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A Grim Development

Hero Factory Zombie apocolypse Mild Horror

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#1 Offline Rahkshi Lalonde

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Posted Sep 05 2014 - 03:31 AM

well, this is a project i'v had in the pipes (the pipes in my brain) for a while now, and hey, it's about time it showed some fruit!

it's worth mentioning (to me at least) that this was going to be written, and in the Epics forum. but, as you can see in my Art Topic, that has clearly changed.

 

another note: this'll get kinda dark, but I'm trying my darndest to keep it within BZP appropriate levels of dark (nothing worse than slight oozing blood-analogue from the mechzombies is all.) and, though i'm quite capable of drawing someone getting disemboweled in full view, (no i won't link that!) i like my proto where it is, thank you.

 

^haha, look at the rambling, this is a comic topic! where's the comic?

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Nita "Nitro"

 

The Comic:

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Chapter one

An initiation worth writing home about.

 

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#2 Offline Vox

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Posted Sep 05 2014 - 11:54 AM

Despite having no clue as to the plot, or anything, just those first three pages weave a story of their own. Looking forward to more.


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Posted Sep 06 2014 - 12:09 AM

I actually really like this already, especially considering that it's one of the only comics here with a darker, more serious tone. (And I just have a soft spot for hand-drawn comics.)

 

I'm looking forward to watching this Grim tale unfold.


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#4 Offline Rahkshi Lalonde

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Posted Sep 06 2014 - 02:17 AM

wow, a decent reception already, and i haven't even gotten to plot stuff yet!

 

also, page 4 is up. not as happy with this one. i think it's the fact i couldn't get that swing blur to look right.


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#5 Offline Chro

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Posted Sep 07 2014 - 07:03 AM

Looks okay to me.


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My experience with graffiti was critical to my success in creating an army of murderous seagulls.

 

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#6 Offline Mr Goober

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Posted Sep 10 2014 - 01:14 PM

I think your strongest point, as far as composition, is your color. I love dreary colors like the ones you've successfully used.

 

I'm super interested to see how you develop this. :)


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#7 Offline Pohatu: Uniter of Stone

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Posted Sep 12 2014 - 06:30 AM

More please! I haven't seen a hand drawn comic like this in a while!


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#8 Offline Rahkshi Lalonde

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Posted Sep 19 2014 - 03:51 PM

well, took me long enough.

 

Pages 5 and 6 are up!

 

(also, i misspelled "apocalypse" in the tags, oopsie.)


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#9 Offline Pohatu: Uniter of Stone

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Posted Sep 19 2014 - 04:01 PM

It looks like you were saying Balk and Kraw in the fifth comic. Was that meant as a Mixels reference?


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Posted Sep 19 2014 - 06:18 PM

I would hope that you don't get discouraged, but I can't tell what that monster is. 

 

Do you think you could explain what exactly it's supposed to be?


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#11 Offline Rahkshi Lalonde

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Posted Sep 19 2014 - 06:52 PM

I would hope that you don't get discouraged, but I can't tell what that monster is. 

 

Do you think you could explain what exactly it's supposed to be?

 

Luckily, we have our good in-universe friend Miranda "Meltdown" to handle this sort of question!
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The "Brutes" are a collection of seemingly related metallic titans. and they also seem to be the cause of the downfall the previous occupants of this city faced. they share physiological traits with one another, such as all having the same glowing red fluid and crystals all over their inner mass.

Most Brutes bear simple steel claws or blades, but some higher tiers seem to carry highly unnatural blasters or projectile weapons, leading me to believe they are at least partially artificial. Possibly even fully artificial, as some sort of army! though, that does make the level of decay they sport a rather odd thing...

 

As far as we can tell, their goal is to wipe out everyone who remains in the city, though that's only a guess based on what we've seen. I've made it my goal to study them to their fullest, find out what makes their crystalline hearts tick...

Miranda Meltdown.


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#12 Offline Mr Goober

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Posted Sep 19 2014 - 07:05 PM

 

I would hope that you don't get discouraged, but I can't tell what that monster is. 

 

Do you think you could explain what exactly it's supposed to be?

 

Luckily, we have our good in-universe friend Miranda "Meltdown" to handle this sort of question!
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The "Brutes" are a collection of seemingly related metallic titans. and they also seem to be the cause of the downfall the previous occupants of this city faced. they share physiological traits with one another, such as all having the same glowing red fluid and crystals all over their inner mass.

Most Brutes bear simple steel claws or blades, but some higher tiers seem to carry highly unnatural blasters or projectile weapons, leading me to believe they are at least partially artificial. Possibly even fully artificial, as some sort of army! though, that does make the level of decay they sport a rather odd thing...

 

As far as we can tell, their goal is to wipe out everyone who remains in the city, though that's only a guess based on what we've seen. I've made it my goal to study them to their fullest, find out what makes their crystalline hearts tick...

Miranda Meltdown.

 

 

Oh oh! I get it now. I had forgotten that you had written this already. 

 

That's super fascinating! Do you have like this entire story planned out?


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#13 Offline Rahkshi Lalonde

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Posted Sep 23 2014 - 08:28 PM

Today we learn that Brutes can't stand on pegleg.

 

 

That's super fascinating! Do you have like this entire story planned out?

 

Well, i have enough of it that i could give *major spoilers* if i wanted to. :v


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Posted Sep 24 2014 - 12:00 AM

Today we learn that Brutes can't stand on pegleg.

 

 

That's super fascinating! Do you have like this entire story planned out?

 

Well, i have enough of it that i could give *major spoilers* if i wanted to. :v

 

Dang, now you've got me hooked. HAHA, you wouldn't say you've got this story written as far as LEGO did when they started Bionicle. :P

 

I'm thoroughly hooked now. :guilty:


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Posted Sep 24 2014 - 05:51 AM

they share physiological traits with one another, such as all having the same glowing red fluid and crystals all over their inner mass.

inb4corruptedquaza spoipers

 

It looks like you were saying Balk and Kraw in the fifth comic. Was that meant as a Mixels reference?

I'd say that's probably just coincidentally Mixelesque sound effects.


Edited by Chro, Sep 24 2014 - 05:51 AM.

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My experience with graffiti was critical to my success in creating an army of murderous seagulls.

 

feelin crabby?


#16 Offline Rahkshi Lalonde

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Posted Oct 21 2014 - 03:47 PM

it's been, what? a month?

oops.

Page eight!

(is this too messy? if it's too messy i can edit that out. :i)

 

page nine is, like, 20% done too, so idk, expect it but don't i guess? :u


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Posted Oct 22 2014 - 08:07 AM

I've been wondering: which Hero Factory character is the brute in the current story based on?


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Posted Oct 22 2014 - 09:11 AM

I've been wondering: which Hero Factory character is the brute in the current story based on?

 

Brute McBadguy the third.

 

(its a nobody, only introduced to die off seven pages in. technically the story hasn't even started yet. :u)


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#19 Offline Aerixx

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Posted Nov 10 2014 - 08:50 AM

Awesome-cool. I'll be following!


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Posted Dec 02 2014 - 05:23 PM

Soo the next one should come around this month.
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#21 Offline Rahkshi Lalonde

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Posted Dec 12 2014 - 03:47 PM

Page Nine!

 

the text miiight come across as forced? sorry.

 

it is the first page to have conversational text, so future pages will sort themselves a bit better. :0

 

(also these pages shouldn't be coming so sloooowly. i'll pick up the pace, i swear!)


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Posted Dec 12 2014 - 05:02 PM

I don't know about you, But I think that "Currently nameless character" Should watch out for that bird.


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Posted Feb 20 2015 - 11:10 AM

sorry for all the delays (aaaaaaaall of them)

 

figured i should throw you guys a bone here,

 

Page 10

 

still working on technical difficulties, page 11 whenever.


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Posted Apr 28 2015 - 12:35 AM

Page Eleven! (sorta)

 

eh, another new page coming soonish, but man, look at this plot twist here!


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Posted Apr 28 2015 - 12:42 AM

Whee fun happies

 

 

Your art skill increased by 9000 :P


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#26 Offline Rahkshi Lalonde

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Posted May 29 2015 - 04:39 AM

okay, almost time for regular content to return, almost, just gotta familiarize myself with the style, setting, and Nita again, oops.

 

in the meantime, part 12(?) of whatever is going on, and,

 

a Nita Profile (Minor spoilers? [minor spoilers you all saw coming anyway?])


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Posted May 29 2015 - 11:15 AM

I love filler, that's why I watch Naruto. :P

 

Anyway, I'll just sit and twiddle my thumbs until the next comic comes out. *Goes insane from boredom*  :headbonk: 

 

Seriously, though, I liked reading the first 9 pages, the art style is great and it's darker tone helps the comic stand out. 


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Posted May 29 2015 - 12:58 PM

I'm not always a fan of your cartoony art style, but you've made a really good comic here. It's actually hand-drawn, and you're able to evoke a good sense of atmosphere with the dark color palette.

 

I'm actually intrigued by the characters and story. Is this a backstory for the Ordeal of Fire villains?

 

So all in all, good job. One of the best comics currently up here.


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