Dual Posted August 10, 2014 Share Posted August 10, 2014 Please tell me if I'm doing something wrong as far as formatting, etc. as I literally just joined and am still learning. This is the review topic for my story, A New Horizon. I feel intimidated, to be honest, as the other stories here are quite amazing. Anyway, all criticism is appreciated! Quote "Sometimes a hero has to do something else besides beat the villains and come home covered in glory. Sometimes, he has to make a sacrifice so that a lot of people, people he's never met before and who don't know his name, can live." -Hahli Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Gifthammer Posted August 11, 2014 Share Posted August 11, 2014 Not bad, and don't worry. While there are the learned and expert writers such as Bonesiii, you're not the only novice around here. The only formatting thing that bugged me was the dialog. I would suggest spacing out each response with its own line to make it a little bit more clear who's saying what. I like so far though. Quote Every hero is born from his enemy; every leader, his followers; and every father, his children. Metru Nui: the Fall My 3D printing designs on Thingiverse Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dual Posted August 11, 2014 Author Share Posted August 11, 2014 Oh, duh, my bad, I forgot to space it all out, sorry. Anyway, I fixed it now, and thank you for the feedback! Quote "Sometimes a hero has to do something else besides beat the villains and come home covered in glory. Sometimes, he has to make a sacrifice so that a lot of people, people he's never met before and who don't know his name, can live." -Hahli Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dual Posted August 11, 2014 Author Share Posted August 11, 2014 (edited) Am I allowed to double post for chapter updates? If so, chapter one is up. I had it all done, but then something happened and it was all deleted, so I had to do it again, and rewriting chapters is not what I would consider to be enjoyable, so sorry that it's short and kinda rushed. Basically, I'm building up the setting and stuff right now. It'll pick up soon, I promise. Edited August 11, 2014 by Dual Quote "Sometimes a hero has to do something else besides beat the villains and come home covered in glory. Sometimes, he has to make a sacrifice so that a lot of people, people he's never met before and who don't know his name, can live." -Hahli Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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