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Elegy of the Fallen

Poem Mask of Light Elegy

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#1 Offline Soran

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Posted Jun 14 2015 - 01:11 AM

Elegy of the Fallen

By: Soran

 

We’ve had it rough but it isn’t so bad,

Just think of the fun and adventures we’ve had.

Just think of the time we visited the jungle,

Or of snowy plains or even that tunnel.

 

I remember it clearly, when the fear first set.

The shadows arrived, and I was met with a bet.

A life or a mask was all it desired,

But who’s to say that’s all it conspired.

 

When the shadows arrived to claim its reward,

It was met with our strength, our bond restored.

But as darkness crept in, I was greeted with fear,

You noticed my pause and took in the spear.

 

As your body laid limp, my destiny was clear,

I put on the mask and was released from the fear,

I arose with the power and strength the mask gave,

I sought vengeance for myself and the friend I couldn’t save.

 

As the fear crept away I journeyed to the core,

To end all the fear and end this great war.

With light as my guide I fought to the end,

Fighting to avenge the fallen…

 

A Friend.

 

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Backstory:

 

The story this poem is referencing is the events of Mask of Light incase it wasn't clear, specifically about the relationship between Takua and Jaller in overcoming fear, as well as Jaller's sacrifice (hence the term, "Elegy".) It was written from the perspective of Takua/Takanuva.

 

I'll be honest that the real reason for writing the poem was because I like the word "Elegy" and felt the need to plug it in something and since I've been reading a lot of poems recently I felt inspired to try my take on them. I was considering drawing an illustration for it but I didn't feel like making one right now. If I did I'd probably make a short comic featuring the events in the poem. 

 

Overall I'd say I'm pretty satisfied with how it turned out. Only stanzas I'm not too keen on is paragraph 4, stanzas 1 and 2. I feel like using "fear" as a rhyming word more than once wasn't too great, but oh well. I also noticed that I made an accidental reference to Karda-Nui in the last couple stanzas which I thought was pretty cool.

 

Comments and critique are welcome. I'd like to know people's thoughts and where I could possibly improve. Anyway, I hope you guys enjoy the poem.

 

~Soran


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#2 Offline Ghidora131

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Posted Jun 14 2015 - 12:00 PM

You did brilliantly.

 

Although I'm quite surprised you came up with a whole poem based on "Elegy".

 

 

Nicely done!


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