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#1 Offline Shard the Gemknight Toa

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Posted Jun 12 2014 - 11:21 PM

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Co-Authored by my brother, PhoenixFireBlaze

 

Here it is guys. The sequel (somewhat) to Arctic's Comics which takes place a few years after the Finale of Arctic Comics. I've been working on this for a while. I am also going to be using sprited version of Dr. ScorpionX Bioformer MOCs. I have permission to use them, BTW.

 

BE SURE TO READ ARCTIC'S COMICS (Link in my sig) TO UNDERSTAND THE PERSONALITY OF ARCTIC

 

Here is a quick summary if you don't want to read the prequel.

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Below is a short history of that few years.

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The Prologue

 

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Episode 1: Late Introduction

Episode 2: Brief Briefing

Episode 4: Looking Back

Episode 5: Turning Back

Episode 6: Running Back

Episode 7: Getting Back

Episode 8: Smog Fights Back

Episode 9: Be Reborn

Episode 10: Rematch

Episode 11: Fighting Frenzy

 

SPECIAL STUFF (Will be in all comic topics):
 
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Over the Years:
 
 

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People involved in RZMIK

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Dr.ScorpionX for some of his Bioformers (Linked to his Youtube if you want to see the MOCs that may be in the series)


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Posted Jun 13 2014 - 11:33 PM

I'm probably going to try to put up a comic every day. (At least until I finish this chapter.) I have the whole chapter planned ahead already.

Episode 2: Brief Briefing

 

I also got sig pic up!


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Posted Jun 14 2014 - 09:02 PM

Episode 3: Cut and Run

This title works with so many other comics.

 

Introduces Smog, a Bioformer of Dr. ScorpionX.

 

Edit: To those who are reading this. Let be heard that I may plan to revamp and improve Arctic's Comics. If you viewers want so...well...

 

Just let me know what you think.


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Posted Jun 16 2014 - 01:49 PM

Episode 4 is up, which is in need of a better title. If anyone can give a better title, you might earn a PGS position.

 

Episode 4: Looking Back

 

My brother will be making the next few comics unless he just wants to do one. Either way, you'll know his work by his mask in the bottom left-hand corner of the comic.


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Posted Jun 29 2014 - 12:25 PM

Episode 5: Turning Back

Me and my brother finally decided a schedule.

Chapter 1 is approx. 16 comics. So after comic 8, I'll be taking a break and do more BiM, and Phoenix will take over for the rest for the rest of the chapter.


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Posted Jul 11 2014 - 06:12 AM

Hmm. This is a little interesting. The comics seem a little brief and abrupt, though.

 

I did notice that the bad guy transforms into something that very much resembles Soundwave's van mode in WFC and FOC.


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Posted Jul 11 2014 - 02:05 PM

Hmm. This is a little interesting. The comics seem a little brief and abrupt, though.

 

I did notice that the bad guy transforms into something that very much resembles Soundwave's van mode in WFC and FOC.

 

 

Yeah...That's the case for all my comics, but I'm trying to fix that.

 

BTW, the "bad guy," Smog, actually transforms into what I think is an armored police car as it has a lot of influence from Barricade from Bayformers, according to the Doctor. Take a look at this.


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Posted Jul 11 2014 - 10:42 PM

Actually it resembles Soundwave's vehicle mode even more now, LOL. I do see the Barricade influences though. It's just the general shape and the front end that give off the Soundwave look.

 

But that video was amazing, as is the MOC. Very well done.


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Posted Jul 12 2014 - 12:06 AM

So far a pretty cut to the chase story. Not bad for five comics in. I must say, you got yourself some excellent taste for your Bioformers.


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Posted Jul 14 2014 - 12:37 PM

Actually it resembles Soundwave's vehicle mode even more now, LOL. I do see the Barricade influences though. It's just the general shape and the front end that give off the Soundwave look.

 

But that video was amazing, as is the MOC. Very well done.

 

I can see how that resembles Soundwave now... and thanks (if you're referring to how the sprite is almost accurate to the actual thing)!

But, just to make sure we're on the same page. Smog does not belong to me. However, I'm planning to post my own series of Bioformers MOC on the MOC forums, though.

 

...I should also make a character list.

 

So far a pretty cut to the chase story. Not bad for five comics in. I must say, you got yourself some excellent taste for your Bioformers.

 

Yep! And thanks!

 

 

Meanwhile, I've almost finished the next comic, so can expect it to come up this week.


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Posted Jul 17 2014 - 12:08 PM

Episode 6: Running Back

 

Most of these titles will probably have the word "Back".


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Posted Jul 18 2014 - 07:48 AM

And I'm back.

 

Well, there's a little bit of interesting in this one, because that is one strange thing to tell your partner and I want to see what that results in.

 

Though I think I'll also give you a tip, since I used to make comics here.

 

Try adding more character and action. Both. It's still hard to get a sense of the characters right now, and there's been little action. Cool characters, good action, and a solid plot with direction are the keys to a good story.

 

If you can pull that off the comics will be a lot more interesting. Right now you've got an interesting concept, just needs to be executed well.


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Posted Jul 19 2014 - 09:44 AM

And I'm back.

 

Well, there's a little bit of interesting in this one, because that is one strange thing to tell your partner and I want to see what that results in.

 

Though I think I'll also give you a tip, since I used to make comics here.

 

Try adding more character and action. Both. It's still hard to get a sense of the characters right now, and there's been little action. Cool characters, good action, and a solid plot with direction are the keys to a good story.

 

If you can pull that off the comics will be a lot more interesting. Right now you've got an interesting concept, just needs to be executed well.

 

First of all, I'd like to thank you for your insightful input and I respect that, since I have read your comics before finally getting my own comics up here.

But, I had already written out the whole chapter beforehand (and continuing to rewrite as to make it better) and so here are my reactions.

 

Characters: I agree with what you said, but honestly this chapter is to help set up the main plot for the whole series. The chapter will give us a little insight on what Sub-Z and Vena will be like for the whole story.

 

If you're wondering why I didn't mention Slize or Smog. Well...I'll leave that to the comics.

 

Plot: I also agree with that. But since I had already planned the chapter beforehand (along with Chapter 2), the action is coming soon.

 

But thanks again for your input. It will not go unnoticed.


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Posted Jul 27 2014 - 06:46 PM

Episode 7: Getting Back

 
Another ___ Back title to add to Chapter 1.

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Posted Jul 28 2014 - 03:21 AM

Well, you certainly did take my advice. Nice work on the action scene, it was indeed better done. I'm also starting to see that Smog isn't much of a tactician, so I guess that qualifies as character too.

 

Keep it up, this could become something great.


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Posted Aug 17 2014 - 10:15 AM

Episode 8: Smog Fights Back

 

And here's the turning point. Don't worry the series isn't over where it began.


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Posted Aug 18 2014 - 05:37 AM

I can see that Smog won, but...it was hard to tell exactly what was going on.


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Posted Aug 18 2014 - 05:40 PM

I can see that Smog won, but...it was hard to tell exactly what was going on.

 

I guess I can see that...I need to do better on explain something like this next time.

So I'll explain it.

Smog may be incompetent about studying his opponents, but he is very observant during battle.

He sees that Sub-Z returns to help Slize.

Sub-Z believe that Smog and Slize are distracted. So he prepares to shoot Smog.

Smog shoots him first, distracting Slize.

Thus, he can finally kill Slize.

Slize cannot see if he truly had one of the Engines, so he believe that Vena has both.

 

So yeah...sorry.

I already have another comic in the works. I'll be sure to make sure that everything is clear.


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Posted Aug 23 2014 - 06:51 PM

Episode 9: Be Reborn

 

Secret revealed!


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Posted Aug 23 2014 - 07:29 PM

Well, something's going on now.

 

But it probably would have worked better if we found out something about this legendary hero beforehand. That way it seems more important.


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Posted Aug 23 2014 - 08:03 PM

Well, something's going on now.

 

But it probably would have worked better if we found out something about this legendary hero beforehand. That way it seems more important.

 

Well if you've read Arctic's Comics you'd probably know about him. I'll be sure to put that on the main post.

 

He is also mentioned (a lot) in the prologue and backstory.

 

I've also added a mini summary for Arctic's Comics.


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Posted Sep 13 2014 - 06:44 PM

Episode 10: Rematch

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Posted Sep 16 2014 - 01:32 AM

Well, that is a nice jet mode. There was a typo, though. You said "can" instead of "can't".

 

I have noticed a trend of things building up to cliffhangers, which then get underwhelming and excessively brief resolutions, then more buildup for another cliffhanger that gets the same resolution.

 

You need to put huge struggles on an epic scale that last multiple comics to resolve cliffhangers like that, otherwise they just leave the reader feeling deflated and bored.


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Posted Sep 16 2014 - 07:36 PM

Well, that is a nice jet mode. There was a typo, though. You said "can" instead of "can't".

 

I have noticed a trend of things building up to cliffhangers, which then get underwhelming and excessively brief resolutions, then more buildup for another cliffhanger that gets the same resolution.

 

You need to put huge struggles on an epic scale that last multiple comics to resolve cliffhangers like that, otherwise they just leave the reader feeling deflated and bored.

Advice duly noted. Thanks!


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Posted Sep 27 2014 - 07:59 PM

Episode 11: Fighting Frenzy

 

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Posted Sep 29 2014 - 07:35 AM

Ok, I just read that, and I am happy to say that was excellent improvement. Much more dynamic, and things actually did get somewhere. The cliffhanger was well done this time, since it points to the continuation of a larger scene, rather than scene change after scene change.

 

The effects are impressive for a Paint comic too. They show a new degree of effort that the previous comics lacked.


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Posted Sep 29 2014 - 09:25 AM

Ok, I just read that, and I am happy to say that was excellent improvement. Much more dynamic, and things actually did get somewhere. The cliffhanger was well done this time, since it points to the continuation of a larger scene, rather than scene change after scene change.

 

The effects are impressive for a Paint comic too. They show a new degree of effort that the previous comics lacked.

 

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Posted Nov 16 2014 - 08:55 PM

Ok. A little IRL update.

 

So I realized that I kinda started the series a bit prematurely so I have a lot of sprites to make for all the characters of the first season. And with school...I have a lot of things on my hands. I hopefully will be able to get the rest of sprites done by December, or even January the next year.

 

But once I get this specific character done, I could bring the next comic in 2-3 weeks.


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Posted Jan 03 2015 - 12:19 AM

Hey, guys. I just want to share some of my Comic News. This post will also be put on my other comic posts.

 

First regards to the status BF:RS and BiM, my current serieses. Now I know that many people (mostly people like TNG and...that's about all of those that actually view the BioFormer series from time to time) read the 11 comics I have there, but I decided to put it on haitus. It will come back but BiM has the most priority as it's almost done with season 1. When I have the time I will bring BioFormers back but in the Epics section as it's much each to backtrack and explain stuff (in my opinion) through words.

 

So the question is what's my next comic series? Well, I'll tell you this. It's not going to be the things I have shown to you on my birthday, I have something awesome (and it now feels like it after being a part of Corpus Rahkshi) in store.

 

So I ask for this topic to be locked.


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Posted Jan 05 2015 - 06:52 PM

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