Dane-gerous Posted September 28, 2015 Share Posted September 28, 2015 (edited) Chatper 1The Green Ci-Toa watched the Decepticon with an admiring look in his eye. He had almost forgotten that he was currently bound with energy bonds. An image flickered on Soundwave's face-screen-thing of a toa just like him without a mask. A question mark appeared in front of it. Dane snapped out of his lovesick state. "Oh? What am I? I am a Toa, sir. May I ask why you can't speak? I would love to hear a voice come out of such a handsome..whatever you are." The robot didn't move, the question mark remaining on his "face". It was kind of obvious why. "Is there anything else? These bonds aren't really necessary sir, I'm not going to hurt you." The robot shook his head, before walking towards the door, raising his hand to open it with the control pad. Dane didn't stop him, he was too busy staring at him."Oh, he is a dream."A few hours later, another robot was thrown in the prison with him. This one appeared to be a female. She was relatively small, only a bit bigger than him. He only noticed when she landed right in his face, knocking him over. "Ow. What was that for? I'll have you know I graduated top of my class at the Ga-Matoran seals, and I have over 200 confirmed rahi masks!" The robot looked at him, an angry yet confused look in her face. "It wasn't my fault! I'm a prisoner, like you. And what's a Ga-Matoran?" The toa looked at her like she was stupid. "Man, you guys aren't from around here....where are we anyway?" The blue robot stood up. "Cybertron, aboard the Nemesis." Dane's eyes lit up. "I have a nemesis too. I call him Nato. Or annoying drop bear for short." One of the robot's metallic eyebrows raised. "You got a name?" "Dane, the downfall of BZPower, Memelad, Natosbane..." "I'll just stick with Dane. The name's Arcee. I'd shake your hand if we both weren't restrained." The Toa of Lemons grinned. "Don't worry, I'll get Mr Cool Visor to let us out." The eyebrow shot back up again. "Soundwave? He's like the dictionary definition of an emotionless husk. Right next to Shockwave." "Man, you robot's names are all so stupid. Next we'll find someone called Ham Sandwich." The blue transformer rolled her eyes, and leaned up against the wall, waiting for Soundwave to return. Edited September 28, 2015 by Jayne Cobb 2 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Tahu3.0 Posted September 28, 2015 Share Posted September 28, 2015 This is gonna be a good comedy. Quote I'm just a simple man, trying to make my way in the Matoran Universe Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dane-gerous Posted September 28, 2015 Author Share Posted September 28, 2015 debatable 1 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Petewa Posted September 28, 2015 Share Posted September 28, 2015 Looking good so far, can't wait for more. Quote Mataru Nui, an Interactive Adventure Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kovika: Visorak Lord Posted September 28, 2015 Share Posted September 28, 2015 debatableOh! Don't be such a pessimist! Cheer up! 1 Quote "In this new- Wait, why am I being quoted?!"-Kovika, Toa of Ice, Bread Enthusiast, and Ko-Metru Scholar. [flash=250,100]http://www.brickshelf.com/gallery/sprxtrerme/BANNERS/thornax.swf Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ghidora131 Posted September 28, 2015 Share Posted September 28, 2015 debatableOh! Don't be such a pessimist! Cheer up! Oh! Don't be such an optimist! Go hang out with optimist prime! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Tahu3.0 Posted September 28, 2015 Share Posted September 28, 2015 debatableOh! Don't be such a pessimist! Cheer up! Oh! Don't be such an optimist! Go hang out with optimist prime! True true true true true..................... Quote I'm just a simple man, trying to make my way in the Matoran Universe Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Petewa Posted September 28, 2015 Share Posted September 28, 2015 debatableOh! Don't be such a pessimist! Cheer up! Oh! Don't be such an optimist! Go hang out with optimist prime! Optimist Prime is dead, fool. Quote Mataru Nui, an Interactive Adventure Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
The 1st Shadow Posted September 28, 2015 Share Posted September 28, 2015 Very nice start! I look forward to reading more! Just out of curiosity, will you be wanting a page for this on the Wiki? Quote ~Your friendly, neighborhood Shadow ~Credit for Avatar and Banner goes to NickonAquaMagna~ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dane-gerous Posted September 28, 2015 Author Share Posted September 28, 2015 you can dobut i'm not sure this is canon Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
The 1st Shadow Posted September 28, 2015 Share Posted September 28, 2015 you can dobut i'm not sure this is canonYou're the writer. If you feel it fits in with the rest of the established canon, then we'll call it that and give the canon seal of approval. Quote ~Your friendly, neighborhood Shadow ~Credit for Avatar and Banner goes to NickonAquaMagna~ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Bonkle Posted September 29, 2015 Share Posted September 29, 2015 Your comedy will massively improve through the inclusion of IDW Nightbeat. Quote I been away a long time. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dane-gerous Posted September 29, 2015 Author Share Posted September 29, 2015 how about get out Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dane-gerous Posted October 1, 2015 Author Share Posted October 1, 2015 oh, and don't expect the next chapter to come out any time soonI'm considering abandoning this disgusting mess of a comedy Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dane-gerous Posted October 5, 2015 Author Share Posted October 5, 2015 Chatper 2The Decepticon eventually returned, with a large laser rifle in his hands.The two prisoners stood up, Dane pushing Arcee over. She growled at him, but did nothing.The Decepticon suddenly fired the gun, killing Arcee almost instantly."What did you do that for!" Dane cried. An symbol appeared on Soundwave's visor. It was an Autobot insignia. "What's that?" The Ci-Toa asked.Soundwave shook his head.He then grabbed the Toa by the neck, and began to carry him out of the room. "UGH..CAN'T....BREATHE." Dane croaked, clawing at Soundwave's deceptively (get it lol) strong fingers. The Decepticon walked to the airlock, before pressing the button to open it. He raised his arm, along with Dane as well. He then threw him out of the airlock, down into BZ-Nui below. 1 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Petewa Posted October 5, 2015 Share Posted October 5, 2015 Tough love, 'tis a shame. Quote Mataru Nui, an Interactive Adventure Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dane-gerous Posted October 5, 2015 Author Share Posted October 5, 2015 it seems soundwave is playing hard to get Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Petewa Posted October 6, 2015 Share Posted October 6, 2015 it seems soundwave is playing hard to getOr simply, "doesn't want to be gotten" Quote Mataru Nui, an Interactive Adventure Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dane-gerous Posted October 6, 2015 Author Share Posted October 6, 2015 now YOU'RE the pessimistc: Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Petewa Posted October 6, 2015 Share Posted October 6, 2015 I blame you. Quote Mataru Nui, an Interactive Adventure Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dane-gerous Posted October 6, 2015 Author Share Posted October 6, 2015 alrightI think I may be moving this whole story to the epics sectionand here's whyI'm not very good at writing comedies, but I really really do want to continue thisand I would like to continue this story without shoehorning humour into it Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ghidora131 Posted October 6, 2015 Share Posted October 6, 2015 This was a comedy? *looks at bottom of page* ... Yeah, this is a comedy. I reccomend moving this to epics and making it more serious. I'm definitely liking it so far. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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