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About VakamaMetruNui

Year 15
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    Tohunga
  • Birthday 03/04/1995

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    New York
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    Bionicle of course, Star Wars, BZP and my cat, Hahli. I also like Transformers, Marvel, Halo, Pokemon and both model and real trains(Favriote are steam engines ^.^). I also have quite an interest in voice acting, writing and Machinima.
  1. First I want to say thank you very much for taking the time to read my story. I will try to keep that stuff in mind in the future, especially about the back and forth being clearer and characterization. Someone else has told me about Tahu being off as well and I am forced to agree now that I take a second look at it. Also, I don't think that Takanuva's thought about Makuta was an intentional reference to Vakama, but I can't be 100% sure since I wrote this a year ago. However, I'm always for little references like that so I'll take it, intentional or not. Anyways, thank you for reading this again, hopefully you'll read the next one as well.
  2. So, this is the start of a new series of stories I’m doing in a Bionicle AU. I plan to be uploading stories on a fairly regular basis. This starts five years after the events of the 2003 story year however Mata Nui has not started to die yet so the events of 2006 on have not occurred. This will be looking into what might have happened if Mata Nui’s death had been postponed. Everything before the 2003 story chronologically is pretty much identical except for a few things here and there which I will point out at the appropriate times. The only other change is that there are biological familial relationships and all that entails. One more thing, I really want to get better at writing so I’m looking for constructive criticism. So please review and give your honest feedback, even if it’s negative, it means a lot to me. Legends of the Bionicle: The Vahi’s Destructive Power 1,005 AGC It had been five years since the defeat of Makuta at the hands of Takanuva, Toa of Light. The Turaga had then shared the Legends of Metru Nui and the Great Rescue with the Matoran before they all returned to the City of Legends. The Turaga were reunited with Dume and the Rahaga and they all got to work rebuilding Metru Nui. It was long and hard work, Turaga Onewa estimated it might take another millennium to fully repair the damage, but all the same, they were making good progress. Takanuva, however, was bored with rebuilding. He understood the importance of it, sure. But his heart was in adventuring. It was what led to him being exiled from Ta-Koro and becoming Chronicler, and eventually Toa of Light. And the rush of defeating Makuta in one-on-one combat? That was a feeling that couldn’t be replicated. He wanted more adventures like that. But anytime he suggested going out on some kind of quest, Vakama, or Dume, or Tahu, or someone else would shut him down. But if he didn’t do something remotely taboo soon, he was going to lose it. Takanuva had had to resort to stealing chisels from worksites just to get a taste of something close to breaking the rules. Then a couple of days ago, Takanuva got an interesting idea, although quite foolish and one that would most likely land him in deep trouble. His kind of idea. He was going to steal the Kanohi Vahi and test it out for a few hours. What could the harm be? Sure he heard the story of Vakama losing control against his battle with Makuta and Tahu almost doing so in the Toa Nuva’s battle with the Bohrok-Kal. But Takanuva figured since he wouldn’t be fighting anyone, he would have a better time at handling the mask’s power. Besides, he had faced Makuta and won. Maybe he was stronger than Vakama and Tahu. As night fell, Takanuva watched from behind a broken wall as Vakama left his hut and headed out for a meeting with the other Turaga. The Toa of Light waited until it was completely dark to avoid being seen by any Matoran. He opened up the door to Vakama’s hut and quickly moved inside, silently shutting the door behind him. Takanuva made a small light manifest on his index finger and began searching the walls, trying to keep it dark enough to remain unnoticed. He slid desks, bookshelves, and even the Turaga’s bed but found no sign of the Vahi. Takanuva knew Tahu had given the Mask of Time back to Vakama so it had to be hidden somewhere in his hut. Surely he hadn’t placed it in the Coliseum for safekeeping. If so, there was little chance Takanuva could get it. Then his light caught something small: a tiny shadow on the wall where there shouldn’t be one. Takanuva examined the wall closely and realized that the wall was indented ever so slightly. It looked like it could be a secret compartment; one big enough to hold the Vahi. He searched all over and tried all variety of ways to open it, but to no avail. Maybe there was a secret switch somewhere… His eye noticed a painting of the island of Mata Nui on the wall a bio away. Something about it seemed out of place. Takanuva removed the painting and saw a button hidden behind it. “There we go,” said the Toa as he pushed the button. The compartment slid open and indeed the Kanohi Vahi was resting inside it. Takanuva gingerly took it out and examined it. Its dull orange reflected the small amount of light from his finger and its empty eyes seemed to show him countless possibilities. This was going to be a fun night. Takanuva closed the compartment and hung the painting in place again. He placed the mask in his pack and then slung it over his shoulder. Then as stealthily as he entered, he exited Vakama’s hut and made his way to the far end of the metru. *** Takanuva hurried down the street toward his house and flung open the door after checking to make sure the coast was clear. Once inside, he shut the door and locked it. He turned on a lightstone and anxiously took the Vahi out of his pack and removed his Avohkii. Taking a deep breath, Takanuva placed the legendary mask on his face. Immediately, he felt the overwhelming power of time course through his body. He grunted as he struggled to maintain control. It was hard, but he was pretty sure he still commanded the mask’s awesome power. The Toa of Light spied a chisel that he had stolen from a Po-Metru worksite and picked it up before flinging it at the far wall. Concentrating, Takanuva activated the mask, slowing down time around the chisel. To his astonished eyes, the chisel was moving through the air slower. It took a full two minutes before it finally hit the ground. He experimented with other small objects, slowing down and speeding up time. He was having so much fun that he ironically lost track of time. But after an hour, he began to feel strange. It suddenly felt like the mask was starting to control him. Takanuva tried desperately to force down the mask’s power but as hard as he tried, the mask kept fighting back. The Toa’s mind was transported backward and forward in time, simultaneously witnessing events long transpired and yet to come. “Sometimes, my brothers, the best way, the only way, to win… is by losing.” “Lhii. His name is Lhii.” “Get out, Nidhiki—of my sight and of this city. Get out before I kill you.” “I can’t believe it… after all this… it was you guys all along…” “Now even the Great Spirit shall soon sleep!” “Today we defeat Onarax once and for all!” “This is my lifetime’s journey, yours lies beyond.” “We shall call this island Nahi Nui…” “I am Takanuva, Toa of Light.” “Stopped what?” Takanuva could feel the very fabric of time ripping apart. He knew he had to regain control or risk destroying the entire universe. It took every ounce of willpower Takanuva had inside him but finally, he was able to force down the mask’s power. As soon as he did, he ripped it off his face and slammed it down on the desk, leaning on the piece of furniture to catch his breath. He waited a few tentative moments before placing the Avohkii back on his face. Everything seemed to be all right. “There,” he breathed raggedly. “I stopped it.” “Stopped what?” Takanuva’s body went numb as he heard another voice in the room, particularly because it was his own. He turned around quickly to see himself standing behind him, albeit a Matoran around the time he became a Toa. Takanuva was speechless for a few moments, dumbfounded by the impossibility of the situation. “What did you say?” asked Takanuva. “I said ‘stopped what?’” Takua repeated. “I don’t remember what we were doing. In fact, I don’t really remember how I got here. I last remember searching for the Toa of Light.” Realization dawned on Takua’s face. “That’s who you are right? You’re wearing the Mask of Light. However…” Takua’s face scrunched up. “I thought I was supposed to be the Toa of Light, I could just feel it.” “You were,” said Takanuva. “I’m sure you have a lot of questions.” “The last thing I remember,” continued Takua, “Jaller and I were cornered at the Kini-Nui and then the Rahkshi showed up… and I was paralyzed with fear… and then Jaller jumped in and saved me… and then he died. Oh, Mata Nui, no.” Takua had to catch himself on the wall to keep himself from falling. “No, don’t worry, Jaller’s fine!” Takanuva assured his other-self. “We found a way to bring him back to life.” Takua breathed a sigh of relief. “Thank Mata Nui.” “You were right, you were meant to be the Toa of Light,” said Takanuva. “You see, I am you. You’re another version of me I guess.” “Okay,” said Takua, skeptical. “So how did that happen?” Takanuva was going to tell Takua the truth but he couldn’t. He couldn’t admit that it was his fault. The notion that he was essentially lying to himself was not lost on him. “It was an unknown enemy,” he lied. “They unleashed some kind of time attack that led to your creation.” “Oh, okay. Well, are we going to do something about that?” “Uh, I think so, I actually should go talk to the Turaga about that now.” “Okay, I’m going to go find Jaller.” Takua unlocked the door and was about to leave when Takanuva stopped him. “It’s night now you know.” “Oh, so it is. Then I’m just going to sleep here. Is that all right?” “Uh, sure, you make yourself comfortable, I’m just going to go out for a little bit.” Takanuva grabbed the Vahi from his desk and shoved it in his pack before bolting for the door. He paused briefly to glance at Takua, climbing into bed. He felt an odd combination of horror and pity. He then sprinted out of his hut and back toward Vakama’s. *** As Takanuva raced through the metru, he hoped that the damage was localized to Takua but as screams started rising up through the streets, he knew that wasn’t the case. He didn’t know how bad it was, but he couldn’t worry about that yet. Right now, he had to return the Vahi before Vakama realized it was missing. Maybe he could spin it as not being his fault. He opened Vakama’s door and hurried inside, not even bothering to shut it behind him. He reached his hand under the painting, pressed the button, opened the compartment, placed the Vahi inside, and shut it again. He let out his breath now that the deed was done. “And what Vakama doesn’t know won’t hurt him.” “It’s too late for that, Toa of Light,” said a voice. Takanuva looked over to his left to see Vakama deactivating his Huna. He looked more furious than Takanuva had ever seen him. He wondered if this was what the Turaga looked like when he was a Hordika. “Turaga Vakama, I’m so sorry—” Vakama held up his hand. “Silence. Do you think apologies can fix what you’ve done?” Tahu walked into the hut, magma swords drawn. “Takanuva, I really hoped Turaga Vakama was wrong.” “What do you mean wrong?” asked Takanuva. “Shortly before the time anomaly,” explained Vakama, “I had a vision of someone placing the Vahi back where it belongs. It looked like you, but like Tahu, I too hoped I was mistaken. Do you have any idea what kind of irreparable damage you’ve caused?” “What if Tahu uses the mask?” suggested Takanuva. “Maybe he can reverse it.” “And risk further damage to the universe?” Vakama shouted. “Absolutely not! The Mask of Time is a power that no Toa can truly wield, perhaps not even Makuta could have fully controlled its power. Any attempt to erase your mistake could lead to more havoc.” “I’m so disappointed in you, Takanuva,” said Tahu. Those words were some of the worst Takanuva had ever heard in his life. “I thought you knew better than this. What were you thinking?” “I don’t know, I just wanted to break the rules, like the old days, when I was a Matoran.” “Well those days are gone,” said Tahu harshly. “You’re a Toa now and you have responsibilities. If you can’t handle that or be trusted with that power, you don’t deserve to wear that armor or that mask.” Takanuva looked down sheepishly. “How bad is it?” “Bad,” said Vakama. “All kinds of beings that have been long dead have started appearing through the city, who knows what’s going on in the rest of the universe. And not everyone coming back is friendly.” Takanuva put his head in his hands and sat down in a chair. “So what do we do?” “We’re still figuring that out,” said Tahu, finally putting his swords on his back. “We have to take care of the dangerous beings and help integrate the peaceful ones into society.” “Please don’t tell anyone this was my fault,” Takanuva pleaded. “So you want us to lie for you?” asked Tahu. “You think you just get to wreck the universe and claim it’s someone else’s fault?” “I already told myself—Takua, that is, another version of myself—that it was some unknown enemy force. What’s the harm in that? It’s not naming anyone specific.” Vakama looked at Tahu. “Fine,” said the Turaga. “Out of respect to you, we will go with that story, but if the truth comes out, we will not come to your defense.” “Fair enough. So what do you want me to do?” “I think you’ve done enough,” said Vakama icily. “Return home and do your best not to break anything else.” *** As Takanuva walked sadly back to his hut, he reflected on his actions and wished the Vahi was capable of time travel so he could go back and stop himself from ever taking the mask. He had made some serious blunders in the last thousand years but this one really took the Madu fruit. He just hoped no one would end up getting hurt from all this. The Toa of Light stopped at his door, knowing what was waiting for him inside. But there was nothing he could do about it now, just accept it and move on. He opened the door and stepped through to find Takua asleep in Takanuva’s bed. The Toa quietly shut the door and sat down in a chair, just watching his Matoran-self sleep. He was so innocent-looking, unlike Takanuva. Maybe he could be better than Takanuva. The Toa of Light vowed not to let anything happen to Takua, the Matoran was going to live a better life than Takanuva. As for the Toa of Light, he would have to live with his mistake for the rest of his life, but he wasn’t sure how long he could live with his secret. The End
  3. Just read this whole thing and I have to say I quite enjoy it. I'm looking forward to the next chapter. I enjoy seeing things people do things in Bionicle that we never got to see in the story, like a dictator Toa running an island. The only criticism I would offer at this time would be to separate different characters' dialogue into separate paragraphs so it clearer to see that someone new is speaking. Other than that, I really like it.
  4. I remember reading your original spoofs like it was yesterday back in 2005. I always loved your spoofs and this one is your best. Keep it up, I can't wait to read the next chapter.
  5. Hello everyone, today I am here to show you my entry: Vezon - Master of Anarchy! Entry Picture On one of his many dimension hopping adventures, Vezon ended up on the mystical island of Okoto. There, he realized the the local Toa team did not recognize him, so he hatched a dastardly scheme. He claimed to be the Master of Anarchy, and vowed to fight beside the Toa for justice. But that charade can only last so long, and Vezon will eventually have to kill Tahu and his friends. Close Up Spear of Fusion I wanted to do a different take on the Spear of Fusion, so I took inspiration from Vezon's debut comic appearance where his spear is oddly warped. It also reminds of Loki's scepter from The Avengers, and who doesn't like Loki? Side View Back View I dunno Vezon doesn't know how he got here. Heroic Pose Vezon strikes a pose to show how much of a hero he is. He got sick soon after this photo was taken. Shhh, be vewy quiet, I'm hunting Tahus! Vezon arrives on Okoto and prepares to take out Tahu. Let me tell you a tale Vezon recounts tales of glory to his new BFF Tahu. The inevitable betrayal All good things must come to an end, including the Master of Fire. So there you have it, I hope you guys like him and constructive criticism is welcome. I don't think I'll win but hopefully I'll get a few votes at least. Anyways, have a nice day.
  6. That would be okay. Interesting. So just curious, how does removing a chest printing differ from painting a part? I would have thought they'd be on the same level.
  7. I was looking at the list again and I was thinking that The Many Deaths of Toa Tuyet should be in 07 since it references the Pit, Hydraxon and Botar.
  8. If I'm not mistaken, Vakama's jetpack is a secondary ability of the weapon itself, which means it would have worked the same even if a non-Toa had it.
  9. This should be a rather easy question to answer: Can any element be channeled through any Toa tool? Example, could Vakama have picked up Matau's aero slicers and shoot flame from them? I'm pretty sure that is the case, but BS01 didn't say and I wanted to be sure. Bonus question while we're on the subject of Toa tools: Can any object be used to channel elemental powers? It would seem so since Vakama used his mask making tool in the LOMN novel. So how far down the ladder does it go? Can a stick be used as a Toa tool, or do you need something more robust?
  10. In the spoiler free order, I think that The Mutran Chronicles and Federation of Fear should come before Shadows in the Sky as the former indirectly mentions Matoro using the Ignika at the end of it, and Icarax is mentioned killing Botar in the latter, which would have been before he left for Karda Nui. I feel that order might work better but I'm not sure. Otherwise, I really like this list, I had been looking for one like it, good job
  11. I know I'm a bit late in replying to this, but thank you very much. I wasn't sure how my Whenua voice sounded as I have typically not been very good at doing older voices. Your compliment means a lot to me
  12. I'll add my opinions into this discussion. First I just wanted to help clear a few things up. First of all the Bahrag are not Rahi, the Matoran would consider them to be because of their monstrous appearance, but they are intelligent. The Matroan do the same with Zyglak, Krana and Kraata. They seem to jump to conclusions on a few things Second is I am fairly certain that the Komau is more effective on dumber Rahi than smart, as it is a simpler mind to control. Although I believe there are Rahi that are too dumb that cannot be controlled by it. I am guessing that the Mask fo Rahi Control's upper hand is it can control those Rahi, as it is contorling Rahi and not minds. The next thing Baron is that you see Teridax not using his power on Keetongu as him not being able to use it. Remember that Makuta have 42 different Kraata powers, along with the power of shadow, their masks powers and incredible brute strength. In Antroz's own words: So while it is possible that Teridax could not control Keetongu, I find it more likely he did not want it to be over so easily, and so used his other powers instead. Same goes for him controlling the Manas. Maybe he couldn't control all of them, but he is also so sadistic that he probably turned them on each other just for the laughs. Now that that is out of the way, your theory does make some sense, but there is a hole. Kraata and Krana do not form civilizations, yet they are not Rahi, and thus I would not think Rahi Control would work on them, although I do not believe this has been proven. Also, BS01 says that most Rahi do not have the willpower to resist the Mask of Rahi Control power, with possible exceptions of Krahka and Keetongu. So I'd say the answer might be in there, that the deciding factor is willpower and not intelligence. For example, gorillas are intelligent, but they don't really have the same willpower that we do in being able to push their bodies through pain to do things, resist a sort of mental invasion, etc. And it seems like possibly even Krahka and Keetongu wouldn't be able to resist it. I hope that all made sense VMN
  13. I guess I figured that maybe the Great Beings did some designs, although as I type this it doesn't make any sense Why I thought that the Matoran standaridzed mask shapes was this line on the Kanohi page on BS01: That would imply Matoran mask makers in my mind, but that could just be me. I guess it's also vague enough that it could mean they just copied what the Great Beings set up. But other than that, your explanations make a lot of sense. Basically, Protodermis is a mystical object that can do a lot of things And yeah, I missed your point about the whole Toa armor thing, my fault on that. Makes sense now. Also, about Vakama, I do agree now looking at it that the general look of it does seem a bit more Noble than Great. One of the things that was throwing me off I guess was that he had an actual "mouth", compared to the "electricity mouth" the Noble does. Also the Huna page is where I read about it being a Great mask, and not a Noble mask: http://biosector01.com/wiki/index.php/Huna As you can see, it clearly lists Sarda and Balta as having Great-shaped versions, as we know they clearly do, and Vakama is there as well. Where Macku and Tehutti are listed as having Noble-shaped versions, which we know they clearly do. Anyways, the wiki could still be wrong. Also, why my last sentence in my last post didn't make sense was because I meant the movie version of Vakama's mask as a Toa, not Vakama's mask as a Matoran Edit: No, I just meant that the technology would be similar. If it could imprint the life force of a being, it wasn't a stretch to say that the mask retains the power it was carved with in its molecules. Just wanted to clear that up VMN
  14. That makes sense as far as making the mask with the proper disks, thanks for that insight So powerless masks would have an imprint of sorts of the power they were made with? That would actually make a lot of sense since we know masks hold an imprint of a being for a while, example of course being how they revived Jaller. I just have two problems with this idea. 1. Wouldn’t the mask designs of had to been set when the MU was created? It is my understanding the Matoran standardized the mask designs sometime later. It would seem that the designs would have had to been programmed into the Toa Power from the start, but I could be wrong on one or both of those things. 2. Wouldn't the Toa Power also be thrown off by a slightly different shaped mask, such as Lhikan's, or Nuju's or any of Nuhrii's? Or would you surmise it is "smart" enough to account for minor differences? So if this is the case, are you saying Krakua was transformed with his Suletu, or the Order gave it to him? Because BS01 says that Krakua had a Suletu as a Matoran, but they could just be assuming that. Also, off topic but: BS01 says that Vakama's mask was the Great version of a Huna, although I also thought for a while that he wore a Noble version, as it does have some similarites to it. Upon closer examination however, when you compare it with the Great version, especially the movie version, it has more in common with the Great version than the Noble version, but that's just my two cents on the matter VMN
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