Soran here. I was just checking the comics section and stumbled upon this topic and I thought it would be interesting to see what's exactly going down.
Now, I'll go ahead and admit that I was a bit too interested in seeing if the comics lived up to the name. I'll go ahead and spoil it now that they don't. That's just false advertising, click bait even. How dare you. But in all seriousness these are actually all pretty entertaining. Some more than others but I'll get around that later.
First thing I'd like to comment on is how clever of a topic this is. I'm sure there's been something like this in the past but I haven't seen anything like it recently. I know that Multi-Author Series (MAS) were pretty popular for a time (I was a part of a few), but it doesn't look like these comics are part of the same series. Or at least they don't look it upon first impressions. It's more like they're under the same brand. Either way, I'll go ahead and say you guys get an A+ for originality in terms of topic setup, so nicely done.
All right, I think I've given you guys enough compliments, now to move onto the actual comics. The comics themselves are interesting because of the different styles as well as the fact that they're all hand drawn. Now the hand drawn thing is most interesting to me, specifically with how you each delivered the comic. Now, I know this isn't a sure-fire thing but it happens often enough where I figure I'd relate it to you guys. I've noticed that a lot of people who hand draw comics spend a lot of time on the process of drawing the comic and little on the delivery of the joke/story. The artist inside of them takes over and they forget to write down the script they had in their head, they just move onto what they want to draw next. This normally results in very pretty looking comics but often very poor, not thought out jokes or stories. Of course this does not apply to everyone but I'd like to point it out just to give a frame of reference with where I'm going with this.
You guys aren't like that, at all. In fact, almost all the comics posted here so far were entertaining to a greater degree than most I find on the site. They work well and even though the art styles are different the jokes themselves are rather similar in style which gives the impression that these are things you guys came up with together. Now of course, having a similar style of comedy has both positives and negatives but in this case I would say it's mostly positive. They're all entertaining, so nice work.
Okay, now I'm going to move onto each specific comic. This is where I'll truly critique you guys on your individual comics. I'll try not to rip into them too much.
Zippy: Intro Comic - Intro comics are something I try not to judge. It's very rare for anyone to start off a series with a good intro comic and I'll go ahead and say that this is no exception. It isn't by any means bad, it just isn't quite as entertaining. At least for my first impression of the series it ranges quite low (but that's rather common for me). I'm given no context to what's going on in the comic. I don't know who the character is besides the fact that thankfully he has a brain, perhaps he's bipolar? Heck if I know since I don't know anything about him. I'm assuming the character's name is Zippy just based off of the Author's name but that isn't present in the comic itself.
The art style is more or less interesting. It's simple and easy on the eyes. However, the first panel's drawing looked rather crude compared to the following panels, perhaps it's because I can't tell exactly what's going on. I assume he's holding a piece of paper or a (stone) tablet of some kind based off of the text but it's difficult to tell without context. This normally isn't something I judge people on but considering you guys are doing a hand drawn series, you have free range of what you draw and how you draw it in comparison to the usual sprite comics which are must more restrictive. Because of this factor, I have to add a little to my "grading" (critiquing) system.
This particular comic is interesting as well because its the only one of the bunch that I don't recommend coloring. My reason for this is simple, the quality of the picture itself isn't great. You can easily see the different shadows and effects on the white paper instead of it just being a solid color. Because of that, even if you were to color them it would end up looking rather sloppy and unappealing. If you were to attempt to color the comic in the future I would suggest cleaning up the image or scanning and redrawing it on the computer (or at least editing it so that any colors are more or less a solid color instead of different splotches).
The main thing I recommend with this particular comic is to give insight to who the character is. Whether it be through a character sheet or a comic itself, I want to know about the character. By giving the character a personality I as a reader can further judge a particular action. With insight as to who a character is it almost always makes jokes more entertaining and is rarely at all a negative situation. Also, please continue with the cartoonish facial expressions like in panel 3, that panel was probably the most entertaining of the comics released so far. To wrap this one up, it's a good comic, it actually appears vastly different than the others which works well in this case, but there are definitely certain things you can improve on. It's good work, nonetheless.
Akaku: Great minds… - think alike. This particular comic is interesting for one reason and one reason alone. It introduced the idea of a running joke or a deja vu moment. This comic is a prime example of why a comic's order matters. Where Zippy's comic fell flat because of the way he introduced it, yours actually was entertaining for one reason alone. You acknowledged it and you helped give the readers something to think about.
What I thought was great about this particular comic was the fact that you used the same joke as Zippy but also had your character acknowledge it in a way. It now gives the impression that instead of it being Zippy's actual brain in his comic, it's now just a separate entity itself. Perhaps Zippy's brain is so powerful that it can influence others? Who knows, that's for you guys to decide. The art is also quite nice and I'm able to tell what exactly your character is doing during the comic. Because of how close the screen is it's safe to assume that he's on the computer, especially once mentioned that he was doing work (even without the text it's still quite clear).
What did yours fall flat on? Since your comic is pretty much the same as Zippy's it suffers from the same situation. I don't know anything about your character or who he is. It's safe to assume his name is Akaku by the author's name, which isn't stated in the actual comic. He's particularly afraid of outside influences based off of his reaction to the brain. He does some form of work (what it is isn't explained but also doesn't need to). The first panel looks much too sketchy in comparison to the following panels, it looks as if you were trying to reposition the neck several times during the drawing process of the first panel. The writing is legible but barely, this is something that both you and Zippy might need to work on. It shouldn't be an immediate concern but it definitely would help the comic and probably your lives as well (Good writing is helpful, just ask any nurse you know). All in all, it's also a good comic, it's entertaining but it definitely has areas to improve. Great work.
Zahaki: Patience - This one is actually probably the best of the bunch. It has most of the points I brought up before and it treats the comic as anything but an intro comic, it just treats it as an ordinary comic. I'm given context on at least one of the main characters (In this case who Zahaki is) and one of his personality traits as well as a personality trait of a secondary character. It's got good art and good coloring and probably the best (and most clever) joke in the series.
What could be improved upon is different compared to the others thus far. Your text is the most legible so far (probably because it's on a computer) but now that you've transitioned it to a text, this then opens the area to different fonts. To put it plainly, the font you use makes the comic seem monotone. It's very plain and gives no emotion. It might work well with how Zahaki's character is displayed in the comic but it doesn't work nearly as well with how Akaku's character is shown to be. Something more fun and whimsical would work, especially considering this is supposed to be a comedy series (I assume). The image size is also rather large which doesn't work nearly as well here because of the amount of detail you put into the comic. By having it zoom in on not even a panel, it overloads the reader's viewpoints and makes everything disorienting. I'd suggest simply lowering the size of the comic. This also would help make it appear cleaner as a result.
In closing, this comic is probably the best of the bunch. I like the fact that you included the title in the comic (giving context to what the comic is about. It also helps a person to remember which comic they found entertaining), it's very legible and it's got good art and a clever joke. Nicely done.
Zippy: Why - I have no comment besides its gr8
Akaku: Staying Alive - I'll keep this one short because my hands are hurting from the amount of writing I've been doing recently. The art is great, it actually is the best art of all the comics in the topic so far. It's got great perspective, you can see the attitudes of the characters clearly and it's entertaining looking. It's got panache. This is also the only comic I see no problem with having the characters not introduced, the main reason why is because it's a reference. Great work!
In conclusion, the comics themselves are all good. They've got special things about them and they're all unique enough to each other that it adds a level of interest to the audience. Some comics are good while others are great. There are definitely things for you guys to improve in but who doesn't? Hopefully I wasn't too harsh or too soft on you guys, I wanted to keep it strictly unbiased. Anyway, these are definitely something I'll keep an eye on in the forum. I hope you guys create more soon and I look forward to any future comics.
Also, I wish I had an updated trophy or something. I'd totally give you guys a Soran Stamp of Stupendousness. Maybe I'll make one soon.
Edit: I feel like I just wrote a short story.