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#41 Offline Sir Voltex the Blue

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Posted Jan 12 2012 - 09:04 AM

Meh, you guys are better than the Comedies Critics Club. I'm starting to think I might have to start it back up myself. :PI do appreciate the review, and the insight was very good.-ibrow
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#42 Offline PooZy

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Posted Jan 13 2012 - 10:37 AM

So.. when can I try getting my story reviewed again?
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#43 Offline Yukiko

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Posted Jan 15 2012 - 10:51 PM

Velox just completed the last review, so you should be able to resubmit to start the new list, I believe.
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#44 Offline Velox

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Posted Jan 16 2012 - 12:31 AM

So.. when can I try getting my story reviewed again?

As I said in my post:

I'll also post to let everyone know that we are taking requests again.

Anyway, yes, we are now allowing requests again. We're going back to the assigning reviews to critics. As of right now, we are only letting in five requests at a time. That may change, however, but in the mean time, all reviews will hopefully be done within a week. Again, I thank everyone for your patience. Critics: There were two critics I wasn't able to PM (I left a message on your profile page, Yukiko -- the other hasn't been active), and so if you didn't receive any sort of message from me, please PM (or email me: Toa_Velox@BZPower.com) me ASAP.Posted Image

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#45 Offline Jowm

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Posted Jan 16 2012 - 01:09 AM

Could I please get a review for my story, Scars of War?
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http://www.bzpower.c...?showtopic=5700 - My new epic revealing the life of the interesting character we all wish we could have known better before he left us, Karzahni.

Hey everybody! I'm working on getting a Bionicle podcast set up, it's almost ready to go, and I have one or two regular positions open for anyone with Bionicle knowledge who would like to join! Or if you would perfer not to be a regular, you can guest star as well. We will also be reading and critiquing short stories and possibly epics on the podcast, so if you'd like yours read let me know and I'll look it over and we may review it! For details and any questions you may have, just send me a PM.


To all image makers! I am in need of a logo for a podcast that I am going to get up and running pretty soon, and one of the final things I need is a logo for the podcast! If anyone would be interested in making me a good quality image, just message me, I would greatly appreciate it!

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Posted Jan 16 2012 - 01:45 AM

As stated in the main post, please use the proper request format.Posted Image
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Posted Jan 16 2012 - 03:18 AM

Oh, my apologies. [url=(http://www.bzpower.c...=0)] Scars of War
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http://www.bzpower.c...?showtopic=5700 - My new epic revealing the life of the interesting character we all wish we could have known better before he left us, Karzahni.

Hey everybody! I'm working on getting a Bionicle podcast set up, it's almost ready to go, and I have one or two regular positions open for anyone with Bionicle knowledge who would like to join! Or if you would perfer not to be a regular, you can guest star as well. We will also be reading and critiquing short stories and possibly epics on the podcast, so if you'd like yours read let me know and I'll look it over and we may review it! For details and any questions you may have, just send me a PM.


To all image makers! I am in need of a logo for a podcast that I am going to get up and running pretty soon, and one of the final things I need is a logo for the podcast! If anyone would be interested in making me a good quality image, just message me, I would greatly appreciate it!

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Posted Jan 16 2012 - 02:03 PM

Whenever anyone has time, here's a short story that I would really enjoy having reviewed.http://www.bzpower.c...?showtopic=2773 - Lord Darkon
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Posted Jan 16 2012 - 02:56 PM

Lunchables Comic 1 - Tekulo: Toa of GalesI'd be interested in any crticism for this one, if that's alright. It was a story I experimented with, so feel free to be as critical as you like. ^^
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Posted Jan 16 2012 - 03:33 PM

Story: Gathering dust http://www.bzpower.c...?showtopic=2807 - PooZy
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Posted Jan 16 2012 - 03:53 PM

The Trial and Execution of Makuta Teridax - ibrow-ibrow
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Posted Jan 17 2012 - 01:49 AM

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The Trial and Execution of Makuta Teridax - ibrow - Assigned to Cap'n K (Ultraviolence)

Gathering Dust - PooZy - Assigned to Yukiko

Lunchables Comic 1 - Tekulo: Toa of Gales - Assigned to Jedi Master J.

Into the West - Lord Darkon - Assigned to Velox

Scars of War - Jowm - Assigned to Tolkien

Assignments as listed. Please let me know if you are unable to fulfill your reviews. And as that is 5, no more requests at this time. Critics should finish their reviews in a week, but I'll post saying when we will be accepting new requests.Posted Image

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Posted Jan 23 2012 - 12:53 AM

As requested, Lunchables Comic 1 has been reviewed. Posted Image
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Posted Jan 23 2012 - 01:11 AM

Reviewed Jowm's "Scars of War."JRRT
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Posted Jan 24 2012 - 02:49 AM

And Into the West has been reviewed. Thanks to those who reviewed theirs already, and for those that haven't: Remember you have until tomorrow to complete your review or you will receive a strike.Posted Image
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#56 Offline Yukiko

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Posted Jan 25 2012 - 12:15 AM

My review for Gathering Dust is up. Sorry, I have no such excuse for my lateness, as we have WiFi and ethernet everywhere here. The beginning semester homework hit me quite hard, but I shall adjust in the next few weeks and my review shall turn up in a more timely fashion.
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Posted Jan 31 2012 - 06:31 PM

While this is waiting for recovery, PM me and I'll give you a review.Albeit, it won't be an official SSCC review, but I'll write with the same caliber I normally would for a review.-Teezy
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Posted Jan 31 2012 - 07:32 PM

Eh, I'll just say we'll allow more reviews now. 5 more until we stop accepting again.Posted Image
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Posted Feb 01 2012 - 08:58 PM

You guys gave me a epic review, so here's another short story for ya'.http://www.bzpower.c...?showtopic=3110 (Defiance) - Lord Darkon

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Posted Feb 01 2012 - 09:13 PM

Ignition by Legolover-361.Thank you in advance! ^_^
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Posted Feb 01 2012 - 09:38 PM

Alright! Glad I'm not too late to submit a story. Divided We Fall by Grant-SudI like what I've written, but to be honest I feel like it gets repetitive. :P If I can get another opinion on that, that'd be great. Please and thank you! ^_^
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Posted Feb 04 2012 - 08:34 PM

And two more until we close the requests gates again.Posted Image
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Posted Feb 04 2012 - 11:48 PM

I suppose I'll take the opportunity here:Remember, by Tolkien.JRRT
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Posted Feb 05 2012 - 06:24 PM

Just wondering where my review might be, since it looks like all of the other stories that needed to be reviewed were reviewed.-ibrow
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Posted Feb 05 2012 - 11:03 PM

Just wondering where my review might be, since it looks like all of the other stories that needed to be reviewed were reviewed.-ibrow

Well, I don't know where Cap'n K is/if he's got a review that simply hasn't been posted, but I went ahead and filled in for him. Here you go.

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Posted Feb 06 2012 - 08:53 PM

Thanks! -ibrow
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Posted Feb 06 2012 - 08:58 PM

Good news; I might be able to rejoin as a critic fairly soon.In the meantime:All Our Sins Remembered, The Quiet Light.
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Posted Feb 08 2012 - 12:31 AM

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Defiance - Lord Darkon -- Assigned to Zaxvo

Ignition - legolover-361 -- Assigned to Tyler Durden

Divided We Fall - Grant-Sud -- Assigned to Tyler Durden

Remember - Tolkien -- Assigned to Velox

All Our Sins Remembered - The Quiet Light -- Assigned to Velox

If anyone wants to take some of the ones assigned to me, please PM me -- three critics haven't replied to my PM yet (or been online), and I didn't want to mess up the cycle, but if anyone wants to do a review every cycle (or two some cycles) instead of every other cycle please let me know. Anyway, reviews are due by next Wednesday (Feb 15).Posted Image

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Posted Feb 08 2012 - 07:37 PM

And I've reviewed Defiance. Feel free to toss any of those extra stories over to me Velox.
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Posted Feb 10 2012 - 05:11 PM

Ignition reviewed..Now reviewing Divided We Fall by Grant-Sud.-Teezy

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Posted Feb 13 2012 - 10:44 PM

Undying Love - Kal Grochi

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Posted Feb 16 2012 - 01:55 AM

@ Kal Grochi ~ Sorry, we are not currently accepting requests. Check back in a couple days. =]Anyway, I have reviewed All Our Sins Remembered; I'm giving Tyler Durden and myself a two day extension (Friday) on the last two stories (as we both were reviewing more than one). Reviews will be up as soon as possible, and then we will accept 5 more requests.Posted Image
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Posted Feb 16 2012 - 02:07 AM

Aggh, just barely off time. Ah, well. I'll wait until next cycle I guess.
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Posted Feb 16 2012 - 03:11 PM

Question. Would you guys review Short Story Contest entries?

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Posted Feb 16 2012 - 07:41 PM

Yes, but you cannot use the advice we give until after the contest is over -- once posting your entry you cannot edit it. Otherwise it would be unfair, as it'd be impossible for us to review every entry.Posted Image
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Posted Feb 17 2012 - 12:48 PM

That's a good rule.Next cycle, then.
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Posted Feb 17 2012 - 05:08 PM

And...Divided We Fall is reviewed.-Teezy
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Posted Feb 18 2012 - 05:53 AM

Aaand last-minute family trip=driving all day straight from school=no time to review...I'll try to get your review done tomorrow, Tolkien, though that depends on what I do with family tomorrow. Anyway, we'll allow 5 more requests, now.Posted Image
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Posted Feb 18 2012 - 08:19 AM

http://www.bzpower.c...p?showtopic=396 Moment of Fragile Courage - by Grant SudWarning for reviewer, story is cheesy and I have no idea why I wrote it. :B
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Posted Feb 18 2012 - 06:16 PM

http://www.bzpower.c...?showtopic=3427 (Just Another Path) - Lord Darkon
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