Nick Silverpen Posted April 10, 2013 Share Posted April 10, 2013 (edited) Island boy you are,running and digging in the sandnothing to check your spirit but the bashing swells of the waves;Each summer you’re growingJust as the heat warms the land. Island boy you are, the same face each season,Despite the costume changes, dishwasher to cook to ride attendant and morewith your many labor ranges. Island boy you are, running into that sunset photograph,chasing a view of a sunset in the distance,Sleeping in a chair on the beach after, hand clutching a map.Island boy free, gazing into the sky,Incompetent in here or there but that’s alright, Right now you are living the dream, and watching the tide.Island boy you are, in that final race through the sand,One last sweeping gaze through the islandNow moved into the cityOne step closer to a man. **** Little poem I had to write for a class, thought it fit in with FFFC 6: "Rebirth" Edited April 10, 2013 by Nick Silverpen Quote Disassembly-- Review Collective Works Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Makuta of Time Posted April 10, 2013 Share Posted April 10, 2013 I really like this poem that's no lie. But I do have to say, that I do not see how this fits into the topic of a Rebirth. Sorry man, though I really love the trasition of the setting from an island to a city. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jean Valjean Posted April 13, 2013 Share Posted April 13, 2013 While reading this, I used Rafiki's voice. It was hard imagining anyone else's voice for this poem. Interestingly, I read this through several times and had a different interpretation with each reading. I have trouble putting a finger on my dominant impressions, other than the whole Rafiki-as-the-narrator thing, but what I do know is that I have a definite impression of change. The scene was different with each reading, and I had different ideas of what the island was supposed to look like and what the island boy was suppose to be like, but by the end, I'm fairly certain that his story included moving to the city. See, at first he seems free, then it sounds like he is either a slave or a low-wage worker for a theme park. Then he moves to the city, and I have no idea what awaits him there. It sounds like he's growing up, moving on from the freedom of childhood and using his knowledge of that freedom to help contribute to the responsibilities of manhood, which is a theme I'm fond of. It was a pleasant read, if only because it touches on the simple joy of youth. So yeah, those are my thoughts. 24601 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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