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Posted Apr 28 2014 - 09:30 PM

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Walls, as a rule, are not meant to explode.
 
Unfortunately, Tahtorak are not known for their law-abiding natures, and so the east wall of the Piraka Stronghold went rather off-script.
 
As the Tahtorak stormed off into the distance, a figure, tall and not quite a Toa, stepped through the hole her companion had so generously provided and looked up at the sky.
 
Krahka breathed deep, the flat of her nose shifting as she did.  The stench of the Pirakas base was a cavalcade of sour decay and bitter ashes, but beyond that
 
Salt and sea.
 
Told you, she muttered after the vanishing figure of the Tahtorak.
 
For an instant, her body did something that bodies were not supposed to it was far too small for its skin, or perhaps the other way around and then where a not-quite-Toa had stood, a not-quite-Gukko took flight. 
 
Metru Nuis prodigal daughter had been away for too long.
 

Transformations

 
Her wings were shaky, her flaps unbalanced, but at least she was flying again.  There was no telling how long shed spent locked in that nightmare, but it was far too long for a shapeshifter to stay in one form.  Some little piece of her mind kept reaching for arms and legs that werent there, and it took a combination of instinct and conscious rebalancing to keep herself going. 
 
Both up, then both down no need to overthink things.  Her beak tried to smirk.  Well, how about this.  Whole sentences without the dark screaming into your mind.  What a pleasant change of pace.
 
It got easier as she went the imprint of the Toa Metru was fading from her mind, and old memories of soaring with the other Gukko came to her if not in picture then at least in action.  A familiar pride rose in her chest as her motions became more and more fluid.  
 
Thats it.  Remember who you are.  A Krahka, not some Toa floundering in the shadows.
 
She redoubled herself; the wind was at her back, and if she was where she thought, she could be at the city by dusk.  Toa floundering in shadows, indeed.  I hope theyve saved me a few Visorak to crush.  The not-smirk widened.  Maybe even Roodaka herself, if Im lucky.
 
And if they had failed well, Toa didnt fail.  It was one of the things that made them so irritating.  But if they had failed, that made six new, very powerful Rahi who could use a leader.  And maybe she could find it in her heart to lend her new brothers a hand if they werent too spidery.  It might even be nice, having a few others to help marshal the Rahi.
 
She let herself daydream as she flew, reveling in the clarity of thought that accompanied her freedom.  She would have to make sure everything was in order, of course, but then? Maybe it was time to crash open the archives, or to remind the Matoran who had fought for that city of theirs while they were sleeping.  Perhaps those Toa would finally agree to give her and her brothers and sisters a piece of their world-
 
The city came rushing at her over the horizon, and any daydreams of Rahi rebellion faded away with it.  Even at a distance, she could see that accursed webbing was gone.  Toa.  Always too good at their jobs.
 
Yet as her home grew closer, and her gaze fell upon the dust of ages that lined its towers, she suddenly found herself wondering if that was quite true.
 
 
 
She stayed up high for her first pass over the city; it was easy enough to see that the great transport chutes had long since collapsed, and that the buildings at the citys outskirt were crumbling with disrepair.  Her eyes darted from street to street, looking for any sign of life a rambling Mahi, a stumbling Matoran, anything and found only silence.  Confusion and anger gnawed away at her.  What had happened here? Surely the Toa had defeated the Visorak, but why was her city falling to ruin?
 
There was a distant cry beneath her, and she turned and swooped down towards it, coming to land on the edge of a Le-Metru rooftop.  In the street below, two Matoran was it her imagination, or had their bodies changed since shed left? had bumped into each other and were scrambling after a bundle of fruits that had gone spilling down the street.  Krahka pulled her wings closer to her and narrowed her gaze.  Here, at least, was life, apparently unfazed by the citys change.  Now that she looked further up the street, to the core of the city, she could see a few other Matoran going about their business.  Curiouser and curiouser. 
 
Before she could take off again, she saw the two Matoran jump to attention.  The door of the building she was perched on had swung open, and a stubbly green Turaga she had never seen before had stepped out into the street.  She craned her neck to hear, shifting the Gukkos ears into an Ice Bats.
 
-just be more foot-careful, Tamaru.  We still havent gotten the tree-gardens growing again yet, and we dont want to make any more quick-returns than we have to.
 
Sorry, Turaga Matau-
 
Matau? She blinked.  Wasnt that name it was! Onewa, Matau, Nokama, Nuju, Whenua, Va- blast it, what was it? Vakama.
 
On the street below her, Matau said his goodbyes and turned to make his way towards the coliseum.  Krahka narrowed her eyes.  Something was very wrong with her city.
 
 
 
None of them thought much of a Gukko perched atop the balcony outside; Matau spent a few minutes trying to shoo her, and Nuju chirped at her in a passable, if rather foul-mouthed, attempt at Gukko, but soon Dume (the proper Dume, not the one whose scent had been tinged with something foul) beckoned his other Turaga to ignore the bird outside.  Onewa looked back at her once, and she made a point of matching his gaze until he, too, turned away.
 
The Turagas conversation made little sense to her; they spoke of islands and Toa Nuva, of the Great Spirit, of disaster and prophecy.  Eventually, the group fell quiet.
 
It was Onewa who broke the silence first.  How long has it been?
 
In time, Dume answered for the rest.  Two weeks and four days.
 
And since the Toa Nuva left? Matau murmured.  Nuva again. Teams of Toa had come and gone over the years, but that was a title she had never heard.
 
Three weeks and six days.
 
Onewa stared straight ahead, at a point in the wall between Nokama and Vakamas head; Krahka could see the others finding their own ways to avoid each others gazes.
 
And Takanuva? Nokama asked.  Has he reported anything to any of you?
 
Nothing, Vakama replied.  Krahka shuffled her wings in irritation; would it kill these Toa - these Turaga to say anything directly for once?
 
Onewa looked down to the ground, and for a moment it seemed he would say something.  Krahka waited for him to speak up, to cut through this inexplicable tension.
 
He did not.
 
 
The sun had slipped over the horizon by the time the meeting was over, and the sight of the city sinking into the darkness put Krahka on edge.  The crumbling architecture seemed even more sinister than before, and how had she not noticed sooner? the air was tinged with a stale rot, the sort of smell she would expect to find in the long-abandoned remains of a Rahkshi den.  At the edge of her senses, she could hear scuffles that might be the noise of her brothers and sisters prowling the empty streets.
 
Or perhaps she couldnt.  In the darkness, she had heard the voices of other Rahi whispering to her more times than she could count.  Who was to say this city wasnt itself false, the product of a mind worn down to nothingness-
 
I say.  She breathed deep and tasted the city.  This is real, and that prison is past now.  And if I were to go mad, I would seek refuge in the city I knew, not this graveyard.
 
She glanced down.  Onewa was hobbling down the streets of Po-Metru far below her.  And you, Toa.  Whatever befell this city, did it take you as well?
 
She looked back up the street; at the corner, a flat, sturdy set of Po-Matoran apartments was nestled between a broken chute station and a run-down storefront.  A Po-Matoran was sitting on its steps, carving away at something.  Krahkas eyes narrowed.  There was one way to find out.
 
 
 
His room was surprisingly empty, devoid of the trinkets the Matoran seemed so fond of collecting.  A spare staff lay in the corner, and a few rough-hewn stone spheres were settled at the foot of the bed, but other than that there was little to suggest it as the home of any leader.  Krahka sniffed the air as she hopped down from the windowsill; his scent was there, but only barely.
 
She closed her eyes and let the image of the Turaga float into her mind.  The first shift was always the most difficult, but
 
There was a gasp of air, and it was done.  She stretched an arm out experimentally; the muscle and metal clicked together wearily, and her fingers separated with a faint whine that ran up her arm.  So weak.  How can he stand it?  On a whim, she shifted her other arm to match his old Toa form, and it blossomed into being, sturdy and strong; the difference was unnerving.
 
From below her, the clunking, slow sound of someone climbing the stairs came floating up.  On a lark, she let her arm return to the Turagas form and grabbed the spare staff from where it lay, then turned to face the window as the door behind her creaked open.
 
She heard a gasp, then a muted curse.  Mata Nui take it, Hafu.  Gift-giving is no excuse for breaking and entering, no matter how good the statue-
 
Krahka turned and looked him over.  Hafu? Is that his name? You top-dwellers are always so fussy about the names of everything.
 
To his credit, his knees were slow enough to give out that she had time enough to catch him.  Come on, she chided, this body is weak, but its not that bad.
 
The Turaga lifted his head weakly and smiled.  Hello, Krahka.
 
 
 
They sat themselves on his bed; at his insistence, she shifted form again to Nokamas.  He gave a low chuckle.  Try it as a Turaga.  Its going to be hard enough explaining things if someone walks in on me and Turaga Nokama; its going to be impossible if someone walks in on me and Toa Nokama.
 
Krahka shrugged Turaga were such worriers and a moment later she was tossing the extra staff back and forth in Nokamas shrunken hands.  So strange, you Toa, she said.  You shift shapes nearly as often as I do.  I think I preferred your forms the second time, even if they were a little more Visorak than Id like.
 
Well, he said, and she could hear his voice trembling, we were made to be Matoran, not Rahi.
 
She grinned.  Really? There was a half-Rahi Toa I met once who wasnt bad at wrangling Tahtorak.
 
And there was a Rahi I met once who tried being a Toa and did quite a job of it.
 
I know, she said, spinning the staff between her fingers for a few seconds before she grabbed hold of it.  Maybe a better job than the actual Toa, going by this city.
 
He flinched the slightest at that, and she felt a moment of satisfaction and pity.  At least the Turaga was ashamed of what had happened to this place.
 
The Visorak are gone, he said roughly.  Long gone.  And Roodaka and Sidorak with them.
 
A pity, she said.  I wouldve liked to crush that little neck of hers myself. 
 
If he was surprised at her choice of words, he hid it well.  He had been staring at her ever since theyd sat down, as though he was still unsure of if she was actually there, and truth be told it was starting to grate on her nerves a bit.  It was time to start getting some answers.  So, she said bluntly, how long has it been?
 
That startled him, and she caught the hesitation before he said, quietly, A thousand years.
 
She mulled the number over in her head.  She had dwelt in this city far longer than that, but it was too long.  Even without the Visoraks meddling, much could happen in a thousand years.  Any of her brothers or sisters trapped in the Archives that long without supervision would have surely perished.  If the Rahkshi had been left unchecked, it was possible they had spread their infections
 
His face was contorting with worry.  Not too bad, then, she said, unsure of why she was lying.  Though it seems to have been a very eventful time.
 
The Turaga gave a tired laugh.  Perhaps not as much as you would think.
 
His voice sounded eerily resigned, like the cries of a trapped Mahi in the Archives chambers, and it set her on edge.  Youve changed, Onewa, she said.  And I dont mean that youve simply continued to shrink.
 
I have, and so have my fellow Toa.
 
Everything save me, then.  A fear she couldnt explain was wrapping itself around her heart, and she stood.  I fought aside you Toa because I thought you wanted to protect this city.  Instead I return to find it a crumbling wreck and the six of you not much better.
 
Onewa flinched again and looked away.  Thats Im sorry, Krahka
 
Karzahni take it, what was wrong with him?  Fine.  I was hoping to speak to the Toa who didnt think twice about challenging me, not the Turaga who nearly faints dead away at the sight of his own old body.  She turned back towards the window.  I have a thousand years worth of city to check-
 
Wait! The desperation in his voice ground on her ears.  Krahka, listen to me.  This city all thats happened I can explain. He hesitated for an instant.  You deserve an explanation.
 
That gave her pause.  She looked back towards the Turaga.  He was standing now, if leaning on his staff, but the light of his eyes was just a touch sharper, more like the gleam he had carried as a Toa.
 
And what makes you say that, Turaga?
 
Because this has been your city as long as it has been ours, and because you died saving it.  He must have caught the annoyance on her face, for he quickly added, or almost died.  Or, that is he looked away for a moment, and when he spoke again his voice was pained.  Well.  To us, you did die.
 
She could still feel the tension that had gripped her since shed seen the city come over the skyline, but something in the Turagas words softened it.  He took a hesitant step towards her.  If you would let me Id like very much to speak to the great Rahi I once knew.
 
She took a step away from him almost automatically.  A hundred thousand years of dealing with the top-dwellers left instincts a single Tahtorak ride wouldnt erase.  And yet - she had come to him for a reason, hadnt she? She wanted answers, and if he was willing to give them, she may as well take them.
 
Fine, she said, more than a little testily.  We shall talk.  But Ive had enough of this dusty lair of yours, and I have a city to see.  Ill be out behind the building. 
 
Before he could reply, she turned and leapt from the window, slipping back into Gukko form as she did.  As she glided away into the night, she thought she heard a laugh of surprise.
 
 
 
They walked in silence for a while along Po-Metrus back streets.  Night was beginning to fall, and the few Po-Matoran they passed thought nothing of the Turaga out for a stroll with one of his people even if they couldnt recall seeing anyone with quite that combination of armor and Kanohi before.
 
The buildings grew dilapidated around them as they made their way out of the heart of the city, the few signs of Matoran inhabitation fading away in favor of shoots of green that poked through the crumbling streets and snaked up the buildings.  A bit of twisted satisfaction rose up in her at the sight, and she couldnt resist a jab. For all the pride you top-dwellers have in these buildings of yours, they seem to fall quite easily to a few stray plants.
 
Dont talk to me about plants versus buildings, Onewa muttered.  Ive had enough of that for a lifetime.
 
Perhaps it isnt all bad, she went on.  This city could use a little more life to it, if you Matoran arent going to take care of it.
 
There wasnt anyone left to clean up after the Visorak, he grumbled.  Id say its in perfectly good shape when you consider that.
 
She snorted.  Excuses.  And besides she pointed to a set of tracks in the dust it seems a few of my brothers and sisters got along fine without you.
 
And is that what you want? he replied.  A Metru Nui of Rahi?
 
It seems I just missed it.
 
Perhaps not as much as you believe.  Most of the Rahi left the city with us.
 
She missed a step and pretended she hadnt.  So you rounded them up?
 
Hardly, said Onewa.  They followed us willingly.
 
She could feel one of her hands curling into a fist.  Of course, some of the Rahi had lived alongside the Matoran even in her time (my time?).  They had been pets to the Matoran, or tools, and it had always burned at her pride to see them as such.  Had so many of them really
 
They were happy, Krahka.  Onewas voice was soft.  Most of them lived free, independent of us.  Others the Gukko, the Ussal Crabs were our friends and partners.
 
She growled lightly at that.  First the Matoran let the city crumble, then her fellow Rahi abandoned it an instinctive frustration was eating away at her.  They had all been so quick to let her home fall to ruin.
 
They walked on in silence a while longer.  At the foot of the street was the deserted remains of a chute station; the pipe was long since shattered, a barren bed of an artificial river.  The station itself was cracked and decayed, even the steps leading up to it beginning to crumble with the weight of the years.
 
Tell me, she finally said, where did you all go?
 
Mata Nui.  He looked over to see her furrowing the brow of her mask in confusion and groaned.  Of course.  You dont know Mata Nui, the island.
 
What a she struggled for the word redundant name.
 
He chortled.  It was.  It was the least we could do to keep the Matoran connected to the Great Spirit, I guess.
 
Tell me, then, she said, idly shifting a hand to tentacle and back.  What sort of place was it?
 
He looked up at the empty station.  Where do I begin? It was beautiful.  Im certain it still is now.
 
Where is it?
 
He gestured to the sky.  Above us, if you can believe it.
 
Quite easily.
 
He smiled at that.  It was a place of purity.  When we arrived, there was no sign that Matoran had ever set foot there.  I can still remember the sound of the waves lapping up against that golden shore.
 
I cant, Onewa.  Get to something more solid.
 
His smile grew wider.  Fine.  The island was a mirror of this city, but where there is metal and stone here, there was earth and tree there.  Po-Koro was a desert, but it was never a dead place.  The crags and bluffs were of the cleanest sandstone, and soon the Mahi had taken to roaming the sands as though it were the only home theyd ever known.  He smiled.  I guess we were much the same.
 
That flame of frustration had leapt up inside of her once more, but there was something painful tingeing it now. It sounds peaceful. 
 
It was, in a way.  He sighed.  The Makuta came with us, corrupting all he touched.  For a thousand years we fought off Rahi brought to madness by his poisons, and slept in fear of the shadows.
 
Krahka frowned and kicked away a stone.  Fear of the shadows? You Toa truly did let yourselves go.
 
Onewas mask darkened. I know, he muttered.  Believe me, we werent happy about it.
 
Then why didnt you do something?
 
Easier said than done, he said.  It is one thing to stand against the Makuta when you are the destined Toa.  It is another to take up arms against him when you are a weak little reflection of your past, the ghost of something that was only given power because of his whims.
 
Krahka started at that.  She had forgotten the task Roodaka had had her carry out, the old secrets of the Makuta she had laid bare for them.  Did those tablets words truly weigh so hard on you?
 
No, he said.  Not ultimately.  But we always remembered them, on the darkest nights.  He turned and set off down the street.  Come on.  I havent been down towards the Great Temple since weve returned.  Lets see what a thousand years have done to it.
 
 
 
Ga-Metru was silent at this time of night. Nokamas people were even more reluctant to reclaim the city than Onewas, and it was only the light of an occasional glowstone that guided their path.
 
Its strange, Krahka said.  This must be the longest Ive ever walked these streets without running into some Toa charging off to ruin someones day.
 
You just missed them, Onewa replied.  They left on a quest of their own some weeks ago.
 
And left the city unguarded? She snorted.  The old fire-spitters, Lhikan and Dume what would they say?
 
Dume is still with us.  And he understands their quest is necessary.   
 
 I heard, she said, shifting an arm from Matorans to Turagas and back.  Even with six other Turaga, he cant resist playing the leader.
 
So you were that Gukko.
 
It pays to know where ones enemies are, even if it takes some time to recognize them.
 
Onewa let the barb slide.  Tell me, Krahka what happened to you? How did you survive? Where did you go?
 
She let her arm grow and shift until it was an amalgamation of the Toa Metrus.  You remember this little trick of mine.  I introduced the Zivon to it.
 
And got pulled into another dimension for your troubles, Onewa muttered.  One which that thing was born of.  Youll excuse me for taking it as death.
 
You Toa always did underestimate me.
 
He sighed.  Krahka, the last thing we did together was ride a Tahtorak through the city.  I dont think its possible for me to underestimate you anymore.
 
A shame there isnt one around.  It would have been a better way for us to pick up where we left off.
 
Whatever happened to him, anyway?
 
Ask the southerners.
 
Onewa winced.  I feel sorry for anyone there who doesnt have an answer.
 
 If they arent ready for the occasional titan, they have nobody to blame but themselves.  
 
Rahi wisdom we could all take to heart, he replied.  The south, you say?
 
Something there opened a gate to our prison.  We wasted no time in escaping.
 
And the first thing you did was return here?
 
Is there something the matter with that? she snapped, her arm solidifying back into a Matorans.
 
Not at all.  This place is your home.
 
She gave a small harumph and looked away, and he let the topic drop.
 
For a time they walked on in silence.  Something she had noticed was weighing on her mind, and when she spoke again, she could not hide the curiosity in her voice.  We passed Nokamas home, did we not?
 
We did, he said.  His staff clattered against the cool stone street.
 
You dont intend to tell your brothers Ive returned?
 
So Whenua can try and lock you in the Archives? he replied, the joke stale before it left his mouth.
 
She regarded him in silence, and he sighed.  No.  Not yet.  Maybe not ever, depending on what you want to do.
 
She looked away, and hoped he didnt think she had an answer to that.
 
 
 
The bridge to the Great Temple was still and silent under the light of the stars.  Its great stone gate stood undisturbed, and though it carried the same wear as the rest of the city, the sheer size of it seemed to drown out any challenges to its grandeur.   Past it, she could see scaffoldings lining the walls of the temple itself, the first signs of the Matorans attempts to undo the damage of years past.
 
Why here? Krahka asked.
 
Its like I said.  I havent been here since I was a Hordika.
 
And thats it? she asked.
 
He hesitated.  And Ive come here twice before.  Once as a Matoran, once as a Hordika.  Id like to see how it looks as a Turaga.
 
The two crossed the bridge to its entrance in silence.
 
Save a small, lit candle placed beneath a carving of a Po-Matoran, the temples interior was as desolate as the rest of the city.  Around them, murals and statues proclaimed the citys history and the legends of the Great Spirit.  The stone beneath their feet was lined with crystal, and she could hear the waves of Ga-Metru lapping away beneath the building.
 
Its hardly changed, she murmured.
 
You came here often?
No.  On the days I borrowed a Matorans shape and visited the surface, I had better things to do than see some old drawings.
 
To her surprise, he laughed.  You sound like me back when I was still a Matoran.  Dont think I ever came here until Lhikan summoned us.
 
He always had a flair for the dramatic.
 
You knew him?
 
She shrugged.  He was this citys Toa before you were.  I knew him as much as any other did.
 
But he never confronted you?
 
He stayed out of my way, and I stayed out of his. 
 
The answer seemed to satisfy him, and he said no more.  Blasted Turaga.  If he gives that little knowing silent smile one more time-
 
There, Onewa said, and pointed a finger.  The chamber ahead of them was anchored by a round, squat structure.  In the ceiling above, a panel had fallen loose, and the dim light of the stars gave a pearly glow to the room. 
 
This is where it began, she heard him mutter, as if to himself.  Lhikan had us come here, Toa Stones in hand, and plunge into the world of heroes.
 
Sounds more like he shoved you into the job.
 
I guess he did.  The Turaga hobbled forward into the room, and she followed him at a slight distance.  Something in his stance had changed, and she could smell the anxiety wearing away at him.
 
For a while they stood there in silence.  He was staring intently at the Suva, gripping his staff so hard it had begun to tremble.
 
Well? she asked.
 
Well what?
 
How does it look as a Turaga?
 
He stiffened and looked back over his shoulder to her.  She met his gaze. 
 
He turned back to the Suva.  Wrong, he spat, and threw his staff down.  He took a step towards it, and another, and as he stumbled over a crack in the ground she was there to catch him.
 
I know I shouldnt feel like this, he whispered as they sat themselves on its edge.  But Mata Nui take it all, this isnt
 
Its not how it should be, she finished for him.  Something flittering and hopeful had planted itself in her breast. 
 
No, he said wearily.  No, its not.  On Mata Nui I could survive being a Turaga.  But here? In this city?  He shuddered.  How am I supposed to deal with sitting here, weaker than Ive ever been, in the remains of what used to be my home?
 
Id love to know myself, she said, resting a hand on his shoulder.  She had been right to come to him, after all.
 
This he waved around them, at the crumbling walls of the temple it isnt how it was supposed to be.  When we became Toa, do you know what we wanted? To protect our city.  Simple as that.  Thats all a Toa was meant to do, as far as we cared.
 
Even if that meant crossing me?
 
He gave a short, barking laugh.  Of course.  We thought it was so simple just root out the Morbuzakh, watch out for the occasional Krahka, stomp a few Rahkshi and soon things would be back to normal.
 
But it wasnt that easy, was it?
 
Is anything? He gave a heaving sigh.  You know, until the end until we threw away our Toa powers I thought things could still fix themselves.  I was certain Id walk the streets of Po-Metru as a proud Toa, see the glories my people made for themselves.  I got an island, a thousand years of guard duty, and a half-broken city for my troubles.
 
Maybe they still can, she said.  These new Toa of yours when they return, perhaps they can aid you in rebuilding-
 
She stopped short.  He was chuckling tiredly.  No, Krahka, he finally managed to say.  No, Im afraid it wont be that simple.  Theres too many things in motion, these days.  Toa and Makuta and masks and Great Spirits He let out another sigh.  Ive got no clue how itll all end up.  But I dont think itll be with the lot of us happily going about our days in the city.
 
So what? she snapped at him.  That gnawing fear was back.  Youre just going to sit back and let that happen?
 
He looked down at his hands.  Tell me, Krahka.  Why did you fight with us, that day?
 
Dont dodge the question, Onewa.
 
Im not, he replied.  I just need to hear your answer first.
 
For she hesitated and frowned.  Very cute, Onewa.  For the same reason as you.  To protect this city.
 
Not quite, he said.  We fought for our people, Krahka.  This city is important, true, but they were our duty.
 
Spare me the lectures, she growled back.  Make your point.
 
My point is that even as a bunch of half-mad half-Rahi, even with the city buried under those accursed cocoons, nothing had changed for us, really.  We still had our people to protect.  It didnt matter what shape we came in, or where we fought our duty was the same as ever.
 
So what?
 
So he held out one of his arms.  So look at me now.  I can barely walk some days, much less go Tahtorak-riding.  Its my job to stand around and look wise now, not to be out there fighting.  Thats how Im supposed to protect them.
 
And youre happy with that?
 
Would you be?
 
She remembered how it had felt to walk in the Turagas skin, the sense that she was crumbling away.  She shook her head violently.  Never.
 
The smirk turned bitter.  Well, at least youre honest with yourself.  I can only assume giving up my Toa power seemed tremendously noble to me at the time.
 
Look, Onewa if you hate being a Turaga so much
 
Hate might be too strong-
 
Shut it.  If you hate it so much, then why did you do it?
 
He turned away from her and looked out into the darkness of the temple.  I couldnt say. In that moment, I knew it had to be done.  Thats all.
 
Is that so.  She looked up; above them, the stars were shining bright, even if they had shifted more than they had any right to.  That almost sounds familiar.
 
Out of the corner of her eye, she saw him start.  I told you I fought to protect this city, didnt I? But I didnt think about it.  This place is my home, my territory.  The only one Ive ever known.  Fighting for it is as natural as breathing.  Idly, she picked a pebble from the ground and twirled it through her fingers.  I suppose its the same for you Turaga and your Matoran.
 
And look where thats got the two of us now, he muttered.
 
For a while, they sat there in silence.
 
How do you live with it? she finally asked.
 
He shrugged.  It took a while.  About a thousand years, if were exact.  And I had some help along the way.  Hafus carvings, a star Kolhii run or two by Hewkii, Pohatus feats of wonder
 
You must have had quite the time on this Mata Nui of yours.
 
It was easy to forget there - to tell yourself that you only ever were a Turaga, that there was no city awaiting your return.  He gave a sour smile.  Of course, that only worked on the good days.  On the bad days youd hobble into bed and think about how maybe the Morbuzakh wasnt that awful after all.
 
You know, I never thanked you Toa for cleaning that one up.
 
Youre welcome.
 
I never said I was thanking you.  You get enough praise as is.
 
He flat-out guffawed at that, and she jumped and turned to him, fighting down the reflex to form an extra mouth or two.  Something funny, Turaga?
 
Yes, he said warmly, and turned to face her.  A shock of recognition ran down her back.  The weariness was gone from the Turagas burning orange eyes, and for half an instant some distant voice in her said Toa.  You know, Krahka I missed you.
 
She took a step backwards.  Perhaps the Turaga had gone mad and she simply hadnt noticed?
 
I mean it, he went on.  That what you just said its perfect.  Nobody ever told us we got thanked too much on Mata Nui.  Nobody ever did anything except follow the old legends, pay their dues to the Toa, listen to the Turaga the lines of his mask relaxed in disappointment.  Not even us.
 
Dont fool yourself, Onewa.  If I hadnt had to deal with that Zivon, Id have stayed in Metru Nui, not wasted my time on a bunch of Matoran.
 
But you did deal with that Zivon.  His voice was confident now, so much like the Onewa shed known that it set her on edge.  You saved us.
 
I told you, it was for the city-
 
Oh, forget the city, he shot back.  Whats a city? A whole bunch of roads and buildings we pretend has some special meaning.  I fought for my people, you fought for your Rahi, and that day we each fought for the other.  Am I wrong?
 
You- she took another step away from him.  Enough of your Turaga-tales, Onewa.
 
Krahka.  He reached out a hand.  Am I wrong?
 
Thats-  Words were failing her.  For a second she had the wild urge to shift and take flight, to leave the Turaga alone in this crumbled place.
 
But Krahka did not run.
 
I dont know, she finally said.  In the heat of that battle I cant tell you what I was thinking.  Maybe I didnt want to see you all crushed, or maybe I just didnt like the Zivons face.
 
You just went with what felt right?
 
It got me that far.
 
That it did, he replied, and sat back on the Suva.  He gestured for her to join him, and after a moment, she hesitantly sat herself down at his side. 
 
You know, he said, his tone almost cheery, you were the first person I couldnt save.
 
Since when did I need saving?
 
Never, but spend enough time as a Toa and you start talking that way.  What I mean is, I thought you died for us, because I wasnt quick enough, or strong enough, or well, the point is you died.  Or close enough.  And you took a bit of Metru Nui with you.
 
Do you Turaga ever speak straight?
 
He scrunched up his face for a second.  Well, Ill try.  He looked at her.  The time we fought together was extraordinary, you werent anything like my fellow Toa or the Matoran, for the next thousand years I missed you terribly both as a friend and as a connection to my home, and whenever I found myself powerless as a Turaga I remembered failing you.  Straight enough?
 
She stammered for a moment Karzahni take it, Turaga never could resist packing half a dozen stories into a single sentence Hold on, Toa.  Since when were we friends?
 
I thought wed already established that was around the time we rode a giant lizard through the city together.
 
You have odd taste in friends.
 
You have no idea, the Turaga said with a smile.  She smirked back and wondered why.  Something had snapped the tension between them without her even realizing it.
 
The Turaga continued, But thats not quite what I mean.  I mean I wish you could have come with us to Mata Nui.  It was a long thousand years.  I couldve used someone who didnt take my every word as wisdom.
 
A village of Matoran taking your words as wisdom? Its a miracle the Mahi didnt wind up enslaving you instead.
 
The joke had come without thinking, but the instant it left her mouth a lifetime of instincts roared back to life.  What was she doing, joking with a top-dweller?  He is a Turaga, Krahka.  Rahi are his pets and workers, not his equals.
 
Onewa must have seen her face darken, for his own grew serious.  Krahka I spoke true when I said the Rahi came with us of their own volition.  They roamed free, and those that lived at our side did so willingly.
 
They must have thrown away a hundred thousand years of bad memories very quickly, she muttered.
 
He sighed.  For a while, few would come near us.  The Matoran didnt understand why.  Some thought that was just the natural order of things.
 
Maybe it is.
 
Maybe he hesitated, and when he spoke again his voice was soft.  Maybe it used to be.
 
Her eyes narrowed.  What?
 
Krahka.  He reached out and rested a hand on hers.  She waited for herself to pull away, and didnt.  You asked me how I live as a Turaga.
 
Why do you Turaga never answer my questions in order?
 
Because were too used to using twenty words where one will do- he shook his head.  Krahka, in the course of one evening youve dredged up doubts and resentments my brothers have failed to hear for a thousand years.  Becoming a Turaga wasnt easy for any of us.  The world had changed, and us with it.  But no matter what there was a part of me that wouldnt let go.
 
 Sounds natural enough to me.
 
Maybe it is.  But what I realized is that there are changes that will tear away everything you held onto to live your life.  And when they come, you cant look back too long if you want to survive.
 
Too long? She snorted.  Turaga wisdom has gotten weaker since I left.
 
Krahka.  Please. 
 
An old voice kicked up inside her.  Enough.  No, she cut in.  I whatever it is youre going to say, Onewa, it is for your people and not for me.  I am not a Matoran.  She pulled back, let a Gukkos wings sprout from her back, felt her face harden into the smooth plate of a Rahkshi.  I dont need to hear your ramblings-
 
Dont run away from this, he said, his face showing no response to the form she had taken.
 
She felt herself tensing.  Run away? Who do you think-
 
I know you dont want to let go of the Metru Nui you knew.  I know you want to believe you can go back to the life you had.  His voice grew raw and hurt.  Because every day I walk these streets, I feel the same way.  I would give anything to have the strength to protect my people myself again.  I havent forgotten the past, I swear to you.  It drives me as much as anything else.
 
But I cant let myself be chained to it.  The world is going to keep moving on, with or without me.  We have to survive, Krahka.  We have to change with it, as we did as your Rahi did on Mata Nui.  He reached out a hand once more.  And I wish so badly you had been there to change with us.
 
One of her hands was shaking, jumping from Toas to Vortixxs to Matorans and back again.  Onewa-
 
You shouldnt have to go through this alone.  We survived those first days as Turaga because we had each other.  But you have to make that same leap we did long after everyone else has.  So- he reached his hand out further.
 
For a few moments they stayed like that.  Something deep within her was raging and whirling, howling with the same cries that her caged brothers in the archives once did.  Fool Turaga doesnt know doesnt understand isnt fighting why is he how is he this is wrong wrong wrong-
 
A Krahkas claw shot out and gripped the Turagas hand.  He smiled.
 
 
 
 
They stopped at a small, rusted little hatch in the ground of a Ga-Koro back alley.  Krahka saw him looking up at the sky as she tore its latches from the ground with her bare hands.
 
This is it, then? he asked.
 
She nodded.  The Archives run the length of this city twice over.  Even if this is a dead end, it will be nothing to blast my away back into them.
 
What do you hope to find down there?
 
Anything, she said quietly.  A Nui-Rama hive that survived the years a Rahkshi nest that needs disciplining I need to know whats there and whats not if Im going to survive this city anew.
 
You have us, he responded.  Dont forget that.
 
I know, she muttered, refusing to meet his eyes.  But I survived down there long enough before.  I dont expect Ill be needing any of your help.
 
They both knew that wasnt what he had meant.
 
He sighed.  Be careful, Krahka.  These are dark times.  It may be that not even the Archives are safe anymore.
 
Her eyes narrowed.  Do you realize what you just said?
 
Safe for you.
 
Better.  She looked down into the darkness, and paused.  Tell me.  Is this city in danger?
 
I dont know.  But I would be very surprised if it isnt.
 
Do not expect me to fight for your Matoran if it is.  That is your duty, not mine.
 
I understand.
 
But she looked up at him, and she could see the hope in his eyes.  If you ever need refuge, I have no intention of abandoning this place again.
 
Ill remember that, he said.  Thank you, Krahka.
 
She gave a small snort and turned away to descend into the hatch. 
 
Krahka?
 
No, Onewa.
 
He blinked.  She looked up at him and gave an apologetic smile from behind her mask.  The Toa Metru are gone now.  I have no desire to recreate others glories.
 
He sagged.  I understand.  Forgive a weak old Turaga a moment of nostalgia.
 
She shrugged and turned away; he did the same.  They had said all that needed to be said, which is why she couldnt stop herself from saying, Onewa.
 
He started and looked back to her.  It can get boring down there, once in a while.  So if you ever see a second Vakama wandering around
 
He smirked.  Ill keep quiet if he lets me share his wanderings for an evening, once in a while.
 
After your ramblings tonight, that may be too high a price.  He lifted a brow in skepticism, and her scowl faded away into the smile it had been hiding.   But then again, perhaps not.
 
He smiled back.  Until we meet again.
 
Until then, she said, and hopped down into the hatch without the slightest ceremony.  The tunnel was dark and cold, and without thinking she traded her eyes for a night-crawlers and her body for a sturdy Mahi bulls.
 
As she trundled away down the tunnel, she could hear him breathing just above the surface.
 
Thank you, she thought she heard him say.
 
For a very long moment she thought about replying.  And then she turned back down the tunnel and dove into the darkness of her home.
 

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[Author's note: For the good peoples of Tumblr and also Hahli Husky! Sorry this took so long.
 
Truth is, this was supposed to be done like, months ago, and then Janus came in and pointed out a billion things that needed improvement, so I rewrote it and it is now much better thanks to his help.  I hope you enjoyed this little foray into Rahi/Turaga not-quite-romance as much as I did! Thoughts, comments, criticisms - they're all welcomed.]

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Posted Apr 29 2014 - 12:55 AM

I'm truly at a loss for words. Once again, GSR, you've produced an astounding piece that really drives deep into the hearts of the characters in situations we never saw before. Just, wow.

 

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Posted Apr 29 2014 - 01:13 AM

It is hard to pick words for me, especially since I am not an English speaker originally. And my expectations were... well, I guess I am just not familiar with your other works and reputation as a feels deliverer. Anyway, the pain in Krahka's heart - I almost felt it myself. Onewa's sorrow and helplessness, too.

I personally like to think that on Mata Nui each Turaga had his or her own village to protect. A small settlement. But Metru Nui... Although it's much less in size than Mata Nui island, it's a whole new ground, and to repopulate it is a job hard especially when the Toa aren't here.

 

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Posted Apr 29 2014 - 02:20 AM

LIKE

 

The 16-year-old girl I was when all this Toa Metru stuff was going down is extremely pleased with this. I was always reading between the lines and even bought all the Adventures books just to read them over and over and revel in the glory of Krahka. And also OnewaxKrahka. There was so much there that was never really explored or expanded, and then she was gone and yeah.

I hollered about the fic offsite and I want to plug some of that in here. Also I'm not the best at writing reviews so I hope you get something out of this. I'm not really interested in picking at your grammar or structure, and somebody else will probably come in and do it so eh.

 

 

 

Metru Nui’s prodigal daughter had been away for too long.

Okay so Krahka is just too cool for school. Your narrative totally respects her and just expands upon what we were given in the books.

 

 

 

“-just be more foot-careful, Tamaru.  We still haven’t gotten the tree-gardens growing again yet, and we don’t want to make any more quick-returns than we have to.”

 A+ Tamaru inclusion, she is a star ~

 

 

 

Nuju chirped at her in a passable, if rather foul-mouthed, attempt at Gukko

I laughed and also really love these snippets of classic Bionicle humor that I actually understand and can appreciate.

 

 

 

“Well,” he said, and she could hear his voice trembling, “we were made to be Matoran, not Rahi.”

Real talk, I wrote a couple short stories exploring the emotional turmoil the Toa Metru went through as they were turning into Rahi, and this went right through my proverbial heart. That’s something the Turaga had to of carried with them for the rest of their lives and it’s one of the things that made me so very interested in the Turaga/Toa Metru, way more than the Toa Mata/Nuva. Thank you for capturing this.

 

 

“Long gone.  And Roodaka and Sidorak with them.”

“A pity,” she said.  “I would’ve liked to crush that little neck of hers myself.”

PREACH.

 

 

That gave her pause.  She looked back towards the Turaga.  He was standing now, if leaning on his staff, but the light of his eyes was just a touch sharper, more like the gleam he had carried as a Toa.

 

“And what makes you say that, Turaga?”

“Because this has been your city as long as it has been ours, and because you died saving it.”  He must have caught the annoyance on her face, for he quickly added, “or – almost died.  Or, that is –“ he looked away for a moment, and when he spoke again his voice was pained.  “Well.  To us, you did die.”

THIS PART IS JUST AMAZING.

 

 

 

She regarded him in silence, and he sighed.  “No.  Not yet.  Maybe not ever, depending on – what you want to do.”

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“No,” he said wearily.  “No, it’s not.  On Mata Nui I could survive being a Turaga.  But here? In this city?”  He shuddered.  “How am I supposed to deal with sitting here, weaker than I’ve ever been, in the remains of what used to be my home?”

This is just utterly entirely fantastic and provides a more realistic feel to the whole situation. It was always weird how the Turaga were like OMG LET’S GO HOME YAY FORGET MATA NUI with very little of “Ugh history and all this stuff happened and etc.” It was so much for them to deal with. I don't think a thousand years would have done anything but cause regrets and scars to grow, and eventually become stale.

 

 

 

The weariness was gone from the Turaga’s burning orange eyes, and for half an instant some distant voice in her said Toa.  “You know, Krahka – I missed you.”

♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥

 

(I got serious nerve-tingling chills from that part)

 

Pause here for a very important announcement. The way you write Krahka’s sass and snark is wonderful, especially reflected against Onewa. It’s still sassy banter, but not like the youthful rough banter they shared. They have been through a whole lot and while they can pick up just the same, it’s not like it used to be. The dialogue respects their pasts and their parting, and mixes very smoothly with who they are and have been.

 

 

 

He is a Turaga, Krahka.  Rahi are his pets and workers, not his equals.

:( :( :( :( :( :(

 

 

 

A Krahka’s claw shot out and gripped the Turaga’s hand.  He smiled.

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For a very long moment she thought about replying.  And then she turned back down the tunnel and dove into the darkness of her home.

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"Okay call me???"

 

 

 

Nate I'm exploding right now. This is something I've always wanted. You're awesome.

 

 

EDIT: I forgot to include the part about the theming of this story. Seeing a different approach to what could essentially be a fluffy shipfic adds so much more value to it. Pairing the feelings of regret, loss, and acceptance with aged and resigned fondness and attraction came out so beautifully. When I think about it, my favorite stories and movies have similar themes. So this all hit home.


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Posted Apr 29 2014 - 11:11 AM

 

“I thought we’d already established that was around the time we rode a giant lizard through the city together.”

 

“You have odd taste in friends.”

That's it. That's the whole Bionicle.


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Posted Apr 30 2014 - 03:57 AM

This is brilliant.

 

Just ... Krakha and Onewa were my favourite parts of Adventures. Their banter was just so fun. I cried when I read about Krahka getting sucked into the black hole of doom thing. I celebrated when she came back in Legends. You've made them reunite. It's just beautiful.


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Posted Apr 30 2014 - 06:57 PM

You've done a great job of getting into the characters' heads. Onewa and Krahka always had a nice dynamic, but you've taken a spark of characterization and fanned it into a beautiful bonfire. Congrats for that. Also, great job tying up loose ends (like how the Turaga knew to look for Krahka in Teridax's reign) and depicting a glossed-over part of the story (the return to Metru Nui). :)

 

If I have one problem, it's with the formatting. More frequently than I would have liked, the spacing between two lines cut out, and it caught my ire. I think this was probably due to page breaks, and it's nothing a little pre-post editing couldn't have fixed, so I advise you to do that in the future.

 

Otherwise, fantastic job. Your stories are among the highest-quality BIONICLE fanfiction I've read and do a fantastic job of extracting actual deep, realistic characters from the mere personalities they were in the official canon. More praise is needed, but that's all I've got time for, so... great job, man. Keep it up, I really enjoy reading these. :)


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Posted May 03 2014 - 12:07 PM

I quite like this fic, despite having never read any of the Bionicle novels. I was, however, a pretty big fan of the 2004-5 arc, and I think you gave us a really good depiction of the return to the ruins of Metru Nui.

 

Although I never had read the Adventures books, this fic is making me seriously consider doing so. Great work, Nate.


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Posted May 05 2014 - 10:13 PM

I cried, I laughed, I cried while laughing, I laughed while crying, and oh god the nostalgia feelings. I don't have the words to explain how amazing I find this fic. A+++, would read infinite times over.


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Posted May 07 2014 - 11:06 PM

I love this so much. There aren't enough Krahka-Onewa interactions in the world, and you've captured them perfectly. <3 


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Posted May 09 2014 - 11:07 PM

I hate this story and everything about it.

 

 

 

 

That's a lie you're a beautiful human being and this is a beautiful story, I cannot give a more in depth review than I already have throughout the three drafts that I've read.  This is a good thing yes.


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Posted May 09 2014 - 11:18 PM

I've spoken to several of you one-on-one about this piece, but once again - thank you all so much for the feedback, and I'm glad you enjoyed it!  If we're honest, I was pretty low on Krahka-knowledge going into this thing, so I'm glad to hear I was able to capture her and Onewa well. 

 

I tried writing up a longer piece about writing this thing but it's mostly in shambles in a notepad file now, so until I can de-crapify it, the short version is: Krahka turned out to be a potentially very interesting character who was criminally underused, and I hope I was able to flesh out her motivations, personality, and feelings beyond the very brief portrayal she got.  (If anything, I'm reminded of "An Aftermath", one of my other favorite fics I've written; apparently I've a knack for writing about female characters whose names start with K.)

 

If I have one problem, it's with the formatting. More frequently than I would have liked, the spacing between two lines cut out, and it caught my ire. I think this was probably due to page breaks, and it's nothing a little pre-post editing couldn't have fixed, so I advise you to do that in the future.

 

I'm very late on replying to this, but thank you for pointing it out! I think that was indeed a case of page breaks lining up with line breaks, and so I missed those copying over to BZP.  They should be fixed now!


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Posted May 12 2014 - 06:12 PM

This story is a thing of beauty. It's the kind of introspective, emotional, heartwarming story that I always used to want to write and was never remotely good at writing. Thank you for writing the best BIONICLE story I've read in years!

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Posted May 12 2014 - 11:08 PM

It got kinda boring near the middle and I stopped there...also I don't get KrahkaxOnewa. Though it was pretty well written.

 

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Posted May 13 2014 - 11:35 AM

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Posted May 13 2014 - 05:44 PM

That. Was. Amazing. :shocked:

 

Great job with making the Turaga rather frail and such. I keep forgetting that they're not exactly the Toa they used to be. But yeah... totally amazing. :) I always loved Onewa, :komau: That and I always was intrigued by Krahka... but yeah great job. :D it was a really great read. :popcorn: Enjoyed it a lot!


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Posted May 13 2014 - 09:26 PM

This is good enough to be canon. Very well written, and a great read. Thank you so much for writing this...
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Posted May 16 2014 - 01:37 PM

Haven't read much fan fiction outside of the RPG forum these past 4 years...this was excellent and heartwarming =)


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