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#1 Offline Kakaru

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Posted Nov 03 2012 - 09:55 PM

[9:04:23 PM] Cederak: You called it "blah blah poem."
[9:04:28 PM] Kakaru: oh right yes
[9:04:29 PM] Kakaru: yes I did


A familiar face under new mask
Lingering questions not to be asked
The friend I once had, now a legend of old
Butterfly-catcher, in statue of gold

Once you were small, before this grand end
Now I pause in my tracks to respect my old friend
Your bright orange eyes and strong heartlight beat
were wasted on power, the allure of the heat

When treetops swayed in the glittering sun
when the deadliest urge was to learn how to run
over dunes of shifting, rolling sand
and to swim underwater, no pretense so grand
as to claim ourselves the saviours of broken earth
to give ourselves higher meaning or worth
We never asked for a destiny great
or to wrestle with meanings of love and of hate

We simply laughed, and enjoyed our short lives
from the lily-pads deep to the tunnels of hives
But then the day came, unexpected and cruel
to steal you away and embark on a duel
against evil powers in fortresses dark
To stop, not kill, the great Toa's mark

They gave you the stone as I looked on in horror
A light flashed, you screamed, and were simply no more
Where once my friend stood on the engraved stones
stood a Toa I knew who must leave us, alone

His armour was grand, polished and clean
His eyes were dark, unfamiliar and mean
and I knew that then, in the beat of a heart
our peaceful lives would be torn apart

Your capsule was sent off in fanfare and tears
and the silence was filled with the whirring of gears
As the crowds left the docks and I stayed behind
watching the sky with one question in mind:
Would anyone know you, once you arrived
as my friend who caught insects in derelict hives?
Maybe you'd save them, train in your powers
but they'd never see you with hands full of flowers

As the days grew to years, my memories dulled
and feelings of apathy, absence were culled
Our lives went on as the bitter ache subsided
and no tales reached our ears of nations divided
until the day your scarred canister came
inscribed upon it, a memory-soaked name
My fingers brushed steel and the lid fell away
The inside was cold, smooth and dark grey

Inside it, a body, decorated and grand
A ceremony was held in far-distant land
for their great hero, defender of all
My friend, the Toa, had learned how to fall

As his mask is removed and heart laid to rest
others will tell me this was for the best
His death is an honour, they say, sad, with a smile
but the rocks are laid down on that unfeeling pile

And as I gaze at that unfamiliar mask
I can only think of one question to ask:
does anyone know him, my friend of old
as anything more than a hero in gold?

Edited by Kakaru, Nov 05 2012 - 01:03 AM.

She's out of the light, she doesn't remember
She said I wanna go home

 

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Face turns white like a sky in December
She said I wanna go home

 

#2 Online Chro

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Posted Nov 03 2012 - 10:04 PM

Wow. This is very nice. I feel as though it is describing a specific character, which I can't place, although it points towards an adventurous character such as Takua... But the poem is also ambiguous enough that it could be about anyone, and so it makes you create these characters in your head, which is excellent. For example, I have this idea of the subject being a Toa of Fire (allure of the heat) while the poem is narrater by his possibly Ga-Matoran friend.
I also liked how you referenced Bionicle terms- mask, Toa, etc.- and they flowed into the poem without disrupting it. Other works I see are knocked off by the use of such terms, they end up seeming unfitting, but that problem is prevailingly gone here. All in all, it's refreshing to see some relevant poetry, haha. :lol:

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#3 Offline Oniaku

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Posted Nov 03 2012 - 10:39 PM

Alot of concurrence with the guy above me, good job Kakaru
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