I just got done reading the first chapter, and it was some very inconvenient timing. It's set in the middle of the night, as am I. That means my mind is a little foggy, my imagination a little numb, and my attention span lacking. There were moments where my mind would begin to drift as I stared at the screen. It didn't help that at moments it felt like the character's mind was doing the same. As such, I know I cannot read all of the posts in one sitting, so I'll stop here for the night. Even once I get the the later chapters, however, don't expect any big, long review from me. I'm going to save that for when I'm finished with the entire epic, since I'm going to try to read this for entertainment, not as something to be dissected and criticized.
So comments, no criticism. For now, I just have to say that the opening was mystic, if not a bit slow. But slow isn't a bad thing. I'm just saying, it was definitely slow, but it also got that emotional point off real strong so as to really establish the reality of the character and her feelings. Hopefully, when I get started on the next chapter tomorrow, it will be faster-paced, with this dream-like scene out of the way.
It was haunting, kind of surreal...I hope to see that jacket in the next chapters. Just because. And I'm guessing that there was a biological war going on. You told me that this was in the future, but didn't really say anything more than that. I guess I'll find out the rest by myself. Part of this is giving me a City of Ember vibe (or more accurately, The People of Sparks). Good be good, could be bad. Really, that premise can be taken either way. Those books really weren't my favorite, since the kids didn't seem real to me, and the concept of the child protagonist was just taken in a direction that felt off, and as a child at the time I felt the author didn't really relate to me.
Anyway, that takes me to the thing that stands out to me the most, which is the child protagonist. That's really cool, and I have the highest hopes here in that she's an engaging main character. I think this is the thing that interests me in the story the most. There's the setting, but then there's the kid in the setting, and the affairs of children in science fiction and fantasy is always something special.