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REVIEW TOPIC - Chronicles of the Cold Hearted

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#1 Online Roman Torchwick

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Posted Jul 28 2014 - 12:12 AM

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The review topic for my Bionicle Epic "Chronicles of the Cold Hearted". 

 

Feedback/criticism/suggestions/ideas are all welcome. 


Edited by NatoGreavesy, Jul 28 2014 - 12:13 AM.

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Fang's a moralist. He disagreed with the goals of the assignment, and because I chose to follow Tridax's orders he thinks, like you yourself said, that Phogen and I are "evil". He sees the world in black and white, good and evil. People who think like that can't be reasoned with. It's a type of madness all of its own." - Exxan.
 
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Posted Aug 18 2014 - 02:54 PM

I've been enjoying it so far.

By chapter 7, I can't express how relieving it is for a friend to finally show up. Although, that simply makes me wonder about the future... Such high hopes can be crushed so effectively. :P

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Posted Aug 20 2014 - 07:41 PM

This is probably a bad time to admit that i'm just making it up as I go along, and writing depending on whatever mood I happen to be in. I'm taking whatever opportunities to write that pop up between university assignments and stuff, so I don't have a lot of time on my hands to really plan more than a chapter or two ahead. 


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Fang's a moralist. He disagreed with the goals of the assignment, and because I chose to follow Tridax's orders he thinks, like you yourself said, that Phogen and I are "evil". He sees the world in black and white, good and evil. People who think like that can't be reasoned with. It's a type of madness all of its own." - Exxan.
 
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Posted Sep 03 2014 - 02:55 AM

Hey, just wanted to say I'm really enjoying the start of your story.  Setting it just as the GSRs started nuking each other with planets was an interesting choice, and although I've only read the first chapter so far I look forward to getting caught up.  Keep up the writing!

 

Also, welcome to the BZPRPG.  I saw you'd joined and seem to be getting interaction from the infamous Grokk, so you're in good hands there. :)


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Posted Sep 03 2014 - 10:37 AM

Right, I've mentioned this in my last two story posts, but I'll repeat it here. 

 

Chapter 12 may be my last post for a while. I'm going to be out of the country and heading over to Italy for a month to do all sorts of touristy things, like sightseeing, eating Italian food, and possibly getting killed by a big angry volcano that's way overdue for an eruption (fingers crossed that the last on doesn't happen). Bottom line is that my family has set a very busy schedule for our little holiday, so the chances of me having time and/or internet available to write and post new chapters is uncertain. If I do wind up with some time off, I'll try to write some more chapters, but if not, I'll be back in a month. Hopefully my readers can survive that long on the cliffhanger I left at the end of 12 (I'm sorry, I couldn't resist the temptation to let Maliss perform an Iron Nova Blast). 

 

I hope everyone's been enjoying the story so far, and I assure you that it's far from over yet (mostly because I haven't decided what's going to happen next, but maybe a month overseas will give me some ideas?). Thanks again for sticking with me this far. I hope you've enjoyed reading Icthilos' story as much as I've enjoyed writing it. 

 

Cheers, Greavesy. 


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Fang's a moralist. He disagreed with the goals of the assignment, and because I chose to follow Tridax's orders he thinks, like you yourself said, that Phogen and I are "evil". He sees the world in black and white, good and evil. People who think like that can't be reasoned with. It's a type of madness all of its own." - Exxan.
 
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Posted Sep 20 2014 - 09:09 AM

UPDATE: Season 2 - "Code of the Cold Hearted", has just begun. Stay tuned for more chapters if and when I think of what the heck I should write, and can be bothered actually writing them. 


Edited by NatoGreavesy, Sep 20 2014 - 09:10 AM.

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Fang's a moralist. He disagreed with the goals of the assignment, and because I chose to follow Tridax's orders he thinks, like you yourself said, that Phogen and I are "evil". He sees the world in black and white, good and evil. People who think like that can't be reasoned with. It's a type of madness all of its own." - Exxan.
 
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Posted Oct 12 2014 - 03:30 PM

This is one of the best stories I ever read. And I read a LOT of books. Sorry if my post is a bit short. I feel like summarizing how i feel these days.


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Posted Oct 13 2014 - 12:48 AM

Thanks :)

 

Now, it has come to my attention that the font I've been using, which looks decently sized in Microsoft Word, is coming up huge when I paste my chapters onto BZP, so I'm going to go through and fix that on all of my old posts, and all future ones as well. 


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Fang's a moralist. He disagreed with the goals of the assignment, and because I chose to follow Tridax's orders he thinks, like you yourself said, that Phogen and I are "evil". He sees the world in black and white, good and evil. People who think like that can't be reasoned with. It's a type of madness all of its own." - Exxan.
 
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