Hey, it's Zaxvo from the Short Stories Critics Club.I want to open this review by commenting on that twist...it was well-written, brilliantly played, and perfectly hinted at. Masterfully done. I laughed. My only quibble is that you go from being overly wordy and descriptive to being really casual in a short space, and it doesn't work very well for the readability of the story. for example, in two sentences Calvin goes from "a three-headed space alien with tentacles." to "I was benevolent enough to let you." Do you see how the tone and vocabulary varies? It throws the reader off a bit. Other than that, well done. I'm impressed and it was quite entertaining. Good job!
Edited by Zaxvo, Oct 22 2012 - 09:41 PM.