Edited by Sybre, Nov 28 2011 - 11:12 PM.
Delva-Nui: Shadowed Review Topic
Posted Nov 28 2011 - 11:11 PM
Posted Dec 24 2011 - 11:04 PM
Eh, mostly. But I made up Delva-Nui long before I came up with Sybre. I even drew a map or two of it. I even remember what it looks like! And formatting?
So wait, were you the legendary hero who founded Delva-Nui?And I think your epic is good, but perhaps you could work on better formatting. Just a suggestion.
Posted Jan 01 2012 - 04:49 PM
Oh. I get it.
What I meant is that maybe instead of just one large paragraph, you could split up the chapter into different paragraphs to match the tone of each scene.
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