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The Story of Mata Nui (A fanfic by my little brother)


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#1 Offline ElevenGuy

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Posted Apr 24 2014 - 07:38 PM

My brother, who is much younger than I, asked me to post his story after watching The Legend Reborn for the first time. I hope this is allowed xD

He drew all the pictures himself.

 

Presenting, The Story of Mata Nui!

 

One day, Mata Nui was walking and a Skrall came up to him. The skrall said,

"Hey how are you doing? I'm gonna smack you in the face!" So Mata Nui jumped up and attacked the Skrall.

"Ow," said the Skrall. Mata nui hit the Skrall so hard that it crashed into a wall and died. Then more Skralls came and said,

"We're gonna smack you in the face!" But then Mata Nui said,

"No! I'm gonna smack YOU in YOUR face because you're the baddest!" After he smacked them in the face, Mata Nui picked up one of the Skrall and turned him into Metus.

"Mata Nui, my old enemy!" Exclaimed Metus. Metus slithered into the field and found his parents. Metus' parents had been turned into Skralls by a big robot. Then Mata Nui came up to Metus and squished him with all his might. Metus was squished so hard that his mask came off. Mata Nui said,

"I'm making you into a good guy right now, Metus! Metus turned into a good guy and Mata Nui gave him a fire sword. Mata Nui renamed him Ehluman. Mata Nui left to make some new friends.

"You should enter the Glatorian tournament!" said Mata Nui's new friends.

"Ok," said Mata Nui. Mata Nui entered the tournament and won! He won both the gold metal and the second place trophy!
 

The End.

 

Illustrations:

-Mata Nui (left) fighting an elite Skrall (right)

-Metus (in snake form)


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#2 Offline Pohatu: Master of Stone

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Posted Apr 24 2014 - 08:38 PM

I like this- it brings back memories!


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#3 Offline Phovos

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Posted Apr 25 2014 - 04:28 AM

D'aw, that's sweet. How old is your little brother?
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#4 Offline ElevenGuy

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Posted Apr 25 2014 - 04:01 PM

He's 5.


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Posted Apr 25 2014 - 09:02 PM

I DON'T LIKE IT BECAUSE IT CONTRADICTS BIONICLE CANON

 

just kidding

considering his age I'd say he did a wonderful job


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#6 Offline Wazdakka

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Posted May 10 2014 - 06:34 PM

Cute. 


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#7 Offline King of Dust

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Posted May 11 2014 - 03:54 AM

Guys ... It's not cute. I think the story as many deeper meaning so please don't go calling it cute when it's a complex piece of literature. Thank you.

Seriously though.What I do think is lovely though is you've shown him the film and he's loved it so much to write a story, just like we all did when we were younger. Keeping Bionicle alive.

Edited by CeeCee, May 11 2014 - 03:57 AM.

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#8 Offline The Doctor U

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Posted May 11 2014 - 04:03 AM

This is far better than anything Greg F has written. Your brother is genious.


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#9 Offline Purple God

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Posted May 17 2014 - 07:05 AM

Man, it reminds me of the stories I wrote back when I was a kid.

 

It's nice to see children get into writing so early, especially for BIONICLE.


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#10 Offline Pohatu: Master of Stone

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Posted May 19 2014 - 06:39 AM

I need to make a moc named Ehluman. With a fire sword, of course.


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#11 Offline Oroki

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Posted Jun 07 2014 - 02:48 PM

This fanfic is gonna be huge with the fanbase.


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