve came into the room. "What happened to you?" Her voice smooth as her violet eyes flashed at him curiously.

[The Fourteenth Doctor]

IC: Nick sighed. "This." His arm bulged, the muscles getting much larger, his fingernails turning into claws. One instant later and his arm was back to normal, no sign of the transformation apart from the image of a wolf howling on his left bicep, replacing the lobster there before. "Say, I haven't seen you around here."

[Rawrmouse]

IC: Lynae

"I'm Lynae." She said with a smirk. "I'm the new white queen. And you?" Lynae got up, her eyes now falling on the tattoos as they transformed. "Nice little trick there."

[The Fourteenth Doctor]

IC: Nick bowed his head slightly, looking back at her surprisingly violet colored eyes. Beautiful, but startlingly so. "Nick Kairos. Black Pawn." The shifter shrugged. "Those marks appeared the day my powers manifested."

[Rawrmouse]

IC: Lynae

"Charmed." She said, observing the wolf on his arm closely. "What powers do you have exactly, if I may?" Her hand gently touched the wolf before she looked up at him.

[The Fourteenth Doctor]

IC: Nick shivered a bit at her touch, surprised at the chill and contact. He kept looking into her eyes as he spoke, his gaze only straying when she touched his arm. "I'm able to shift any body part into an animal human hybrid, as well as being able to charge my body with large amounts of electricity. My final thing would be a healing factor."

[Rawrmouse]

IC: Lynae

Lynae smirked. "Ah...how curious." Her violet eyes keeping contact with Nick's. "So...you're a mutating mutant." She walked to the couch, crossing her legs as her lips stayed in a smirk.

Have you been here long?"

[The Fourteenth Doctor]

IC: "Two months, give or take." Nick shrugged. He crossed to a couch facing Lynae's, about five feet back. "I gather you're a vampire?"

[Rawrmouse]

IC: Lynae

She grinned, purposely showing off her fangs. "What gave it away?" Lynae tucked her fangs back in, laughing a little. "That's not that long..do you like it here so far?"

[Content with Life]

IC: Gabriel - Las Vegas

 

The group soon arrived at the food court, and Gabriel instantly went to order a salad wrap.

[The Fourteenth Doctor]

IC: "Cold touch, pale skin. Plus, the previous White Queen was a vampire." The shifter reclined a bit, continuing to keep his blue eyes on her face. "Some things and people make it more bearable than others."

[.:Advent Aeternale:.]

IC: Another body dropped into the river below, bringing the tally up higher than Corpse wanted to be bothered with. The amount didn't matter. He was fed and healed, and that was enough.Skin nearly obsidian from the fresh blood now roiling underneath, Corpse grinned a bloody, foul grin as he began his return to the Hellfire Club.

[Rawrmouse]

IC: Lynae

"Oh yes..Katherine." Lynae spat poisonously. "Well..lets say I don't practice what she does." Her eyes looked deeply into Nick's blue ones, a genuine smile playing on her lips. "That's good to hear though..."

[The Fourteenth Doctor]

IC: A grin tugged at the corners of Nick's mouth, his expression seeming to suggest he'd found reason to stay with hellfire. "Katherine and I didn't get along. At all."

[thelonewander]

IC: (Sam)

 

Sam was watching and listening, and over heard Nick talking to the new White Queen. Sam walked over slowly. Looking right at Lynae, Sam asked a question he felt that needed asking. "If you are the new White Queen ,then what Happened to Katherine?" Sam was merely curious  He had no love towards the old Queen, but it was good to be in the know.

[Rawrmouse]

IC: Lynae

"Then I think you and I will be great friends." Lynae said with a giggle. "Katherine and I...well we didn't play nice with each other either."