Toa Sialo Posted June 21, 2014 Share Posted June 21, 2014 so, this is the review page of my story Makings of a Hero. Feel free to speak your mind. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TERIDAX941 Posted June 21, 2014 Share Posted June 21, 2014 Well I like it. A few things stood out to me, but great job though. Mostly just spelling errors caught my eye, but in your dealings with Takadox, is it really possible to "counter" hypnosis and enter a being's mind that way? Also, I'm guessing you're making your matoran version having a very strong mind, because Takadox has extremely high powers of hypnosis, because the Pit increased what he already had. Just my two cents. Quote Formerly Iron_Man5 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Toa Sialo Posted June 22, 2014 Author Share Posted June 22, 2014 It because his destiny is to save Spherus Magna. The great Being that created him would let him die before then, so he enhanced his abilities. So his mind is normal, but he has defensive upgrades. He looses these when he becomes a toa Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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