thanks so much for all your feedback, staffies
here's Sky's updated profile:
Name: Skylor “Sky” Sparrowhawk
Character Type: Hero
Abilities/Equipment: Sky possesses a pair of kinetic propulsion units on her back which allow her to fly and swoop like a bird, including jumping into flight from a standing start. With this power she can soar and glide above the rooftops, although it is not without its limitations. This form of propulsion works using a series of jets - this means that Sky doesn't need to be over a nearby surface to fly, but it is very difficult to hover as to do so means constantly adjusting and changing the direction of these jets to stay relatively stationary. Flying takes about the same amount of effort as running, and going too high deprives her robot body of the oxygen needed for basic functions and cooling mechanisms. She also has a kinetic blaster powerful enough to knock medium sized enemies away, although if she fires it while in the air it requires some close attention to counteract the gun’s recoil. The gun also requires reloading with fresh chemical power cells after twenty seconds of firing, whether fired continuously or in bursts - she carries these power cells at any time that she carries the blaster. The blaster is relatively rapid fire, although there is a delay of between one and two seconds between each shot. In addition to this custom-made weapon, Sky also carries a generic taser - with a range of about a meter and enough spark to put a civilian on the ground. Sky’s build is slight, agile and quick, but only lightly armoured. Her mind is wired to cope well in, and even enjoy, high adrenaline situations, making her reflex time uncommonly good. She is trained in marksmanship.
Appearance: Sky is average height for a hero, but of below average bulk and armour. What armour she has, as well as her frame, appears in varying shades of sky blue, accompanied by small sections of light silver, gunmetal and even white. On her back, the outstretched structures which her kinetic propulsion units are mounted on are shaped like the wings of a bird. They are rigid, but can angle and turn on ball joints, while the jets mounted on them can swivel themselves - all of this can be adjusted by Sky with a thought. The wings are coloured blue and white, with the colours of the ‘feathers’ alternating. All of her form is constructed in a streamlined way so that every component fits together gracefully. Her hero core and eyes are somewhere between gold and silver in colour, and glow. Sections of her body have been tattooed (although ‘graffitied’ might describe it better) with gold, silver and cyan writing and symbols - a touch she has added herself. Sky’s helmet is as streamlined as the rest of her, and includes a large transparent visor that can appear over her eyes - information about Sky’s environment can also be projected onto the inside of this visor. Like most hero helmets, Sky’s has a built-in communicator and can fold back into a more open mode when not in use.
Bio: Sky is a relatively new Hero, having served the Hero Factory for a little under six months. With large sections of the Hero Factory having been destroyed in that time, she missed a notable amount of the training which a hero would usually receive, and so is relatively inexperienced. To give her at least some exposure to the outside world, she was sent on a variety of relatively low risk operations around the city alongside more accomplished teams. From the start, she was a wild card, searching for excitement and intrigue in even the most mundane of tasks. Throughout her so far short life serving the Hero Factory, she has proved somewhat useful, but also unruly and unserious. Her rebellious nature (and she would laugh to hear it called anything so severe) has gone so far as to disobey (or ‘reinterpret’) direct orders on more than one occasion. At the moment, she still seeks adventure within Makuhero City.
things that have been changed include:
-clarification on how flight works
-clarification and balancing for the blaster
-reduction of number of weapons
-tweaking of backstory to make more sense
Edited by The Silent King, Jun 17 2016 - 05:19 PM.