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#1 Offline Stroxx

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Posted Aug 10 2013 - 04:42 AM

So, let's do something out of the box. This is going to be an enterily handdrawn comic, with Makuta (the species) being one of it's main focus! I've been trying to pull together something like this for years, but I only got around doing it only recently. Some of the first pages are going to look a bit wonky, because they have been revised directly from their old work file, but I hope you're going to enjoy the ride nontheless. :D

 

Diaries of Destral

As the title suggests, and mentioned before, this is going to be a mainly Makuta focus comic. The setting is directly a few days before the ending of the Metru Nui civil war, when our good, venerable Teridax is dispatched to the city island to finally solve a 400 years old problem.

 

Chapter 01 - Angry Fish:

Makuta Sethuldur, after his apprentice has been abducted by his latest catch, he sets out to save the wayward Toa of Gravity from his rather... erhm.. angry prey.

 

 

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]Main Cover | Prolouge Cover | Chapter 01 |

Prolouge: Page 01 | Page 02 | Page 03 | Page 04 | Page 05 | Page 06 || Chapter 01  : Page 01 | Page 02 | Page 03 | Page 04 | Page 05 | Page 06 | Page 07 |  Page  08 | Page 09 | Page 10 | |  

 

2014-02-21 Edit: I'm kind of getting slower with these pages. Either because I have no detailed reference on TQ or because of the start of 2nd semester. Also, the next page might come a bit slower, I had seen a really sweet contest over at DA and I want to get something in there too. But I'll definitely try to get a page up here either by next weekend or somewhere around the middle of the week after it.

 

As for our heroes! Miss Angry Fish kind of lost her composure. Wonder what kind of beverage she was drinking.. 

 

2014-02-22 Edit: And I finaly get bored of majhost crashing up on me. Finally found a way around that bugger..

 

 

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With clickable links! YAY!

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The Story so far

These icons will be clickable very soon! =)

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Prolouge:

Ironically, our story starts waaaaay down south from the city, at the islandic region of the Twin Gates, where things are dull and peacful usually. Aside from the seasonal super-storms that lay waste to the region every half a year or so. The Matoran population of this forsaken parts of the Domes are strewn across a myriad of tropical islands in villages with only a dwindling number of barely two dozen Toa patrolling on the unpredictable waves and shelves of the ocean on their makeshift boats. Most of these Toa are barely a few seasons old in their office as the frequent storm and other natural elements easily puts a dent on their numbers. Such is like Traqq, the fresh Toa of Gravity, who has joined on a fishing trip with the ever-so adventurous Makuta Sethuldur who often pays a visit to the region, enjoying the hectic nature of the weather and occasionally helping out the ordinary and welcoming people that endure it.


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#2 Offline ZippyWharrgarbl

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Posted Aug 10 2013 - 06:48 AM

I cannot sufficiently describe the joy that has consumed by heart. Really looking forward to seeing this here! :D


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Posted Aug 10 2013 - 02:21 PM

I cannot sufficiently describe the joy that has consumed by heart. Really looking forward to seeing this here! :D

Hey! Good see you around these parts too! Glad you already like it. :D I'll try to be as frequent with updates as much as possible, though pages might arrive here in a bit slower pace. X)


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Posted Aug 11 2013 - 12:14 PM

Wow, this is amazing! It's so good to see a hand-drawn comic, and a quality one too! Drawings and colouring are both awesome, the two suns are a very nice touch.I really like the prologue cover, I'm looking forward the following pages!


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Posted Aug 13 2013 - 04:01 AM

Main post had been updated with second page. Or if the reader doesn't feel like scrolling >> [color=#ff8c00;]Page 02[/color] <<

 



Wow, this is amazing! It's so good to see a hand-drawn comic, and a quality one too! Drawings and colouring are both awesome, the two suns are a very nice touch.I really like the prologue cover, I'm looking forward the following pages!

I only aim to oblige to that wish. And fortunately, there are a lot of pages already in backup. Nothing to worry about for the time being. ;)

 

And much thanks for the compliments! :D


Edited by Stroxx, Feb 22 2014 - 04:34 AM.

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Posted Aug 15 2013 - 09:35 PM

This looks GREAT!

I'll definitely be following this.

The art style reminds me of a mix between the actual Bionicle comics and Marvel AGE's.


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Posted Aug 19 2013 - 03:42 PM

Main page has been updated with new pages! Since I’ll be mainly away from internet in the next two weeks, I’ll likely only have time to surf around a bit and check the forums I frequent. Wich means the rest of the prolouge pages get up here now!  >> [color=#ff8c00;]Page 03[/color] << >>  [color=#ff8c00;]Page 04[/color]  << >> [color=#ff8c00;]Page 05[/color] << >>[color=#ff8c00;]Page 06[/color]  << 

 



This looks GREAT!

I'll definitely be following this.

The art style reminds me of a mix between the actual Bionicle comics and Marvel AGE's.

 

Thanks! I really like the old Bionicle comics, you have no idea how happy compliments like this make me. And yes, that kind of ’80-ish, ’90-ish comic vibe. It has some what stuck with me since the old Spidey comics. :D

 

And I’m really glad to hear that you’ll be a reg here.


Edited by Stroxx, Feb 22 2014 - 04:35 AM.

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Posted Aug 19 2013 - 08:45 PM

Hmmm

So the green one is either a biologist or a conspiracy theorist :P

And purple is a collector.

Seems pretty good so far, keep it up.


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Posted Jan 13 2014 - 04:50 PM

2014-01-13 Edit: It's been quite some time ever since the site had a little hiccup back in October and then majhost decided to fall in on itself for quite some time when I kind of gave up on continuing the comic in my first semester. I guess it's about time I bumped up this topic. Majhost still seems to have some problems. Mainly I just planned to post all the finished pages now at once, but they seem to have swithced back to their old processing ways where it takes hours to upload a pic. I don't quite know. I'll just post what I have on my hands right now.

Wich means the last three pages that got gorged by whatever monster has set foor here. :D

Chapter 01

Page 01

Page 02

Page 03

 

Hmmm

So the green one is either a biologist or a conspiracy theorist :P

And purple is a collector.

Seems pretty good so far, keep it up.

 

I guess he is a little bit both since he is a Makuta. :D


Edited by Stroxx, Feb 22 2014 - 04:39 AM.

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Posted Jan 13 2014 - 09:20 PM

Thought I already posted here; guess not. 

 

Very impressed, glad to see a drawn quality Bionicle comic around here. 

 

Happy to see you back at it. I await. 


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Posted Jan 18 2014 - 04:51 PM

Thought I already posted here; guess not. 

 

Very impressed, glad to see a drawn quality Bionicle comic around here. 

 

Happy to see you back at it. I await. 

 

It's like. all of the topic's posts since september had been nuked when the forums went crashing down back in October. And I'm glad you like the comic so far. I'll try to keep a weekly schedule. Hope you stick around for the ride. :D

 

Also, two new pages are up! Click the images for bigger the version, or just scroll up! =)

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Posted Jan 24 2014 - 05:33 AM

Without further ado, I'm presenting you with another two pages! With this I've lived up my cache of backup, so now on this topic will be simultaneously updated with other places I gravitate around without any delay (not that I shouldn't have closed the gap earlier, but still :D).

 

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Posted Jan 24 2014 - 08:23 AM

Oh well this is just lovely. The artwork is skillful, and I am loving the makuta. A good breeze of diversity from the usual bunch.


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Posted Jan 24 2014 - 01:25 PM

Ditto, Onaku -- this is just beautiful, and I'm loving everything you've got so far. I'm heartily looking forward to what's in store.


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Posted Feb 01 2014 - 01:05 PM

These comics are amazing I'm frankly shocked lego hasn't found out bout these
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Posted Feb 06 2014 - 06:21 AM

And so we meet Miss Angry Fish face to face! She seems to be a bit tipsy! Wonder if that will affect her judgement? Will it affect our heroes' course of actions? Why is she on this island? Does she live here? Will our heroes recognise her or is she a stranger to this region? Just a quick recap, our protagonists have already found an 'empty bottle of booze' and a 'relatively nice rag' wich may very well belong to this Toa. =)

 

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Oh well this is just lovely. The artwork is skillful, and I am loving the makuta. A good breeze of diversity from the usual bunch.

Ditto, Onaku -- this is just beautiful, and I'm loving everything you've got so far. I'm heartily looking forward to what's in store.

 

Thank you! I'm glad you guys enjoy it so far. \(°u°)/ I'm planning to make this comic quite the journey. (Hope my freetime will agree with that)

 

 

These comics are amazing I'm frankly shocked lego hasn't found out bout these
Keep it up

-Tahukan

 

Miracles still can happen. Though I'm not sure how much I'd be their cup tea. I'm quite rebellious in my topics. But thanks anyway. :D
 

And thanks for all the comments! I really like to read them through! It's super nice to know that you like the comic so far. And as always, CC is welcome. :)


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Posted Feb 12 2014 - 04:17 PM

A new page where I try to make an enviroment with actual foilage and don't fail that much. But the trees are still fugly. And the boys immature. What? We are talking about a Makuta and a juvenile Toa here! Cut them some slack! =D

 

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Posted Feb 12 2014 - 05:35 PM

Nice job i can tell it's a Faxon as for the trees they look fine to me!

 

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Posted Feb 12 2014 - 06:36 PM

I love this a lot - loving the art style in use here!


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Posted Feb 13 2014 - 05:13 AM

Ha, I bet this is going to end in tears. Probably Traqq's tears.


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Posted Feb 21 2014 - 04:32 PM

2014-02-21 Edit: I'm kind of getting slower with these pages. Either because I have no detailed reference on TQ or because of the start of 2nd semester. Also, the next page might come a bit slower, I had seen a really sweet contest over at DA and I want to get something in there too. But I'll definitely try to get a page up here either by next weekend or somewhere around the middle of the week after it.

 

As for our heroes! Miss Angry Fish kind of lost her composure. Wonder what kind of beverage she was drinking.. 

 

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Nice job i can tell it's a Faxon as for the trees they look fine to me!

 

-Tahukan

If you're talking about Miss Angry Fish, no, it isn't a Faxon, I'm sorry. The guys would be in a lot more trouble then. And Traqq is wearing an Elda.

 

I love this a lot - loving the art style in use here!

Thank you! :D

 

Ha, I bet this is going to end in tears. Probably Traqq's tears.

Well, figuratively speaking... 


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Posted Feb 21 2014 - 10:53 PM

Ah I see the Elda now I was close though
Nice I can see that Traqq is going to be wild..very wild I can't wait for the next page!

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Posted Feb 21 2014 - 11:32 PM

I'm long overdue in commenting on this! I've been following the comic for a while now and I'm glad to see it's running.  I wouldn't worry too much about taking your time between pages - life has a way of pulling us away, and I don't mind waiting a bit to keep up this level of quality.

 

As always, your art is a treat to look over, with an immediately recognizable style and a well-designed take on Bionicle beings.  I'm also a fan of your setting and choice of characters; we rarely got to see most of the Makuta as much more than a league of busybody schemers, so it's quite fun focusing on a more playful one in the time before Makuta were quite so non grata. 

 

If I had one criticism, your script is a little rough - there's some odd grammatical missteps ("do you have any idea how long did it take to build her from scratch?") and occasional bits of awkward phrasing.  It might not be a bad idea to show off the lines for a page to a friend before you start inking in dialogue, just to get a second opinion.


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Posted Mar 18 2014 - 12:03 AM

I may have revived this topic to the point where this might close, but I've been watching this comic series for some time. It's really good and I love the story so far. The artwork is amazing, and it's something I can't come near to doing. Hopefully you come back with more comics to entertain us.
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Posted Mar 18 2014 - 07:01 PM

Ugh. Tat armorless Toa of water is horrific. Is it a Toa of water? The face looks male. Anyways, that is horrifying.


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Posted Mar 19 2014 - 07:07 AM

Just finished reading this, and I like it. I like that all of the characters have exposed muscle tissue instead of skin. It helps to demonstrate their biomechanical nature, IMO, to have their armor be their "skin".

Also, I read Seth's profile, and I have to say, he's now my favorite character in all of this.

Ugh. Tat armorless Toa of water is horrific. Is it a Toa of water? The face looks male. Anyways, that is horrifying.

She's blue, and she's female (I assume; Traqq refers to her as female). She is most likely a Toa of Water.
Also, if you're looking for an attractive Toa of Water, look elsewhere. You'll probably find something to your liking somewhere in the depths of the internet. :P

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Posted Mar 20 2014 - 12:52 PM

It's not that I was expecting it to be attractive, it's just that this is probably the closest anyone has come to Bioincle gore.


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Posted Apr 01 2014 - 09:28 PM

Such violence in this page! :U Also I'm sure that's just how she invites people to afternoon tea. Those guys are so rude!

This is still looking great! :D

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Posted Apr 01 2014 - 10:08 PM

Aaahhh this is incredible ^^ You've got a real knack for storytelling, it's barely been a dozen pages and I'm already drawn in by these characters and curious as to what's going on and how they'll deal with it. The humor is great, as is their banter in general. But I'm rrreeeaaaally mostly interested with the art.

I love the way you draw these characters; as others have mentioned, you really put the emphasis on bio in biomechanical and it works really really well. They look very much alive and expressive, not only with their body language but their faces. The addition of nose ridges and eyebrows keep them from looking too out of the ordinary as far as facial structure goes, and makes the masks/face more interesting. You can tell that some parts of them are flexible while others are rigid and it's a very interesting effect. I also looove the armor and their bodies in general, it's very obviously Bionicle with a nice bit of flair and complexity added on but it's not at all overwhelming or overdone, and all the forms are very smooth and nicely curved and basically everything is pretty to look at and nothing looks stiff. You've really done a great job of making everyone look like living, breathing organic beings who are at the same time very robot. The designs of their armor are very nice as well, especially, the Toa of Water with the lack of chest armor exposing this cool little metallic structure connecting to the heartlight forming the framework of her torso, and the very cool ribs and the somewhat flabby musculature by her belly.

The sparse distribution of color on the two dudes is a really nice design and the choices of the green and purple look great ^^ I very much like the high contrast shading on everything, it gives it a lot of dimension while at the same time not overpowering the bright, colorful composition with too much a poke at realism or extra hues (the highlights help a lot, too!). Speaking of which, the very bright colors overall and all the warm tones give the comic a very distinctly tropical, comfortable atmosphere, and it reminds me very much of a Mata Nui environment, in that it feels like biomechanical beings do not feel out of place on a beach and it feels very Bionicle in theme. The coloring in general is very nice, everything just looks really really good and nothing is distracting, and the texture in the sand is really really pretty and .

The only two things that irk me about this is the handwritten dialogue and the size of these pages. I much prefer handwritten text (when it's legible, obviously) to computer generated text 'cause it's a lot more interesting to look at and less restricting, and of course it's a lot easier to write stuff out how you picture it than it is to sit there for a half hour adjusting typefaces and figuring out the kerning and fiddling with the font size. However, in some speech bubbles the letters start to get a little squished together and, as I'm about to address, it's a little cumbersome to read due to the size. The pages look fine as they are, but when you get to the text it feels like it would way easier to read if the pages were larger, although writing with a thinner brush would prolly solve that too. The size also bother me 'cause, although I'm assuming you're just uploading them smaller than they really are so that they load faster and fit cleanly on a webpage, I'm afraid that that is the actual size and that you're working in too small a resolution, 'cause it would mean you couldn't upload them larger without losing quality and you definitely wouldn't be able to print them in real size without losing quality, should you ever want to reupload them or print a neat little booklet for whatever reason. That's just a concern that always strikes me as a computer artist, though, and doesn't have any actual impact on the comic itself. I'm just curious to know what the dealio is with that. (Also on second glace, the water at the bottom of Page 10 looks like it has way too dark of a shadow going on there, 'cause light should still be passing through the water with no problem, and also the dark shading interferes a bit with the foreground 'cause it starts to blend in a kills the illusion of distance. But otherwise I don't really notice anything that I need to point out.)

This is a really, really neat comic and I'm looking forward to reading more of it ^^ I'm assuming you're working in Photoshop? Or..? :)


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