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#1 Offline Mahou Shoujo Mega Man

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Posted Dec 30 2011 - 12:00 PM

BIONI-LORDS BOOK 3: KAKO PREVIEW 5

As for the castle in question, it was an ancient structure of unclear origin--some say it was built by one of Le-Isle's earliest founders, and others prefer the more mystical story that it was something built by the people of the Lost Continent (or some such nonsense). Whatever its genesis, over the years it had become to be a thing of fear to the people of Le-Isle, the darkest legend of the sky-reaching island circulated around campfires and told to easily frightened children. Such an infamous location, as I am sure you will agree, requires a lengthy explanation, sparing no detail, and to do so I will now briefly pause the forward progression of our tale.The (supposedly) haunted castle was situated on a cliff on the edge of Le-Isle, and on an island reaching so far into the sky, this precarious location alone is enough to frighten many. An architect, however, would do all he could to set aside this fear long enough to examine the structure, for it was, in a sense, a well-aged work of art. The three-story castle covered an area almost as large as half of the rest of the city, built with gray stone that had withstood time's onslaught surprisingly well, and with a low wall (more for show than anything else) that sported a black barred gate, which was connected to the castle's large double doors by a winding dirt road. The outer walls of the castle itself were topped with bronze ornaments shaped like eagles, which were spaced evenly across is length and seemed to keep a constant watch over the entire property.What was perhaps the most noticeable aspect of this castle, however, were the seven silver spires that rose up from the castle's outer walls, which formed a circle around a lone, looming tower that shot up from the center of the building. Keeping in mind the elevation of Le-Isle, building spires that seem to reach farther towards the sky seems odd in a way, and considering that the tower is even taller than said spires is even stranger. The tower had a conical roof and one wide window that faced the gates of the property, a window that, for as long as anyone could remember, had been covered from within by a dusty white curtain, as if the castle would allow no outsider even the slightest glimpse at whatever it hid within. This notion, of course, sounds a bit ridiculous, but leads us directly to the more extravagant legends surrounding this building.The oldest, and perhaps silliest story was that this castle belonged to a vampire--a cold-hearted demon who would slip out in the midst of night to drink human blood, and then return to his castle in time to avoid the sun's light, which would prove fatal to him. Supposedly, this legend was started several generations prior to when our young heroes arrived on Le-Isle, at a time when there were several unexplained deaths in town, and the few who did try to enter the castle were later found dead at its gates. Some time after, it was discovered that the deaths were caused by an outbreak of disease, but the mystery of why so many corpses turned up at the castle gates caused this legend to live on, as it has not been solved to this day. Most inhabitants of Le-Isle have reasoned that, if a vampire did live in this castle, there would be far more unexplained deaths--the result of said vampire acquiring nutrition from the blood of the villagers.Yet, another strange phenomena should be reported: in recent years, new stories have spread that, with little consistency or predictability, there are several occasions when a light can be seen from behind the curtain in the tower's window, accompanied by an odd sound. By odd, we do not mean it is difficult to ascertain what this sound is, for that is quite clear--but what is strange is that this sound should come from within a castle so mysterious, and one thought to be abandoned. This sound we refer to is (as the stories go) the sound of one violin, which plays a melody of untold sadness and despair as its unseen player stands anonymous in the ominous tower. We must take special care to express the full nature of this song--a song said to be so melancholy that it casts a pall of hopelessness over the heart of any who hear it, as if Misery herself were the composer of this mysterious tune. Those who still give credit to the legend of the vampire think this song is played by some sad maiden, captured by the demon and locked up within the castle to be kept alive as a source of food for the rest of her days. However, the ridiculousness of any legend involving a vampire causes us to dismiss this story, and we prefer to leave it unexplained than to explain it with something so improbable.This explanation should (hopefully) suffice, so we now return to our heroes…

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Posted Dec 30 2011 - 01:32 PM

Um, I hope that that's the only chapter that mentions...Vampires or anything like that. I go into a death rage whenever that kind of stuff is mentioned.
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Posted Dec 30 2011 - 01:36 PM

It's mainly just some background superstition...although there are vampires in the World of the Dead, and I might do something set there in the future. But I won't be doing much with vampires, since Twilight ruined them. Forever.
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Posted Dec 30 2011 - 01:49 PM

And that is something that I am forever thankful for. Anywho, I can't wait for Kako or The Forgotten Bond.
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Posted Dec 30 2011 - 01:52 PM

And I can't wait to share them! :D I've been waiting a long time to release them both...
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Posted Dec 30 2011 - 02:23 PM

It shows...
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Posted Dec 30 2011 - 08:49 PM

Wow...I love this preview so much right now.I can really see how your writing has improved since the first book, especially visual descriptions. Very impressive, that. ^_^
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Posted Dec 30 2011 - 10:48 PM

awesome description writing, can't wait for the first chapter!! Also, "the sound of one violin, which plays a melody of untold sadness and despair" reminds me of the violin version of One Piece's Bink's Sake - there wouldn't be a revived skeleton (with an afro) within the tower would there? ^_^
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Posted Dec 31 2011 - 12:05 PM

Glad you liked it! :D I'm trying a lot harder with visuals in this Book--you'll finally find out what islands and Battlefields actually look like! And no, no skeletons...at least, I'm not planning any yet, heheh...
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Posted Dec 31 2011 - 11:10 PM

Bahahaha, you sure know how to entice a reader!! And it'll be awesome 'seeing' what the islands 'look' like.
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