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The Biological Chronicle: 2004

2004 Bionicle Flash fiction Krekka Hafu

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#1 Offline TNTOS

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Posted May 27 2014 - 08:44 AM

Welcome to the fourth installment of my new series of Bionicle flash fics, The Biological Chronicle. If you want to read the other stories in this series, you can find links to them in my signature at the end of this post.

If you don't know what it is, allow me to quote from the first fic's introduction:
 

The Biological Chronicle is a series of flash fics written by me. Like my earlier Glatorian Chronicles series of short stories/short epics, each story in The Biological Chronicle is a standalone and can be read in any order you please.

What connects these story is the basic theme. I gave myself the challenge of writing ten flash fics based on the ten years of Bionicle (one for 2001, another for 2002, yet another for 2003, etc.). The result is a mixture of my interpretation of scenes from canon, scenes from canon that were mentioned but never shown, and a few scenes that were never mentioned nor shown but which I nonetheless believe could have/probably did happen at some point in canon. I tried to stick to canon as closely as possible, however, so don't expect to see any new characters or locations or anything like that that weren't in canon.

They are all quite short (the longest is a little over 700 words), but of course that is to be expected from flash fiction. Fair warning: I've had little practice with flash fiction, so if these aren't as good as my usual work, it's because I'm not used to forcing myself to keep the word count under 800 words (although you are of course still free to criticize them however you usually criticize stories).


With that out of the way, please enjoy:
 

2004


When Krekka awoke, his head hurt.

That was surprising. Nidhiki always chided him for having a thick skull. Maybe it wasn't thick enough to protect his head from a fall from that height.

Even worse, Krekka could not remember exactly where he had fallen from. He recalled helping Nidhiki trying to capture three Toa in an airship. After that, his memory got fuzzy, probably the fault of the fall. His skull felt like it had been stampeded by a herd of Kikanalo.

He sat up, putting his hands on his head to try to soothe it, and then realized that he was sitting in the middle of a street in a crater. He looked around and noticed dozens of Matoran nearby staring at him, almost as if they had never seen a Dark Hunter before. One Matoran's mouth hung open, which made him look silly.

Then someone nearby shouted, “Hey, you!”

Puzzled, Krekka turned his massive body and saw a Po-Matoran standing just outside his crater. The Po-Matoran looked angry, his hands planted firmly on his hips, reminding Krekka how Nidhiki had once looked before his transformation into that spider monster thingy.

“Yes?” said Krekka.

The Po-Matoran cowered a little at Krekka's voice, but didn't run away. “You crushed my statues. Which, I will have you know, are Hafu originals. I demand that you pay reparations for destroying my work.”

Krekka looked under his behind. There were crushed bits of stone underneath him, stone that looked awfully common to him. He didn't see what the big deal was.

So he said to the Po-Matoran, “No. I don't pay.”

Now the Po-Matoran looked angry. “If you won't repay me, then I'll call the Vahki on you.”

“Vahki not scary,” said Krekka. “Vahki don't scare me.”

“Oh really?” said the Po-Matoran. “I bet this does, though.”

The Po-Matoran pulled a disk launcher off his back and aimed it at Krekka. The sight of the disk launcher reminded Krekka just how he had ended up in the sky in the first place. He did not intend to go through that again.

He reached over and snatched the disk launcher out of the Po-Matoran's hands. He crushed it beneath his massive fist and then dropped the disk launcher—now little more than a chunk of twisted metal—at the Po-Matoran's feet.

The Po-Matoran took a step back, holding up his hands as if trying to seem less threatening. “You know what? Never mind. I didn't really like those statues anyway. Weren't my best work. I can always make more; make better ones, in fact. Sorry for bothering you.”

Krekka stood up, ready to smash the stupid Po-Matoran, but then a voice from above called, “Krekka! There are you. What are you doing?”

Krekka looked up in time to see Nidhiki, who flew in and landed next to him. Nidhiki's armor was dirty and flattened in several places, like he had been crushed beneath a ton of metal.

“Going to smash Matoran,” said Krekka, pointing at the Po-Matoran, who stood paralyzed with fear.

“No time for that,” said Nidhiki. “The Toa got away and we still have to track them down.”

“But—“

“I said, no time,” Nidhiki snapped. “Now are you coming with me or not?”

Krekka frowned, but nodded and soon was soaring through the sky with Nidhiki. He decided he would smash the Po-Matoran later.

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Comments, criticism, questions, etc. are all welcome :) .

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Edited by TNTOS, Jul 08 2014 - 07:53 AM.

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#2 Offline WhereFMF

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Posted May 28 2014 - 10:33 AM

I think this is the best yet! We didn't get a lot of characterization for Krekka beyond "dumb brute" before he was killed, so it's good to see some here.


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Posted Jul 01 2014 - 05:06 PM

This is definitely a piece of work. :) Krekka is completely in character, and I can imagine that he would do that. 

 

The Po-Matoran cowered a little at Krekka's voice, but didn't run away. “You crushed my statues. Which, I will have you know, are Hafu originals. I demand that you pay reparations for destroying my work.”

Lol. Hafu is just amazing, and he would totally do that, too. :)

 

One problem (if you wanted it to be completely canon): It was implied in the movie that all of the Matoran in that village were sphere'd and in a big pile in the middle of the village. Although I guess Hafu would likely be in and out of that village to show off his magnificent work, wouldn't he? :P


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#4 Offline ALVIS

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Posted Jul 30 2014 - 12:34 PM

@ fishers: I don't think this story takes place in LoMN. The implication is that it takes place in the aftermath of Comic 20, in which Krekka got teleported outside an airship by Vakama (hence why the disk launcher reminded him of his fall). ;)

 

Nice story, anyway, but I think Krekka's grammar is off. In his canon appearances, he's dumb, but he's not that dumb -- he still uses pronouns and definite articles.


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Posted Jul 31 2014 - 04:38 PM

@ fishers: I don't think this story takes place in LoMN. The implication is that it takes place in the aftermath of Comic 20, in which Krekka got teleported outside an airship by Vakama (hence why the disk launcher reminded him of his fall). ;)
 
Nice story, anyway, but I think Krekka's grammar is off. In his canon appearances, he's dumb, but he's not that dumb -- he still uses pronouns and definite articles.


You're correct about this story's placement in the canon timeline. I thought it was pretty clear, but I guess I did pick a rather obscure part of canon to write about.

As for Krekka's grammar: I see what you mean. I definitely exaggerated it a little. Oh well.

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"It is not the critic who counts; not the man who points out how the strong man stumbles, or where the doer of deeds could have done them better. The credit belongs to the man who is actually in the arena, whose face is marred by dust and sweat and blood; who strives valiantly; who errs, who comes short again and again, because there is no effort without error and shortcoming; but who does actually strive to do the deeds; who knows great enthusiasms, the great devotions; who spends himself in a worthy cause; who at the best knows in the end the triumph of high achievement, and who at the worst, if he fails, at least fails while daring greatly, so that his place shall never be with those cold and timid souls who neither know victory nor defeat." - Theodore Roosevelt

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Posted Sep 02 2014 - 09:37 AM

This is hilarious! Thank you for giving me some entertainment this morning.
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