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Legends of Majna


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You've head legends, of great and mighty things, hear now the legend of Majna, that great galaxy of wonder:

Chapter 1:

Long ago, in a small village on the planet of Krann, there lived a man named Singuard, he lived in a small cottage with his wife Eiyon. One day, while they were sitting in their house, an explosion blasted that seemed to tear their ears in two. Singuard ran outside to see what was going on, and saw a spaceship landing in the center out town, the explosion was fire-work or sorts, it still hung in the sky, taking the shape of a Phoenix, rising from the ground. The ship landed and out from it came men, in red and black armor, with empowered swords at their sides, their leader marhed a few pases in front of them, then turned and said:

"Fellow soldiers, our mission is clear, vengeance! W are the Cult of the Phoenix, rising from the ashes of life! We will cleanse all by conquest and fire! and now, attack, leave no survivors!"

Singuard heard a scream from his house, he ran in, to see his wife fall, dead, killed by a burning arrow, he bowed down in grief. Then something snapped, his fists clenched, and suddenly he stood and gave a mighty roar, he looked at himself, and his rage grew he changed, into a horrible hairy, wolf-like monster. With a snarl he charged out of the house and leapt on the captain of the Cult's army and tore him to shreds. The soldiers, seeing this, attacked, only to get slashed to death by the beast's claws. But, Singuard came to himself, and became human again, seeing himself outnumbered and dreading becoming a beast again, he ran to his house, picked up his dead wife in his arms, jumped out the window and ran accross the arid planes of Krann towards the capital city of the planet. Cult soldiers flowed hm, but soon gave it up and continued their massacre. Half way to the city he collapsed for lack of water. He awoke after half an hour, and saw he was by an oasis, he ran towards it and drank his fill, then with tears in his eyes, he buried his wife by the oasis, and erected a marker made of the wood of a tree that lay neatly chopped nearby (most likely abandoned by traders that came to the oasis not so long ago) the marker had no mark. After a few quiet seconds, he slowly stood, and trudged off to the capital. When he arrived, the sun was setting, and as he approached the castle of the planet's king, an explosion went off, and again, their hung in the sky that accursed symbol of the Cult of the Phoenix. After acquiring an audience with the king, Singuard told everything he knew to the king. After thinking for a few minutes, the king said:

"This news is most distressing Singuard, looks like your leave is over sooner than either of us would like (for Singuard was a sergeant of the king's army), and I'm sorry about your wife, she will be missed by us all. Take your standard command, we haven't had a full-out war since the old days when I was a mere child in my fathers courts. Anyway, do as I said, meanwhile I will contact our allies, this may be bigger than we think."

Singuard nodded and walked down to where the new recruits were training.

"Hows this months batch commander?" SInguard asked the commander in charge f the training center, Lorgrath was his name.

"Ah, Singuard, so glad your here, and sorry about you wife. This grouping shows great potential, but there are a few, uh, 'kinks' that need to be smoothed out."

"The classic youthful rashness?"

"Yes, a few of the lads show no patience whatsoever."

"Hm, the only issue with this issue is that even though its common, you have to treat it differently with every case, theirs no one way to do it."

"Yes indeed, yes indeed, well, we've had some success overcoming it, but a few persist at this childishness."

"Give me a few weeks in command, and we'l see about that."

"I was hoping you'd say that."

 

END OF CHAPTER 1

SO, what'd you think? questions, comments, constructive criticisms? post them here: http://www.bzpower.com/board/topic/17509-legends-of-majna-reveiw/

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Chapter 2:

The next day, the recruits were lined up

"Ok, listen up!" Lorgrath said "This is Seargent Singuard, he'll be taking over command here, treat him with respect, though he is lower rank than me, you will learn much from him, maybe even more than you've learned from me."

Lorgrath walked off, and Singuard was left with the recruits.

"You came here as boys," Singuard began "But you will leave as Men! I's up to you when that happens, patience is a big role in a soldiers training, losing patients might mean you losing your life, and I don't thin you are willing to pay that price. Learn patients, its one of the most important things a soldier can leans. You are dismissed, go get some grub."

The recruits walked of the cafeteria, while one of them walked up to Singuard

"Sergeant Singuard, Sir! Privet Hubert reporting to duty sir!"

"At ease."

"it is an honer to serve under you sir, I know I will learn much."

"Thank you. I hope you will learn, for your sake and mine."

"Yours?"

"Yes, if you cadets fail to learn, I may lose my job."

Hubert walked off to the cafeteria.

 

End of Chapter 2

SO, what'd you think? questions, comments, constructive criticisms? post them here: http://www.bzpower.c...f-majna-reveiw/

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