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#1 Offline Kopekemaster

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Posted Jan 27 2014 - 03:31 PM

Review Topic for this.

Constructive criticism: encouraged.


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Posted Jan 27 2014 - 03:52 PM

First Chapter?  Amazing.  I like how mysterious it is, and you really have the ability to make anything sound interesting.  Keep up the good work!  By the way, I am also a writer myself, but not of BIONICLE.


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#3 Offline Kopekemaster

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Posted Jan 27 2014 - 05:49 PM

First Chapter?  Amazing.  I like how mysterious it is, and you really have the ability to make anything sound interesting.  Keep up the good work!  By the way, I am also a writer myself, but not of BIONICLE.

 

Thanks! Yeah, I typically don't (aka NEVER) write fanfiction, because I feel that it isn't really...mine in a way. I mostly write my own stuff *hup hup *cough* see link in signature*, but couldn't resist this idea once it came to me.

 

 

EDIT: New part of the story.


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Posted Feb 22 2014 - 03:27 PM

New part up, you all. Check it.


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#5 Offline JAG18

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Posted Feb 22 2014 - 07:22 PM

I liked the introduction, felt very suspenseful, the first part was just alright, probably because it was basically two guys walking along.  The last chapter wasn't too bad, good cliffhanger I'd say.   

Overall, I'd say I'm interested in seeing where this go's; can't think of anything I would suggest doing in the next chapters, writing wise I mean.

 

So yeah, good start. 


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Posted Feb 22 2014 - 09:40 PM

I liked the introduction, felt very suspenseful, the first part was just alright, probably because it was basically two guys walking along.  The last chapter wasn't too bad, good cliffhanger I'd say.   

Overall, I'd say I'm interested in seeing where this go's; can't think of anything I would suggest doing in the next chapters, writing wise I mean.

 

So yeah, good start. 

 

Thanks. I'm not really trying to leave the parts off at "cliffhangers", I'm just writing for a bit then finding a good place to stop. 

 

And I've got this whole thing planned out. There's going to be plenty of cliffhangers ahead. :P


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Posted Feb 23 2014 - 09:44 AM

 

I liked the introduction, felt very suspenseful, the first part was just alright, probably because it was basically two guys walking along.  The last chapter wasn't too bad, good cliffhanger I'd say.   

Overall, I'd say I'm interested in seeing where this go's; can't think of anything I would suggest doing in the next chapters, writing wise I mean.

 

So yeah, good start. 

 

Thanks. I'm not really trying to leave the parts off at "cliffhangers", I'm just writing for a bit then finding a good place to stop. 

 

And I've got this whole thing planned out. There's going to be plenty of cliffhangers ahead. :P

 

Good, I guess about the second part.   :P

 

And also, you sure you don't want to leave off at cliffhangers?  They say it's a good way to keep an audience, because everyone who reads this will want to know what happens next and keep coming back.


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Posted Jul 01 2014 - 08:54 PM

New chapter up, y'all.


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Posted Jul 29 2014 - 06:17 PM

The story is great so far I found it cool how you described the feeling of being turned in to a toa . I find all these fanfictions amazing some take place in the past and some like yours and mind take place in the future of bionicle but where as mine is in the future of the stranded story and has no toa in it  , your is the opposite and seems to be in a world where teridax won and there is a over flow of new toa . 


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Posted Jul 29 2014 - 07:30 PM

Eh-hehhehheh.

Not quite - though an interesting take on it.


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Posted Jul 29 2014 - 08:05 PM

Eh-hehhehheh.

Not quite - though an interesting take on it.

 Interesting so your not going that rout well congratulations you have now peeked my interest since it isn't going that way .


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