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The Bionicle Comics Narration Review Topic

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#1 Offline Kopekemaster

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Posted Jun 27 2013 - 08:25 AM

Here is where you can comment and criticize constructively on The Bionicle Comics Narration.

 

To start things off, I realized that Kopaka never told Matoro his name, so I just worked it into the part where Matoro is telling Kopaka about the Toa.

 

I kept wanting to go into first-person present-tense. I kept it third-person past-tense, though. Do you think I should switch?

 

Looking forward to hearing what you all say!


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