Harlequin Posted January 28, 2014 Share Posted January 28, 2014 I'll answer any questions you may have and I'll take all constructive criticism,advice and even a review is gladly accepted!!! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Chro Posted January 29, 2014 Share Posted January 29, 2014 I've just skimmed this, and it seems interesting so far, but there's one thing I recommend... be certain to check what you write to ensure it passes the word filter. For example:“Don’t count me dead just yet you cool dudes!” Quote save not only their lives but their spirits Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Harlequin Posted January 29, 2014 Author Share Posted January 29, 2014 Thanks actually didn't notice that Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Hodor Posted February 4, 2014 Share Posted February 4, 2014 Okay, skimming it... The biggest thing that popped out to me is the odd formatting. For example, this “What the ###### happened here? there isn’t a single Tarly banner insight”, whispered Cheng,“It seems that the Tarlys have access to a new weapon”, I whispered back,“What kind of weapon could do this kind of damage?”,“I don’t know; but we shouldn’t stay here any longer, there could men of Tarly still lingering”,“You’re right let’s head back”.Should look like this. “What the ###### happened here? There isn’t a single Tarly banner insight.” whispered Cheng, “It seems that the Tarlys have access to a new weapon”, I whispered back, “What kind of weapon could do this kind of damage?” “I don’t know; but we shouldn’t stay here any longer, there could men of Tarly still lingering.”“You’re right, let’s head back”.This makes it a good deal easier to read, since the text doesn't look like a single blob. I'll give more of an indepth thing when more is up. Seems interesting so far, though. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Harlequin Posted February 6, 2014 Author Share Posted February 6, 2014 Thank you very much! I'll definitely use this format next time Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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