Dane-gerous Posted July 30, 2016 Share Posted July 30, 2016 This is the review topic for my new epic, Retribution.Please give criticism, or just generally talk about the epic if you want! 2 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Bonkle Posted July 30, 2016 Share Posted July 30, 2016 I'm liking it so far. I appreciate the writing style. Instead of telling things straight up it's all revealed over time through your thoughts. Looking forward to more, and to seeing what comes of me. Quote I been away a long time. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dane-gerous Posted July 30, 2016 Author Share Posted July 30, 2016 Thank you, and trust me, you're going to be in here more. 1 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Bonkle Posted July 30, 2016 Share Posted July 30, 2016 Also, your sig code doesn't work with British English. Quote I been away a long time. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dane-gerous Posted July 30, 2016 Author Share Posted July 30, 2016 What do you mean? Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Bonkle Posted July 30, 2016 Share Posted July 30, 2016 You already fixed it. I was referring to your "centre" when it only works with "center" Quote I been away a long time. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dane-gerous Posted July 30, 2016 Author Share Posted July 30, 2016 Ah, ok. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Petewa Posted July 31, 2016 Share Posted July 31, 2016 Pretty good so far, I'm excited to see how this'll progress. Quote Mataru Nui, an Interactive Adventure Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ToaDraconixMahvi Posted July 31, 2016 Share Posted July 31, 2016 (edited) Edit: due to it clutching slightly, I had to fix what was in the "" bits. I have been rendered into a "what the...?" mindset. Bonkle? Of all the custom Le-Matoran names I have seen, that one is actually appropriate. Remember, they play instruments. Edited July 31, 2016 by ToaDraconixMahvi Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dane-gerous Posted July 31, 2016 Author Share Posted July 31, 2016 No, Bonkle is a reference to a member here on BZP. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Bonkle Posted August 3, 2016 Share Posted August 3, 2016 That was pretty gruesome. I'm wondering what this guy is capable of. Too bad we never got more colors like silver for the Turaga Masks. Quote I been away a long time. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dane-gerous Posted August 3, 2016 Author Share Posted August 3, 2016 It's actually only silver because that's the default state for a mask before it is bonded to a user in my head canon. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Bonkle Posted August 3, 2016 Share Posted August 3, 2016 Yeah, that's what I follow too. But it still would have been nice for six colors for great and noble and then gold and silver for both as well. Quote I been away a long time. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dane-gerous Posted August 3, 2016 Author Share Posted August 3, 2016 I've always wanted a black noble Matatu but alas, it was not to be. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Bonkle Posted August 3, 2016 Share Posted August 3, 2016 I mean, it did happen, even if it was not meant to be. (We're gettin off topic) Quote I been away a long time. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dane-gerous Posted August 3, 2016 Author Share Posted August 3, 2016 Oh yeah, sorry. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dane-gerous Posted August 23, 2016 Author Share Posted August 23, 2016 Sorry I'm being a little vague about some of the details right now, but all will be revealed in time.New chapter coming in about 2 days or so.Maybe later, depending on how much I procrastinate. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Bonkle Posted August 23, 2016 Share Posted August 23, 2016 Vagueness is good. It keeps the story going by extending reveals. It's what I tried to do last time I did one of these. I particularly liked the prison scene, I don't know why. It was really well-written to me. The present-day battle was nice too. Quote I been away a long time. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dane-gerous Posted August 23, 2016 Author Share Posted August 23, 2016 I had a lot of fun writing the prison scene, even if my computer tried to delete it multiple times.Glad you liked the chapter though. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dane-gerous Posted September 4, 2016 Author Share Posted September 4, 2016 New chapter up, this time with zero flashbacks. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Bonkle Posted September 5, 2016 Share Posted September 5, 2016 Very edgy as you said. Looking forward to seeing what's in the new dimension. Quote I been away a long time. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dane-gerous Posted September 5, 2016 Author Share Posted September 5, 2016 I have quite a bit planned. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Bonkle Posted September 25, 2016 Share Posted September 25, 2016 Okay, that last part was supremely edgy. Still interesting though. Sounds like some almost.... Demented stuff is next. Quote I been away a long time. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dane-gerous Posted September 25, 2016 Author Share Posted September 25, 2016 Kek, you haven't seen the meaning of edgy yet. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dane-gerous Posted October 28, 2016 Author Share Posted October 28, 2016 Alright, here's the deal, folks. I'm currently working on things other than this epic that take a lot of time. Now, that doesn't mean I'm abandoning this, just means the next chapter won't be here for a while. Just a warning. 1 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dane-gerous Posted March 8, 2017 Author Share Posted March 8, 2017 After a long contemplation, I have decided I was unhappy with both of those last chapters. I've nulled them, because I didn't want to abandon this epic at all, and I'm going to start working on a few more chapters, in replacement. I'm back, but certainly not consistent. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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