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Nowhere: Review Topic

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#1 Offline Exitium

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Posted Aug 18 2013 - 03:27 PM

This is the review topic for Nowhere.


The second worst fate that can befall a work such as this is for it to be met predominately with negative criticism.  This fear has lead plenty of writers, myself included, to spend numerous hours agonizing over their work, hoping to make it perfect, and in the process realizing that doing so is impossible.  Every author faces some fear sending their masterpiece out into the world in its woefully imperfect state, an especially painful task for a perfectionist like myself.


I began working on Nowhere in the fall of 2010, and it has undergone quite the transformation since then.  Remarkably, the final product closely matches the plot that I scribbled down on a piece of paper when the idea first came to me, though the title, characters, and larger themes changed dramatically.  Both the protagonist, Veelix, and the setting, Kia Nui, date back to late 2007, though they share little in common with their ultimate counterparts other than name.  I completed the first draft around Christmas of 2012, and as a result, the style and thematic emphasis shifted subtly as it progressed.


Nowhere is not an epic.  It is a story about a single Matoran, and there are no battles, no unambiguously evil characters, and no undeniably heroic figures.  While some authors assure their readers they mean nothing more than what is written on the page, I would be lying if I said that the story is not intended to provoke thought on certain topics.  That said, the beliefs of the characters are theirs alone, not mine, and trying to discover my beliefs through my portrayal of Matoran governance and worship of Mata Nui is the wrong reason to read Nowhere.


The worst fate a work can befall is for it to go completely unnoticed, which is perhaps one of the most discouraging circumstances that writers can find themselves in.  Conversely, nothing will encourage me to work more than to hear your feedback, any amount of which will be sincerely appreciated.  I know there is a lot of emphasis on providing constructive criticism, but even if you can find nothing good to say about Nowhere, I would like to hear that too.  Of course, I hope you do enjoy reading this story nearly as much I enjoyed writing it.

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#2 Offline krikanalo

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Posted Aug 18 2013 - 09:41 PM

very interesting start. i like how you've developed your OC so far.

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#3 Offline krikanalo

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Posted Aug 21 2013 - 12:15 AM

another well-written chapter. i liked the dialogue and use of detail.

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#4 Offline Toa of Italy

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Posted Nov 10 2013 - 05:44 AM

Very interesting.


I liked the idea that seems to be the basis of your epic, to question the values that drive Matoran society not only on Kia Nui, but in the canon Matoran Universe as well, where, like on the island you've created, Matoran labor continuously but no satisfactory explanation for their work and their laws is ever asked for nor given.


The other aspect I particularly appreciated was the way you recreated many of the places and realities of the main storyline (especially of the island of Mata Nui) but then added some details which made them unique but not too complicated.

This process, however, was most successful where Veelix's character is concerned: obviously inspired by Takua and, like him, an outsider (and a partially-amnesiac one at that), he is, however, more inquisitive and critical than Takua ever was.

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