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#81 Offline Velox

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Posted Feb 20 2012 - 03:09 AM

Aand Remember has been reviewed.We're still allowing three more requests for this cycle, remember!Posted Image
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#82 Offline Taipu1

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Posted Feb 21 2012 - 10:59 AM

High-Fly MatoranHopefully one of my better works, I'd quite like to get a lot of views, a critic club review is always good for fixing it up to perfection.
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#83 Offline Nuile the Paracosmic Tulpa

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Posted Feb 21 2012 - 04:20 PM

A review for Stellar Quest: The Black Gate Opens, by Nuile: Lunatic Wordsmith, please. :) Thank you in advance.

Sincerely, Nuile: Lunatic Wordsmith :smilemirunu:


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#84 Offline Aderia

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Posted Feb 21 2012 - 11:09 PM

Perfectionist by Aderia: Toa of Ducklings, s'il vous plait. i think this is my first time using the SSCC, i'm excited :)
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#85 Offline Parks and Rekt

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Posted Feb 22 2012 - 04:22 PM

Unless my kindergarten level math skills are failing me, I believe that's five requests.-Teezy
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#86 Offline Velox

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Posted Feb 22 2012 - 09:28 PM

Unless my kindergarten level math skills are failing me, I believe that's five requests.-Teezy

Yep; I was just busy yesterday so I didn't assign critics yet.

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Moment of Fragile Courage - by Grant Sud - Assigned to Velox

Just Another Path - by Lord Darkon - Assigned to Tyler DurdenHigh-Fly Matoran - by Taipu1 - Assigned to Yukiko

Stellar Quest: The Black Gate Opens - by Nuile: Lunatic Wordsmith - Assigned to Jedi Master J.

Perfectionist - by Aderia: Toa of Ducklings - Assigned to Tolkien

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#87 Offline ~Mat~

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Posted Feb 24 2012 - 02:08 AM

Abyss by MatoroIgnika, whenever a spot opens up. :3Thanks ahead of time.EDIT: Sorry if this request is invalid or what have you, I didn't even think when I posted this. I've had too long of a day. :/

Edited by ~MatoroIgnika~, Feb 24 2012 - 02:15 AM.

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#88 Offline Parks and Rekt

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Posted Feb 24 2012 - 05:14 PM

Reviewed Just Another Path.-Teezy
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#89 Offline Velox

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Posted Feb 24 2012 - 10:04 PM

Abyss by MatoroIgnika, whenever a spot opens up. :3Thanks ahead of time.EDIT: Sorry if this request is invalid or what have you, I didn't even think when I posted this. I've had too long of a day. :/

Yeah, unfortunately you'll have to re-request your story for review the next time we are allowing requests (should be around Thursday or Friday of next week).Posted Image

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#90 Offline Jedi Master J.

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Posted Mar 02 2012 - 12:18 AM

As requested, I have reviewed Stellar Quest: The Black Gate Opens.Posted Image
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Posted Mar 02 2012 - 12:22 AM

Perfectionist, by Aderia: Toa of Ducklings, reviewed.JRRT
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#92 Offline Velox

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Posted Mar 02 2012 - 03:23 AM

And I have reviewed Moment of Fragile Courage, by Grant Sud.I know we're still waiting on one review, but I will now accept more review requests. Five more until we close the gates again.Posted Image
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Posted Mar 02 2012 - 11:20 AM

The Outlaws and the Dream by Cederak.I've never used the SSCC before (mostly because it didn't exist when my SS writing days were more active), but better late than never. Thanks.-Ced
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Posted Mar 02 2012 - 11:30 AM

The Wraith by Kal GrochiLet's hope I make it in on time this time. :P

Edited by Kal Grochi, Mar 02 2012 - 11:30 AM.

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Posted Mar 02 2012 - 02:03 PM

Abyss by ~MatoroIgnika~.=3
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Posted Mar 05 2012 - 05:13 PM

Sorry to see you go, Cap'n. :cAlso, didn't want to have to do this, but...The Royal We by Tyler Durden.-Teezy
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Posted Mar 07 2012 - 11:01 AM

http://www.bzpower.c...?showtopic=3806Target: The War-Monger - By TahooReview please? Thank you.(sorry for defying post format, I couldn't get the link thing to work...)
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Posted Mar 07 2012 - 05:01 PM

What you want is this.Target: The War-Monger By Tahoo.
[url="http://www.bzpower.com/board/index.php?showtopic=3806"]Target: The War-Monger[/url] By Tahoo.

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#99 Offline Parks and Rekt

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Posted Mar 07 2012 - 05:09 PM

What I always do is add my story title to the end of the URL with a space between the two when I'm adding the link, then I just backspace out the URL and leave the link.But eh, to each his own.Anyway, that's five.-Teezy
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Posted Mar 08 2012 - 11:39 PM

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The Outlaws and the Dream by Cederak -- Assigned to VeloxThe Wraith by Kal Grochi -- Assigned to Velox Yukiko

Abyss by ~MatoroIgnika~ -- Assigned to Tyler Durden

The Royal We by Tyler Durden -- Assigned to Velox ZaraynaTarget: The War-Monger By Tahoo -- Assigned to Zarayna

Once again, if anyone wants to take any of the extra ones I've assigned to myself, just let me know before you do. And reviews are due by Friday, March 16th. Also, an easy way to create a URL: Simply copy the URL, type what you want the link to say (i.e. "Target: The War-Monger"), highlight what you typed, then click the link button, paste the URL into the box that comes up, click "ok" and it should be good. If that doesn't make sense I can explain it better.Posted Image

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Posted Mar 10 2012 - 09:39 AM

^Velox, since couldn't manage that review last week I'll gladly take on some of yours. I have spring break now. So everything's good. :)
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Posted Mar 10 2012 - 01:23 PM

I'll take The Royal We, in the case, as well as my own.
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Posted Mar 10 2012 - 06:26 PM

I'll take the Wraith then. :)
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Posted Mar 10 2012 - 07:59 PM

Reviewed:Target: The War-Monger

By Tahoo -- Assigned to Zarayna


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Posted Mar 11 2012 - 12:25 PM

Thanks, guys. @ Yukiko ~ Were you also going to do the review for High-Fly Matoran, or did you want me to? Posted Image
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Posted Mar 11 2012 - 02:17 PM

^I can take both ^^EDIT: And High Fly Matoran is reviewed!

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Posted Mar 16 2012 - 10:29 AM

Glatorian Chronicles #11: Obsidian Among the Frost by TNTOSWould appreciate a review.-TNTOS-
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Posted Mar 16 2012 - 01:40 PM

Oasis by PooZyA review would keep me entertained :3 Thanks for reading.
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Posted Mar 16 2012 - 10:00 PM

I should have my review up by sometime tomorrow morning, Velox: Internet problems are preventing me from doing a lot of good with a proper review. Sorry for the inconvenience.-Teezy
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Posted Mar 17 2012 - 01:48 AM

And I have reviewed The Outlaws and the Dream. Also @ TNTOS and PooZy, while we weren't technically accepting requests when you posted, we are accepting requests now, and since it's only been a few hours, you don't have to re-request your stories.So! Three more stories until we stop accepting requests again.@ Zarayna and Yukiko ~ you won't be striked right now since you both took on more than one review, but please complete them ASAP. And, Tyler, that's fine. Thanks for letting me know.Posted Image
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Posted Mar 17 2012 - 10:05 AM

Reviewed Abyss. Highly recommended debut Short Story from a great writer. Look forward to reading more from him.Thanks to Velox for the twelve-hour reprieve, and I look forward to my next review.-Teezy
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Posted Mar 17 2012 - 11:25 AM

Corrupt Destiny: Vakama by Toa Vahi: toa of time(Note: the style is a bit odd.) Thanks in advance.
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Posted Mar 17 2012 - 12:02 PM

Sorry, Velox. A curse upon my absentmindedness: I completed my second review in time, but forgot to say so here. :/BTW, requesting review for:The Land of Forgetfulness, by Zarayna: The Quiet Light.

Edited by Zarayna: The Quiet Light, Mar 17 2012 - 12:07 PM.

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Posted Mar 18 2012 - 02:46 PM

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Posted Mar 18 2012 - 02:48 PM

War for BZPower by JinklemeisterEdit: Thanks Kal, sorry about that. I'm still figuring out the new BB Codes.

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Posted Mar 18 2012 - 09:14 PM

War for Bzpower by Jinklemeister

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Posted Mar 19 2012 - 01:44 AM

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Glatorian Chronicles #11: Obsidian Among the Frost by TNTOS -- Assigned to Jedi Master J.Oasis by PooZy -- Assigned to VeloxCorrupt Destiny: Vakama by Toa Vahi: toa of time -- Assigned to TolkienThe Land of Forgetfulness by Zarayna: The Quiet Light -- Assigned to CederakWar for BZPower by Jinklemeister -- Assigned to Zarayna

And there we go. With that I'd also like to announce the latest critic: Cederak. ECC Curator and a great critic, he's definitely very welcome here.Posted Image

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Posted Mar 19 2012 - 06:20 AM

YEAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAH.WEEK OFF.-Teezy
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Posted Mar 19 2012 - 03:00 PM

The Land of Forgetfulness, by Zarayna: The Quiet Light has been reviewed.-Ced
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Posted Mar 21 2012 - 08:04 AM

I am glad to welcome Cederak, and I greatly approve his honest reviewing technique. :)Spawn: We should force you to join me in one review a week. :fear:EDIT:War for BZPower

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REVIEWED

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Edited by Zarayna: The Quiet Light, Mar 21 2012 - 06:31 PM.

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