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This is the review topic for my story Nuparu's Folly.

 

Sorry if this is kinda not what you wanted but I really did like the idea of writing about Krahka so here we are. Tell me what you like and dislike.

 

New entries should be in every week, if not, the week after.

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I'm liking this so far. I'm wondering if our mech operator is one of the top dwellers with the fractured minds or perhaps someone or something deeper.

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I'm not spoiling anything, but the next chapter might reveal a few more clues. Thank you for the review, by the way.

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This is an interesting setting... I'm guessing Matau's appearance means it's not set in the official canon. (I was thinking at first Krahka was wandering around the MU after Makuta had been defeated.) But you're building a cool narrative; I'm especially intrigued by the mech operator, and am expecting a cool reveal since you're doing so much to hide his identity. :P My main complaint are that the chapters are so short that the read's over quickly and now I have to wait to see what happens next. ;)

 

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Yeah, length's something I tend to struggle with, with these types of stories. I'm hoping this next chapter can make up for it (it is still coming, for those who are still waiting)

 

Thank you for the criticism.


 

 

 

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