Edited by Cederak, Nov 30 2011 - 10:02 PM.
Axiomatic - Dynamic Paradigm Review
Posted Oct 16 2011 - 02:29 PM
Posted Oct 26 2011 - 09:16 PM
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Posted Oct 27 2011 - 02:23 AM
Thank you, Hahli Historian. It took a lot of time to put together this story, but at this point it's just a matter of getting it posted. I suppose you could say this falls into the Bionicle universe in a way that I always thought the Great Beings would go out and colonize other worlds with life. Dynamic Paradigm is the result of that idea. So you have a world inhabited by biomechs, however, it is a world that fears the presence of elemental power. I like Landrak, Endico, and Talise as well. I don't think I could choose a favorite among the story's gallery of characters, which is a first for me. Anyway, I hope you'll continue to enjoy my epic up to the end. =) -Ced
I love this story! Even though I really still have no concept of where this world fits with the BIONICLE universe (other than the Great Beings), I'm totally enthralled by this new dimension. My favorite Seraphs are Landrak, Endico and Talise - the depth and scope of their characters is great. Keep the posts coming!
Posted Oct 30 2011 - 06:14 AM
Posted Oct 30 2011 - 01:05 PM
Thanks for reading my epic, Toa of Italy. I have to admit, Acts 2 and 3 are probably my least favorite, despite them being the last sections to be written. It's not that they are any less important, but I had a lot more fun writing Acts 4 and 5. Some of the events may seem random and unorganized, but its a very intentional contrast to Act 1. Hopefully, once I start posting Act 4, you'll enjoy it as much as (if not more than) the first act. -Ced
I've just read the entire epic. I must say Act I is the best. The descriptions are quite good, as are the characters. The prologue (or whatever you call it) is beautifully written and the battle against Carzandus is also very good. I've found it hard to appreciate Act II as much as Act I. The events there just seem to pile up; although there is a main theme (the Seraphs' journey to the Vault), the events that occur during that time seem put there at random, without a very logical connection between each other. Since Act III isn't finished yet, I can't fully judge it. However, it was my impression that those chapters were meant to explain some of the mysteries and questions that had been raised in the first two Acts. If that's true, then they didn't have much success. It may be that I haven't read it carefully enough, but I've found it difficult to understand the explanations given by the Kyllidahk and how they were connected with the mysteries encountered by the Seraphs. I've tried to make this review as constructive and truthful as possible. I hope you aren't offended by it.
Posted Nov 11 2011 - 12:18 AM
I hope Chapter 30 was a satisfying answer to your questions. Cyclical was my favorite act of Paradigm to write, so I'm rather attached to it. =)-Ced
*gasp* Ceyvim is alive?! Why is he pretending to be Amtra? Did he recognise Talise? Why is he back now? Oh, pleeeeease keep posting!
Posted Nov 30 2011 - 10:11 PM
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