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Bit 1: I'm seeing some elements of yourself in Alex here, I likey. Also, Stephen reminds me somewhat of Proditor. Not sure whether that's good or bad.
Bit 2: *gasp* it's the drawing you showed me! Freaky.
Bit 3: Please tell me Thompson has a brother called Thomson.
Bit 4: Crux deeming blood precious seems like it's hinting at something but my inattentive self has not picked it up.
Bit 5: Thompson's a bit of a scary guy, I think. Scarier than Crux.
Bit 6: I can't put my finger on why, but I really like the way this whole section played out. It felt very natural and human, like a reminder that this is set in the real world. I mean, I'm no expert on girls, but I have a feeling they behaved pretty accurately.
This is it, Eve thought. Things are moving at last.
My thoughts exactly 
Also, there are a few typos and formatting errors throughout, but I really couldn't be bothered with all the faff of making quote boxes and such so you can find them yourself if you like.
But yeah, this chapter was keeping with the same great standard set by Chapter 8, and improving on it in fact. It made me a lot more motivated to keep reading that some of the other chapters. Great job 